After having a particular stressful event happen in her Court, Princess Luna decides to take a night off from her usual duties and try to ease some of the stirring feelings. Will a evening filled with music, star-gazing, and introspection help or will it only cause her to spiral out of control?
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Another good story bro. cheers
Pretty good. You forgot a period at the end though.
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thank you
Very nice story. Little confused by this:
I assume you meant Nightmare Moon, or are you pointing out her mental reflection upon nightmare night?
But other than that great job, upvote of course and i do hope there is a continuation to this story at some point.
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I'm freaking idiot
Yes its Nightmare Moon, thank you for pointing that out.
I cannot believe I missed that...
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Not a problem, frankly i am suprised no one else mentioned it yet. Still Lovely story.
i liked this story it was really good.
Well... I'm not normally drawn to Luna centric fics, but seeing that this is written you my fellow Eagle I thought why the hell not let read it. Nicely done my friend, yes Luna you are loved, not just by your sister but by all of Equestria.
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Please, accept a mustache.
I liked it. It was nice. I found a mistake. The Latin is "ad nauseam" not "at nauseum".
1644470 thank you I didn't know it was Latin.
what's the shipping?
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I put the romance tag because of the scenes with the two couples in a effort to have the readers expect them. Last thing I want to do is discourage a reader because I was lax in my description.
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1. /) to a fellow Eagle Scout.
2. It's always good to see a brony who respects and enjoys classical.
3. You really tricked me with that Rainbow Dash and Twilight opening sequence
4. Great story
Good story. Absolutely loved how you depicted princesses.
You, however, seem to be awfully fond of skipping words. Just throwing them out. Sorry, wont be able to point you directly to any of these instances, but there are quite a few. If you dont have a prereader, you should get one. Scene with Luna sneaking into the club felt forced to me.
Damn I feel bad for criticising and not being able to come up with any ideas how to do better.
Overall-amazing story, one that showed us Luna from a rarely explored point of view. And of course, classic music earns extra points.
1649043 This is what I want to see in a comment.
The club scene was the most under developed because I have no experience in that kind of a setting so I can't see what could happen.
I have one pre-reader but I think I need to add more because of this story.
I am not familiar with the word skipping part of your criticism, call it new writer ignorance on my part.
If someone could please point one of these instances it would be greatly appreciated!
Great story!
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Nadir? Nooooooo I feel my integrity being chipped away at! Dagnabit! Now I need to procure a child and name it Zenith Nadir to be as original as possible!
EDIT: I wish I could speak in pony emoticons.....or emoticons by themselves for that matter. That would be so awesome!
Great, pure story right here. Noice work!
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I got the name Nadir from the Immortal Game.
Thank you for your comment
okay, at first.... You TOTALLY havent played any Mass Effect 3 before writing this fic^^ I so facepalmed when I saw Udinas name in here and I laughed once Luna got to the Purgatory^^
Second.... TwiDash.... Y U SO CUTE!?
Third.... Why does Nightmare sound like a mix between a Persona 4 Shadow (in case you dont know them, tey go like "I am a shadow, the true self..." ) and Sephiroth from FF Dissidia ( "I will continue to pull your strings as long as you are who you are." )? I mean its prolly just me whos making weird, random observations like this but... I kinda like her that way^^ Makes her seem alot more evil then she was in the show^^
all in all, great job^^
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Story- Lunar Observations
Grammer: 8
Pros: interesting concept, different than most that i have read
reading from Luna's perspective is always a win
Cons: Some grammer seemed a little jumpy
It seemed slow in a few scenes
Notes: this was a surprising read to what i expected it to be. some scenes to me just seemed a little jumpy, but that could just be me. good one shot. overall score: 8/10