When Andy Hunter found himself transported to Equestria, his reaction differed significantly from what a non-brony might have experienced. His extensive knowledge of the show and his distinct personality, which bore little resemblance to Twilight Sparkle, set him apart as a unique and remarkable pony in this new world.
On the other hand, James Carter, embodying Rainbow Dash, was the polar opposite. His complete lack of knowledge about Equestria and the unexpected transformation into a pony led to a situation that could only be described as chaotic. To those unfamiliar with the circumstances, it seemed as though Rainbow Dash had gone completely bonkers, resulting in a mix of confusion and laughter.
What Does The Future Hold For Us Theme
This story or concept was inspired by deadpansnarker. "The crazy adventures of two brothers who hate each other in Equestria." With episodes created by me and some of the show completely altered where I can implement many changes because Twilight and Rainbow Dash have my personality and the personality of my best friend IRL
Not only the TV show but also the comics, the 2017 movie and Equestria Girls will also be altered, I hope you all like it. 
Featuring:
1. Illian Walker
2. Dub Pistols
3. Junkie XL
4. The Crystal Method
5. Static-X
6. Disturbed
7. Fluke
8. Adam Freeland
9. System of a Down
10. Celldweller
11. Cirrus
12. A Perfect Circle
13. The Chemical Brothers
14. BT
15. Paul Van Dyk
16. O Fortuna
17. Godhead
18. Puddle of Mudd
19. Zebrahead
20. Spineshank
21. Chevelle
22. The Faint
Interesting so far, some of the language feels a bit forced like the “LOLs” or worry about ponies finding out he isn’t twilight by saying “bro.”
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I understand dude, I'm going to try not to overuse the slang too much, I usually use it in text messages and in person conversations when someone says something funny to me.
But Twilight's childhood friends react to her way of speaking. I planned to address that topic at the Moondancer party where the new Twilight will become more evident.
At that moment Twilight's friends didn't pay much attention to it as they thought it was something occasional that Twilight had taken from a book.
The "Bro" thing specifically, Twilight's friends didn't pay much attention to that, they were more focused on making sure Twilight attended Moondancer's party because of the possible consequences you can see in the episode "Amending Fences".
The “Bro” thing at that time would be something very trivial for them at that time specifically. Twinskleshine's original dialogue "Does that pony do anything except study? I think she's more interested in books than friends" It is made clear that Twilight would not have attended any parties or at least spent time with her friends. Which could potentially strain the friendship between all of them, especially Moondancer.
Do we really needed to know he’s playing Dead space: mobile, GTA IV, Grand Turismo 5 or about this custom car that likely won’t show up ever again?
Your prologue is the pilot episode. You should spent do something to lure reader in, and this is the opposite.
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Yes, because it will not only be something recurring in the story (Not the main thing). The specific mention of games, cars, etc, is necessary to provide more context and add a more level of detail that may be appreciated or there may even be readers who search on the Internet for a game or car that they do not know much about and may catch their attention and pick their curiosity to know more about it. In addition, that is subjective, you can appreciate the detail or simply continue reading and focus more on the chapters not related to these elements. Not all readers think the same as you, there will always be varied opinions and that is out of my control.
These elements will have big impact on the story, they will influence Twilight and Rainbow Dash's decisions throughout the plot. And do you want me to cover all that, just in the first chapters? When are there more important matters? I need the story to flow naturally, but the problem is that you're getting too far ahead of yourself.
Good chapter dude! Question tho, how did you get the thingy on the chapter title?
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Thanks man, I'm glad you liked this chapter!
I got that symbol here, I think https://emojicombos.com/aesthetic-symbols
It is shaped like a dead flower, and I thought it was perfect to represent Celestia's feelings in this chapter.
Well, it seem like this Celestia is more clueless than usual. I want to see whether if Twilight would just be cool with Nightmare Moon take over. Going out and finding best friend is the bigger priority and a more reasonable task than fighting an alicorn after all.
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Better yet just tell the readers he like to play games and slowly drip-feed context of specific game when you mention it. I don't think anyone will remember which games he liked after more than a months.
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Clueless? Why? With this chapter I wanted to show what Celestia did while she was not on screen during the first episode of Friendship is Magic.
And give an explanation of how she was not present during the beginning of the summer sun celebration, what I wanted to do was give Celestia and Nightmare Moon more active roles and character developments.
