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Mr Unidentified


~ Where you're going, you don't need skin to feel ~

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This story is a prequel to What does it mean to be?


Twilight Sparkle has a problem.
And she needs to fix it.

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Comments ( 14 )

wow, it's really that easy? i need to get my hands on some of these mushrooms, wikipedia says they're a real species!

So Twilight trips on some mushrooms and that fixes whatever is wrong? Sounds weird.

The cover art is god tier!

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That's the gist, yes.
Part of me was a little unsatisfied with this, but I couldn't improve upon it any further without making it too convoluted, confusing, or alienating.

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I found the source for it in the mean time

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Considering that Equestria isn't as medically advanced as us,it makes sense for Twilight to look for a natural cure somewhere.

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I thought it was, yes.

Truth be told, I tried to tell it from her first-person perspective at first. It didn't work for me, so I shifted to Third and tried to explain it logically from there.

This was -- as you might have guessed -- stemmed from personal experience, and I didn't want to forget and purposefully omit details for the sake of "Logic" when there isn't any logic to be parsed from them most of the time.

It is Raw. It is Emotional.

After that realization, I did something experimental.

I tried shifting from Twilight's usual detective-like, calculating mindset from the third person, into something more vulnerable and weak in the first-person later in the climax -- or "peak" if you will.

(Not sure if I wanna reveal it to those who haven't read it though, as it kind of spoils the effect it will have.)

I thought this worked beautifully in the end, but everything else about this story leaves a lot to be desired, in my humble opinion.

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You described the emotion and feeling of everything very well! It feels real,confusing and slightly overwhelming.

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Thank you for the Constructive Criticism

https://www.deviantart.com/assasinmonkey
Creator of the cover art.

Enternaining story btw

Very good. Thank you for posting this.

This was neat.

I particularly like Twi trying something so different than her normal. She's worked on it and calculated it and.... didn't get anywhere.

This is one of the best stories I’ve read on this site, and I’ve read hundreds of them. It really speaks to me since I had basically the same experience the first time I did this, which was like three weeks ago at a music festival called electric forest.

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Wow, thank you! That's some high praise

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