Broadhoof Memorial Psychiatric Hospital: the goal of many prestigious psychiatric doctors all over Equestria. Where countless ponies are treated and cured daily of debilitating disease through careful study and progress.
If only it was that easy...
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Even after working as an editor for this, I still have no idea how I feel about this story. I enjoyed it; I do know that.
I quite enjoyed it as well. I'm normally not a fan of 2nd-person stories, but this one was very interesting, I loved the characters, and found the story to be well put together. A good one-shot story, in my opinion.
:D
I must say, it was an interesting ride. Not often do you see an asylum from the eyes of the doctor.
Well, I usually don't care for second-person perspective, and this story sadly wasn't an exception. However, it was also good enough that, after a while, I stopped noticing the perspective; well done. I'm not entirely clear on what happened with the changeling, though.
Some spotted typos:
There were some broken italic tags I noticed; you can probably find them by searching for "[i".
"One filly looks up at you excitedly.
“I got my cutie mark!” he exclaims and points to his flank."
"Filly" is specifically female; this ought to be "foal" or "colt".
2246501 ok thank you. I know the 2nd person isn't that popular and I probably won't try it again but I'm glad you at least didn't notice after a while.
This is a remarkably well written and intriguing story, very well done: this is easily one of my favourite one-shot stories.
2349577 Thank you so much!
Do you mean of our own?
2467026 While that is the more correct way of saying it, saying "all our own" is also acceptable and fits with the speech I wanted Haven to have.
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Never knew that was grammatically correct. Huh
2467186 Granted it might be somewhat archaic but in speech it's still allowed.
i can't even begin to question how difficult it must be to figure out the crazies when you live in a world where magic exists.
*gasp*
PONIFIED SELF-INSERT!
Being new to fanficdom, the very idea of a story written in the second person struck me as incredibly bizarre. And early on I was so unaccustomed to it that I said to myself "naw, I'm not gonna read this," and yet I kept reading. And now that I've finished it I wish there were more. So kudos to you.
2712888 Well, thank you very much :) I'm glad you gave it a chance.
Interesting choice to have yourself as the primary patient of the story. As a Psych major, this was quite a lovely read, and the realization that it was you/your pony/what have you as the mare with the fondness for cranes and a disgust with her own voice makes me all sorts of curious. Have to wonder just how much of yourself went into that part.
Also, the obvious references were appreciated. Surprised no one has said anything about Nurse Ratchet...
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Funny, no one has asked that before. The answer is one you might have guessed: It very much autobiographical... maybe exaggerated a tiny bit.
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Intriguing. I'd hope it was exaggerated more than a tiny bit, considering some of what Miss Error goes through in this piece.
2853214 lol, I mean more like who I am is very strong in this piece but any of the events that happened to her are pick-and-choose real or made up.
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I figured as much. Forgive me if my humor is a bit dry at times. Raised on British and Canadian comedy by a pair of Deadpan Snarkers.
Do you have any plans to do more with this? I'd be lying if I said this wasn't my favorite piece I've read of yours.
2855439 I've debated doing it. Right now I have too much else that I need to do :/ lol I'm glad you enjoyed this though! I think it took me a whole stinkin' month to write.
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Only a month? I'm impressed. I would have figured something of this length and quality was a longer labor of love.
It took me about a week or two to finally finish pulling Secrets out of my ass, and that was under three thousand words, if I recall.
2863500 Well, with this one I had a flock of editors helping me and the words came pretty easily. Each story takes its own time :)
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True, true. Still, an impressive feat, one that earns my kudos.
fairly itneresting thing, though a little too dark i would think. largely with the changling thing. its seems unlikely changlings actually kill ponies they replace. that is why they are able to create those cocoons, to hold them hostage....... let alone why one would infiltrate an asylum.
Shoot, why isn't there a pony in the show named Crank?
This was pretty great! It's nice that a story like this had a happy ending, at least for some of the characters (I'm assuming that Type did get to leave shortly after, right?)
In any case, this was cool. Very very awesome.
3684455 Thank you :) and yeah, Type did get to leave a few months after the story when she was able to move on.
glad you liked it.
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That's good to know!
I kind of want to do a sketch or something of Type. I've done a bit of fanart for Asylum.
3685038 O_O...really?
I would love that if you do do it 
3686977 Yep!
I like her story arc, particularly the fact that she actually does get better.
3687994 I'm glad! To be honest I wrote this when I was moving on from a break-up and her story arc is sort of my story in that regard.
My only complaint is the lack of Rainbow Dash or any of the mane six.
It's been 133 weeks since anyone last commented on this story, so I'm not too hopeful, but I have a quick question: Would you be able to explain to me what happened with the changeling? I didn't follow what was going on there, but it seems a shame to miss it. Thank you.
Other than that I really enjoyed this story very much indeed! Thank you.
Its been awhile since anyone commented on this but I was just wondering if someone could explain to me what happened with Shutter's foal and her father? I love this story a lot but no matter own many times I reread it is never figure it out.
This was a beautiful story
So um Haven killed Inkwell?