Make Celestia feel more alive and less artificial, because I don't think that being without Luna for a thousand years is something easy to overcome, taking into account that Luna is literally the only family Celestia has. Or I don't know if there is something from the comics or the show itself that contradicts this, I would like you to give me more details about this, to avoid making more mistakes like this in future chapters.
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Most Celestias that immedietly gave up only do so after confimed that she was successful in setting up Twilight for the rainbow laser, or had some kind of contengency plan.
Most Celestias that failed, opt to try to find a way to save Equestria from Nightmare Moon's potential tyranny. Battling, Planing, Hidings, Preparing etc
Most Celestias that failed both... are not one of the main casts and have little dialouges and minimum screentimes. Many of this type was defeated off-scence and mentioned off-handy by other characters.
And a special examption. Comedy. Because comedy could get away with anything.
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It was impossible to have a plan in advance because it was not known when Nightmare Moon would arrive, Celestia herself denied her existence in the letter she sent to Twilight in the first episode, where she told her to stop reading those books, that happened because I guess Celestia didn't know that Nightmare Moon would manage to free herself from her prison.
In the first episode there is not much detail about that, I simply try to make it more complex and explain the events from a realistic point of view, in this case, that Celestia must be emotionally broken by the loss of Luna.
I don't know very well how Celestia's school works, I don't think it's ever been detailed about it, I don't know if they only choose several unicorns or only Twilight was Celestia's only student at that time, but what can be deduced is that Twilight is the one with the greatest potential to stop Nightmare Moon.
The only thing Celestia could do in that situation was to leave all her trust in Twilight, because the arrival of Nightmare Moon caught her off guard.
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Does that mean when Celestia said “I only said I want you to make friend” in response to twilight’s “You said it’s a silly old pony’s tale!” That mean she just tried to dodge the question and trying to look smart and mysterious in front of twilight?
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Now that I've rewatched the episode of Friendship is Magic Part 2, I realize where I screwed up.
Celestia says "I saw the signs of Nightmare Moon's return, and I knew it was you who had the magic inside to defeat her" With this sentence, my entire chapter goes to shit.
You know what happened? I only watched part 1, over and over again, without seeing the second because that part had not yet arrived to adapt it when Nightmare Moon arrived.
And right in that part at the end, it is "justified" why Celestia denied the existence of Nightmare Moon.
And worst of all, Celestia's feelings of guilt in chapter 3 would be key to a future episode adapting season 5 that I had planned.
They screwed me there, but I think I'll leave it at that, because it still wouldn't be clear why the book exists telling the legend of Nightmare Moon, if Celestia's whole plan was for Twilight to make friends, then why would she create a book? in which Twilight would do the complete opposite? An incredible waste of paper, time and even worse, strained friendships (Moondancer) if you ask me.
But if we analyze Celestia's plan from a logical point, it is a very stupid plan, because if Celestia was aware of it, she could have easily defeated Nightmare Moon, there would be no need for ALL of Equestria to be on Twilight's back, so we could say that my alternate episode 'fixes' this mistake, so to speak.
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Just add AU tag and say it's different than cannon.
story is good so far, but I noticed some plot inconsistent points.
At this point in the canon story, and going just by the contents of Celestia's letter, no one but Twilight would know that her stay in Ponyville will be extended. Spike should have reacted or questioned that when she dictated the letter to her parents, of Celestia when she got that letter.
Also while I think you maybe doing this purposely to paint the protagonist as being shallow and give him/her room to grow, the compleat disregard of what happened to Twilight's original mind/soul is starting to be worry some. If he had inherited at least some of her memories or personality traits, then it might have been waved away as a merging of minds, but this is coming across of a murder of her personality. Anyway she better hit the books and get at least a few spells together, she's going to need to demonstrate some skill to secure the element of magic in the battle with Nightmare.
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Thank you for mentioning the first inconsistency, I had not realized that Twilight simply said go instead of stay, the dialogue was already corrected so that it is clear and maintains consistency with the dialogues of her friends.
Regarding that, at first I didn't know how to deal with that topic, because I thought that no one would care, that the main focus would be how my personality and that of my friend would impact Equestria.
But now that you mention it, maybe I'll find a way to explore it further, but at the moment I can't, since there are too many conflicts to resolve and to deal with them all in one chapter, that would be very overwhelming for me and would extend my adaptation of the first episode more than it should.