The sky goes dark, a cleansing fire. My time is short- I’ll soon expire!
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Celestia has a secret. There is a voice in her head. It plays a game she doesn't really understand but fears all the same. It wants her, and with everypony that knows of its existence its power grows. She has kept it away for as long as she can remember.
Luna is set to return, and with it, a friend of the voice. Can Celestia endure the voice's games and strengthen her relationship with Luna, or will she lose everything to it?
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Can't wait to see what will happen next!
The description remind me of the Sentry(Marvel). Is he the inspiration?
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I didn't really have a particular character inspiration. I just came up with the idea randomly. Thanks for commenting!
Keep it coming. :)
> "Nightmare Moon" tag
Should probably add the "Daybreaker" tag.
Yikes, Tia going the long mile
So void is the Creator of nightmare moon e probably daybreak, void is like discord a creature out of reality
so daybreaker would also be a separate entity,
Damn, I imagined the whole scene, and I got goosebumps.
Furthermore, it seems that the void has much more to come, but we have no way of knowing anything.
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If at some point void sends her, then yes or she could just be Celestia's imagination, since her sister was like that because she couldn't, so she imagines herself as a daybraker
how many mysteries, so void is the alicorn of the earth maybe
40°F as well as a sunny day with a temperature of 80°F. Not really that hot. It needs to be
O shit
Here we go
This makes me question how strong Gaiya is, he has the darkness, which makes him even stronger, and from the dialogue he seems well controlled, I think thousands of years "alone" helped him a little.
Darkness is coming, hohoho I'm hoping for an epic scene, I don't know how she intends to beat him, it took 3 alicorns just to stop the darkness and all that darkness is in the hooves of a single alicorn, gaiya is too powerful
Oh, Celes... I hoped it wouldn't come to this...
*a sword appears in his hand*
But I made you a promise back then. Soooooo long ago...
And I intend to keep it.
Hype hype hype, the time is near
this was perfect, the construction was excellent, she needs to make a choice she never thought about making, ask for help, and that sound of vido, gaiya is getting closer. And speaking of him, I expect an epic scene, after all he should be at the discord level if not higher, after all he has all the darkness in the world.
Wow. I did not see that coming. Great chapter.
More pls
Dramatic!
aaaaaaaaa my god, that's the end and the consequences of her actions, she wants to arrest Gaiya, but he was never evil, he has darkness corrupting him and was betrayed by daybraker, her acting like a victim really irritates me, I really hope that the battle and many truths are thrown on the table, a very important lesson needs to be learned
Nice!
Aaaaaaa more more more, why stop whyyyyyyyyyyy
The general feeling this far in is that void will legitimately help her, because it knows she'll destroy herself on her own through paranoia anyway.
Oh yeah, that was epic, thanks for this. :)
it was a very good story to read, gaiya still has to heal, and many lessons and ramifications in time are about to happen, this story reminded me of "Machinations in the Dark" an incredible story but it stopped being released a long time ago, well coming back , that was amazing keep up the good work.
This is my opinion but I don't think hooking the magic evil amulet to the world's magic is a good idea definitely when the person you're hooking it into is called Gaia.
I think the chapter would have been better if Sandy didn't talk after this, just leave it to the reader if it really happened or it was just her imagination.
I Love daybreaker stories.
That transformation was amazing.
Great story!
This made for a nice revisit to this site. A good story, with an interesting premise and a satisfying ending that stimulates my imagination. Thank you for this, I'll be favoriting this story so I can revisit far flung into the future.
I really don't know what else you could improve; everything has been great so far!
From the start, you've managed to seed the idea of a third alicorn and a physical manifestations of the Nightmares without it feeling out of place. And boy, is it really easy to just just derail and focus on them and just highlight how much better or awesome-r Celestia or Luna is.
Really well paced too! I love that the ending just doesn't stop with Gaiya left alone in a new world as the sisters return to Canterlot. I've read stories that seems to end a bit too early and I couldn't quite let go of that interupted longing.
But yours was extended by two more chapters, and they were perfect!
Really awesomely written, Wordsmith!
I really, really love the idea that Celestia is a dark magic user/expert! It fits her season 3 opener when she casted dark magic and Twilight was not really phased or questioning her mentor's perfect image.
P.s. The cover image kinda didn't help that it feels like it would have been an edgy story for the sake of it. At least your descriptors and the introduction was really captivating!
It feels like the story is going the way of a Greek tragedy, where the hero tries to prevent an awful prophecy, just for them to wind up causing it themselves...
I love it so far, but I hope Celly makes it out of it alright
Poor Celly, assuming she will immediately be contained by her friends, instead of them trying to talk to her ;-;