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Matt was just a normal twenty year old programmer when his life was flipped upside down. Matt would never be the same after the terrible accident that sent him to an other world. What world you ask. Let me answer that with a question. "Have you ever heard of My Little Pony?"
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I am trying for staurday.
Why is everyone posting stories and updates that I want to look at while I'm trying to fix all the mass of errors in my own story?!
I promise I'll get to this later...today...
*Edit: Not a bad start. I'd advise you reread your story out loud to yourself, slowly. That's a great way to hunt down errors, especially if your chapters are short. You have a few missing words and comas from what I can tell.
The first chapter and prologue have impressed me, seems to be a good story.
I just hope that they let him out of his prison in the future, or that the prologue was just the beginning of an end chapter
However, how do so many guys get so good ratings in such a short time? I mean my latest story got downvoted 2 times before I got the first like
Hm I have no idea if this is going to be good or not so I'm going to put it in my read later section.
Well... The concept interests me, but for the love of god please get an editor. This story was riddled with grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors that it made it hard for me to read. I'll still fave, but until I see the grammar and other stuff improving, I'll hold on to my like.
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just kidding. i like it... moar!
Another great chapter!
Wait, is he a brony or just somewhat aware of the show? I'm not sure if thats been established.
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He is a brony but not a really avid one. He does know most of the backround character's fan personalities though
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Ah, Good to know!
A few grammatical errors here and there, but good nonetheless.
Hm good story, but the chapters are a bit short.
Sorry about the wait. Feedback is welcome.
*Claps hands* Very good very good can't wait for the next chapter
But I freakin' love this.
Hm magic sickness eh.
I feel like this is opening a lot of possibilities.
Wether the things happen that I think about is up to the writer I suppose.
I'm not trying to flame unnecessarily, but why would anyone believe some crazy kid who randomly says My Little Pony is real? Wouldn't people have just considered him a pyscho and moved on with their lives? I haven't read the rest of the story, but if it does explain it, it's still really not a good way to open up a tale, like that, Just saying.
At the end you said booth instead of both twice.
Good story so far.
1916527 Fixed thank you for telling me.
Neat chapter. Keep up the awesome work dude.
This story is decent, but it isn't really that great, and I'll tell you why. You lack punctuation, and that's what kills the story for me... I mean, c'mon. When someone yells, you don't put a period like this-
“I said that was fine with becoming a citizen. Not being transformed into something I didn’t know was real a week ago.” Matt shouted.
The lack of punctuation kills the emotion of the dialogue. Try it like this instead-
"I said that I was fine with becoming a citizen. Not being TRANSFORMED into something I didn't even know was REAL A WEEK AGO!" Matt shouted.-
See, just with a bit of punctuation and capitalization, the sentence becomes much more expressive. This is the one thing you need to fix, that, and descriptions, and your stories will be much better. Your writing will be much better, rather.
2063227 That was intentional. I wanted to put extra signifacance on the ONE word I did do in all caps.
2064135 It still applies, though. I see it happening too much in all of the chapters- I'm just trying to give constructive criticism. Take it with a grain of salt.
Holy Shit! THE NEW CHAPTER IS BACK!!!
Glory days
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I just updated two weeks ago and have added two chapters.
The beginning killed my interest in the fic since it shows he gets "Bad End".