Writer, Editor, and Shipper of Good Ships. Your typical cotton candy haired lesbian. Yes, I have pronouns. No, you can't have them.
Finally, it happened. Rainbow Dash finally got her Cutie Mark and performed a Sonic Rainboom. It could not be any more perfect. But... whatever happened to that cream colored filly she was defending?
A very simple one-shot as to what happened to Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy after they got their Cutie Marks.
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This was very seriously impressive, I loved Gilda's cameo, and seeing her as friend or foe is always bad ass. A few errors here and there but all in all perfect, really made my day and was very cute, you did seriously well, I loved it.
1900263 Thank you.
1900268 Never a problem, I have a lot of respect for your writing
Very cute. Nice job!
1900614 Thanks.
Quite frankly, I've been experimenting far too much with other stuff (darker genres that just sucked), but I think this is where I work best. It's so simple, yet I did work quite hard on it. So I'm glad to see people enjoy this. I just hope to see more soon; can't help but want more viewers, hunh? Oh, well!
Sorry, I got distracted....It is very cute and heart warming and canon :P
So nice writing. Did not really spot any mistakes.
1900934 Thank you.
Now I only wish I knew why two people already dislike it? I shouldn't be too bothered, but since the ratio right now is pretty small, hopefully if more people somehow read it, I'll feel better. Hopefully tomorrow, after school, it'll be all good. But whatever, I'm just glad to get comments of any positive kind like yours, no matter the like to dislike ratio.
It could be any reason at all. Some readers hate one shots. Others maybe do not like the characters, or maybe they are being mean? 1900959
1900963 Eh, like I said, I won't be too bothered by it, unless, say, the dislikes overcome the likes--but I'm not that bad of a writer, that much I can say about myself. Hah.
1900979 As i messaged you via PM, i have pre-read this story and now i am sure when i say that is gorgeous better tan mine, really
I hope that you can do something as good as this every time you want ^^
*sigh* Well, some people just aren't very nice. There's a story with a similar premise, *Keeping Your Hooves on the Ground,* but it plays out entirely differently and this one isn't like it at all, so maybe some people are cruising by, looking at the description, and hitting the down button without even looking at it. But that missing moment---what happened to Fluttershy and Dash after the race--is a perfectly natural one for a story, and I think any writer's entitled to explore it. In fact, I'm a sucker for it, which is why I read this one!
It's just true that you can't please all the people all of the time. I can see at least one reader loved having Gilda in the story, and I didn't, so you couldn't make both of us happy!
One suggestion: I got confused by the section in italics and didn't exactly understand it was a memory or a flashback, so maybe you could signal that to the reader a bit more, with a graphic or something. That's up to you.
Take or leave whatever criticism. By the way, I uprated. Cute story!
1904109 Thanks for the suggestion about the memory/flashback. I wasn't aware of that and I'll keep that in mind next time.
As for what you said, I couldn't agree more. I am aware it's a similar concept to "Keeping Your Hooves on the Ground" (in fact, I favorited it). However, any idea is a writer's free will to write about--so long as it's done well. While it's not an idea horribly beaten to death, I have seen it around so people probably just downvote because of that. That, I'm aware of, so I'm not too distressed about it or whatever. But thanks for your input.
1902861 Well, I have a few other story ideas working out (my profile tells about two of them that are closest to being finished), so I hope so to. Thanks!
This is a story that needed to be told - what happened after.
Someone has finally written it and done it well!
I remember horrible times at camps... nice to see Fluttershy wanted to stay
2012520 Thank you! People always love to write about such deep, complicated concepts, but as for me, for the most part, I like to keep it simple. And I'm glad to hear others like it that way, too.
D'aaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwww.
Awww what a nice heart warming story. Good job Missy, I really enjoyed it!
The feels, the feels are strong in this one.....
very creative my dear friend, I love that beutiful moment:
“Y... you're the one who stood up for me from those boys,” stated the filly quietly as if it just came to her now. Perhaps it did. At Rainbow's smirk, the weak flier smile gently at the ground. “Thank you.”
“It's no problem.” Rainbow waved a dismissive hoof, and then brushed it to her chest. “Those idiots didn't know who they were messing with.”
that got me right on the Dawwwwww
This one... isn't your best work. The narration is too telly and the dialogue from minor characters feels stilted. I'm guessing this is one of your early works and you didn't have an editor?
*reads authors note*
Oh, four prereaders. Oops.
Also, it wouldn't have hurt if you had Fluttershy mention the animals as a reason not to head back up to camp, maybe not necessarily hiding behind them as an excuse, but definitely wanting to spend more time with them before leaving. And you definitely should've had her say goodbye to them before she and Rainbow left (much to Dashie's frustration? Hm, maybe.).