Jack is different. Not from just his age group, but from others as well. Cold, calculating, and tactical are but a few of the words used to describe him.
But when he is thrust into a new world, when he is attacked and nearly left to die by those who stand for love, tolerance, and friendship, what will happen from there?
Plans, power, corruption, and the seeds of a dark new age will be sewn. For such schemes are the ways of those who hide behind masks. Follow the story of Jack, and learn the Markings of a King.
Chapters (10)
Interesting...looking forward to more ^^
As interesting as this is, I want an update for Revenant. Don't get me wrong, this story sounds like it has a lot of potential, it's just that Revenant has more of my attention currently. I await the next chapter to this, and Revenant whenever that might be.
Very... It will be a nice change of pace to see Canterlot burning for once.
I am on to you, here.
I like the concept. Let's see what happens with it, great opening looking forward to more.
then he just falls backwards on the ground with a loud thump and woke up a few hours later
Yes. This is what I like. More of this my good friend
Oh, sounds goooood. Is there a possibility of gore appearing there?
Mmm... gore...
Tolle Geschichte, ich freue mich auf das Lesen mehr
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I... I don't know what to think of this transformation but keep up the good work bucko!
1541113 Why are you even here if you hate the ponies so much?
1581610 I don't hate ponies, I just think that Celestia just needs to be tapped down a few notches. It just seems like she has other ponies running around doing things instead of working on it herself, like the dragon problem in season 1.
me gusta
it good
It is good
MOAAAAAR
So... What is the blue stuff?
Is it a big, electrified vat of changeling blood? Are those plant-like vines supposed to be blood vessels?
Is it Phazon from the Metroid Prime series?
I have a terrible feeling that we're going to be kept in the dark about that substance for a good long while. Good chapter all the same, though.
“Corruption of the foulest sort...” he whispered. “What business doth thou have here?”
^This line seems to come out of no where or did I miss something?
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Yes, we will be kept in the dark for a long time. Mostly becaus-
*SMACK*
Sorry, I said nothing.
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You didn't miss anything, don't worry.
Something something pinka plonk,
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Thank you all. Truly, your long, varied, and sophisticated comments have given me deep insight into how my readers view my story. I look forward to hearing more from your scholarly minds.
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*SMACK*
Silence, you fool!
1615758 so you have wished it, so shall it be
1615758 it very good
Nice first chapter, but is still too early for judge this story
You won't disappoint, I predict. It is my hope this story continues to be fascinating. I cannot wait for the ponies to realize their mistake in attacking a human...
im glad you continue this story, its have a lots of potencial
I love this story..
Is the Depot just a giant room full of changelings puking up glowing green slime?
MOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAR
continue
Yay update!!!!! Continue soon
Update
the ponies just keep digging themselves a deeper hole with this guy...
Bucking hell, despite the short screen time I was hoping to see Cain survive alongside Jack! ponies gonna pay!
Did the extreme emotion that Jack felt because of Cain's death fuel his teleports? Like, his Human half was able to provide the emotional energy, while his changeling half was able to harness it into magic?
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That was something I was going to explain in the next chapter, but it's a minor note so I'll tell you now. Basically, teleporting yourself takes a lot less energy than teleporting you and someone else.
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You'd better believe it.
well i thought it was of undeniable quality
This story is... good. Really good. I-am-looking-forward-to-reading-more good.
Awesome can't wait for the next part
this was simply brilliant, exitedly awaiting more brilliance
Like the tagline from the movie, Payback: "Get Ready to Root for the Bad Guy."
Need à update
I certainly hope Celestia figures out it was her guard's incompetence that let it happen
Language that looks like it was written by a claw? Dragon language is screaming at me.
2173873 Oh, you'd better believe it.
2174377>>2174559 Geez, took long enough for someling to notice! As for what the lines say, you'll have to decipher that for yourself.
2174177 Unfortunately, don't be expecting one for a while. I burned myself out for a while writing this one, but it was SO worth it.
Heh, just did the translation! I see ya got something planned for this boy! Here it is for those who are too lazy to do the work:
Daal wah zii-laas-sos, saviik, leh monah-lun dir. Du Jun Sombra, zahrahmiik ok zii-laas. Lahney, Chrysalis, lahney! Kron fin Hokoron! Saviik, kron Dinok
Return to spirit-life-soul, savior, lest mother leech die. Devour King Sombra, sacrifice his spirit-life. Live, Chrysalis, live! Conquer the enemy! Savior, conquer death!
Yep, you've got something planned for this boy alright. I have to wonder though if it was the hive mind or something else. Dragon language being the core you gotta wonder where it's coming from with the writings and all that. Traveling around to find that unique dragon species or the local breeds, or it could just be ancient changeling stuff. Gets your mind wondering...
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and now i must watch that movie
KILL KILL MAIM RENT SEVER DISMEMBER!!!! KILL KILL MAIM RENT SEVER DISMEMBER!!!!
heheheheheh.... Death comes upon all that ye see Celestia
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