The sequel to The Adventures of Cyborg Braeburn by: totallynotabrony
Braeburn leaves Ponyville to do some soul searching. Unfortunately for him a certain orange pony decided to give him some upgrades before hand.
Despite this will Braeburn be able to find something to live for in a new location?
Probably not.
Special thanks to totallynotabrony for cover pic and editing.
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AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH-
yeah
Here's a link to the original story.
YES YES YES YES YES YES YES!
I was just thinking yesterday, that after all those stories with Vampire Cheerilee, Why we haven't seen more Cyborg Braeburn.
I think the whole thing about Valient believing himself to be an alien being relatively public knowledge, and his alien refences being relatively obvious now..
Oh, and he has a can opener, a gun, and fingers.... This is going to be epic...
Now this I'd read more of.
i.imgur.com/XRa82.gif
...*Makes the go on motion with his hoof*
Finally got around to reading this. Robocop Braeburn is best pony.
I suddenly have an image of braeburn walking in the wheel and using his gadget arm to sort cherries. Jubilee will faint in joy.
1691113 Thanks for the idea.
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I think my face just froze in joy 
Definitely happy to give ideas, it seems to be my special talent.
Uh, I could have edited this for you.
1709153 After what happen last time with goggle docs I didn't really trust it. I'll admit that this is shorter and not as good as the first chapter, but this was more for seting up the future chapters. Don't worry the next chapter will be more interesting since I have a action scene planned.
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Oh snap!
Honestly, I didn't even realize that this story was by a different person.
They are all ROBOTS
I gotta say I kinda wish you'd let him help or let someone else help. I'm enjoying this so far but the spelling and grammar issues really stick out and detract from the story for me.
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Yup, you should've asked TNaB or somebody for editing help.
1714800 Yeah, well last time google docs kinda sucked because after the editing was done it wouldn't let me copy, paste. plus it made my computer freeze, so the first chapter was almost lost, but thanks to TNaB it wasn't. Still I now don't trust google docs, so I didn't have another choice.
(Joke) Alt. Title: Iron Braeburn
...another type of floral predator? Ingenious!
Awaiting further releases.
1811220 Sorry it took so long. First I was hit with some good ol' writer's block, then that personal stuff I talked about in that blog entry, and then I was sick for almost 4 day.
Hopeful the next chapters will take less time to make.
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I see.
ROOT BEER WANTS SOME ANSWERS!!!
answers to things like WHERE BRAEBURN GOT HIS UPGRADES!!!
muahahahahahaha!
So does braeburn know his grandmother died of supercancer?
1918923 I write so much slower than TNaB so in this story that hasn't happened yet. Since he left durning One Bad Apple and two weeks have past then this chapter is around the time of Sleepless in Ponyville, which that fact will be shown in the next chapter.
Very fun story, I'm really enjoying seeing things from Brae's POV. I couldn't help but D'awww at the end of this chapter. It just felt so wonderful and sweet. Even though I know you may well screw him over again.
Couple small typos I noticed
box pasta should be box of pasta
entasis should be emphasis
This. This is why I have lols.
2033016 Fixed.
Also, don't worry I'm not going to screw over Braeburn. I Pinkie Promise.
If you want more D'awww moments than I'd recommend another one of my stories "Spawn of Disharmony", as long as you don't mind Black OC/Mane 6 Member Shipping.
I was kind of expecting a punchline where he shattered her pelvic bone.
2034219 She could just be really resilient, or maybe she was the one on top. I don't know.
D'aww.
You do realise that Valiant is going to have to abduct Braeburn now, so that he can fix up the busted leg.
Ending seems a little rushed, but I like the pairing.
I dunno, a gun seems like the last thing Valiant would get wrong. Unless he assumed that the first thing Braeburn would do with it was turn it on him.
I also think that the ending seems a little rushed, although "the story ended too quickly" isn't exactly the worst possible complaint.
2071048 Nah, he's too busy with the Black twins.
2071352 2071422 I'm not so sure which part is being called rushed, so I'll adress both.
*Quick Draw running away- Yeah, after I had Braeburn's hoof explode I couldn't think of a way to end the fight, yet hey if a piece of metal got lodged into my eye, I'd run away too. But yeah that was kinda me trying to end the story so I'd be done with it and can work on other ideas I have.
*Braeburn and Cherry Jubilee saying that they love each other- yeah okay they've only been together for a short time, but I needed a sweet note to end on, and come on in the world of fanfiction, where you can find instalove more offen than change on a sidewalk, that isn't too bad. Is it?
2072558 I was talking about the confrontation with Quick Draw- He came out of nowhere and didn't really do much beyond threaten Cherry a couple of times and lose an eye. It ended much too quickly after it started for my tastes. He felt less like a character and more like a forced plot device.
2072972 you really summed it up perfectly. We never hear of the guy before this chapter and then poof he's there and poof he's gone. The way you mentioned made him sound more important than he ended up being. I would've preferred something like this:
Have minotaur mention in this chapter or previous even that saloon has been getting rowdier. then have some random drunk show up and try to rob the ranch having heard rumours of Brae but dismissing them since he barely leaves the ranch. that way when he beats him up it's less of a letdown and more like the small footnote it was meant to be.
The love thing well I'd personally have had Brae say yes because you make me happy rather than *ping* I love you.
Honestly while the ending was rushed it didn't stop this from being a really cute fic. Definitely want to read more of your stuff.
2072972 Yeah, the forced plot point thing is kinda correct, but Quick Draw was mentioned earlier in the fic, still who knows there's a chance that I, or someone else can write a spin off or sequel where we get to know Quick Draw better, hell since this is in the Dream universe totallynotabrony or those two other guys that co-wrote Science, Steam and Beer can use him if they want. Really if anyone who wants to use him can, I don't really care.
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAH
4819987 ...Umm what does that have to do with anything?
ohhh myyy....
Cybernetics is cool. He really should see to getting better fitting armor, though.
"Giant mushy friend." Nice TLA reference.
I love that you named one of your characters after birch beer. Most people have never even heard of it, and it's one of the greatest drinks ever created.
MOAR BRAEBURN! Maybe, if I ever get the time, I'll try writing a story in which Valiant, Trixie, Sunset, Braeburn, Zombie Discord (my own idea), and the CMC go to the EQG world and wreak havoc. Maybe Valiant finds his own sleeping body or something.
my mom and my dad were never even in a relationship to begin with. so my dad never knew he had a son until I was 4 (he lived in italy)