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It was nearing Hearth's Warming Eve. Everypony ran around doing last-minute preparations and some were going on dates. Only one pony wasn't running around like the rest. She didn't have a special somepony to go with to to the Hearth's Warming Eve dance at Ponyville park. But how? After all her name is Love Checker. How could she be one of the ponies who didn't have a date at all? She'll find out soon that this was just the beginning of her problems.
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Hope y'all like the story! I'll enjoy constructive critism more thank you. Anything that can help the story is good to me. Tell me some ideas to. Thx.
Oh! Almost forgot ! Tell me if there are words that are needed to be corrected.
Funny. Personally, I prefer ScootalooxSpike.
(Joke) Alt. Title: Clopfic! There's A Clopfic! OH, Clopfic! Woah, That's A Clopfic!
Alright, seems pretty good. Earned a like, fav, and a follow.
Well that was short.
Is anyone willing to make a cover for this story? If so, PM me. I'm really desperate.
Hm, a very nice story. I don't think I've ever seen the idea of a pony whose special talent is esentially being a matchmaker explored, and I must say I like the irony of a pony who can sense love, yet can't find her own special somepony. I do think the chapters may be a bit too short, and the paragraphs could be spaced better, but overall it's a good story. Keep up the good work!
Thanks Firehooves.
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Name of Story: Oh for loves sake
Grammar score: 6-7
Pros
seemed like a nice enough story the oc was cool and had some interesting powers.
i liked how you set up the triangle
Cons
it seems way to jumpy and jumbled... sorry but it was really hard to read and even though i had interest in it you didnt manage to keep my interest peeked...
Notes : i would like to help you rewrite this if possible and organize your thoughts i know how you wanted this to be but it was just too jumpy.
Please help me by reading my story: nah you read mine
Hiyaaa, SpeederClaw here from Authors Helping Authors. I've got a fresh review right here for ya!
-Oh! For Love's Sake!
Grammar Score: 6/10
Pros
-Love interests are intriguing/interesting
-Overall innocence/happy-go-lucky tone is fluent throughout the story
-Your OC seems very original with the triangle concept of love
Cons
-Grammarrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
-Sometimes the story was hard to follow at times (sometimes due to grammar issues), but I still got it
Notes: So with grammar:
-Rainbowdash is supposed to be Rainbow Dash (two words)
-There are other spacing, period and spelling issues along with capitalization
-The writing in the journal might want to be italicized for effect
Those are just some errors that you might want to fix. Love Checker seems like a good OC and you have good use of suspense building up between Lightning and Swift. I liked the story despite the issues and you should continue.
I hope this review was helpful and would like you to check out my story, One Shot, One Chance, if you have the time. Keep writing
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Story Name: Oh, for love's sake
Grammar Score: 5
Pro's: You seem to have a clear view of what you are aiming for and trying to achieve
You have some interesting ideas blended in; Loves' talent and cutie-mark are well explained
Loves' innocence and inability to see who fancies her is well portrayed [Personal or 2nd hand experience perhaps]
Con's: Your sentences don't flow well due to the way you jump back and forth between points of interest.
You need to pick a format/pattern to layout the text in and stick to it as it keeps changing
Each time the speaker changes put the text on a new line. You will find that this will break up the large paragraphs quite neatly and allow for easier reading and editing.
Notes: Its good start. I can tell you know what you what to say and what feeling you are trying to create but it is being disturbed by the grammar and sentence structures. Some simple chances can make a big difference to the way the story reads so go and find some different sentence structure and put them to use! Keep it up!
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Story: Oh! For Love's Sake!
Grammar score: 5
Pro: The OC's power and charterer is interesting
Love the happy tone of the story
Cons: Grammar
Due to the jumping from topic to topic it a little hard to read
Notes: Overall, I find this to be a cute story, but a little confusing to read. In some places the sentences are missing words or aren't a complete thought and the grammar in general could use work. If you could get someone to help you with grammar and keeping your thoughts organize it would improve the quality of the story greatly.
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Thx for the tips. i am quite sorry, but i can't review and red your stories at the momment. i am busy with schoolwork. sorry for the inconvience.
For fans of Oh! For Love's sake
i cannot post some chapters for now. but i'll try to. so sorry for making u wait.
I'm inspired to write a story like this, except for Hearts and Hooves Day.
I loved it! 
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Story: Oh! For Love's Sake!
Grammar score: 5
Pro: Really original, love how you made the love triangle thing(Trust me I tried to do that, but I couldn't) It's short and sweet, a nice change from the action and adventure I usually read.
Cons: Grammar and the pacing, and format(Need a proofreader or editor?)
Notes: I love the story, very original. A bit jumpy here and there, but I can understand(Check out my first fic, I wasn't sure where I was going with that) You could try to do double spacing for paragraphs
Like this;
"Twilight?" I asked as I walked through the empty library. It was weird, so quiet...
"Huh? Midnight? Don't come down to the basement!" Twilight yelled from down below. I was curious but I decided to follow her what she said and waited for her on the first floor.
Time went one, I took a seat at the table. She's been there for an hour now. After a few more minutes she came out with a large birthday cake.
"Happy birthday, Midnight!" She said with a happy tone.
Or something like that
or you could try this guide
Ezn's Guide