The war of the Changelings was brutal, and it wrought the city of Canterlot in chaotic destruction. Chrysalis could feel her victory coming to a close, but something clicked in her heart. Funny how it happened, she usually doesn't feel remorse. Time to pay a statue a visit.
Author's Notes
~This is my 60 minute challenge story, and by Luna's sexy flank I can write a lot in that amount of time!
~This story is my interpretation of what could of happened while Twilight and company went off to search for the Elements of Harmony.
~Since this is a one chapter story I might not edit it for future purposes because in my mind. It won't be worth it in the end. Sorry if I disappointed you with that bit of news. Just kidding. I've just edited today on 12/11/12.
~Also, this story is a fast response to this video.
~OC tag for Lauren Faust as her pony is technically an OC.
Hope you enjoy!
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Sad Chrysalis by mysticalpha
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EDIT: The feels, man ;~;
Eh. I haven't read anything you've written aside from this and EE, so I don't really know what liberties you've taken, but from my outside perspective, there's a lot of OOC-ness going on here. Mostly with Celestia. And neither the feels nor the comedy really hit me, to be honest.
Also, there's constant, slight grammatical errors. I mean, maybe I was just given that impression, and they're not really constant, but there sure were a lot.
1357272 There is no comedy. Also, it's a 60 minute challenge story, it should have errors. Also I think you would get feels if you've watched the video link.
Edit: btw what parts of Celestia was OOC?
1357307 If there's no comedy, then you have an odd sense for sadness. The entire second half seemed like it was supposed to be funny, except for a select few parts. I watched the link. It was very nicely done, and moderately sad, but it does nothing to sway my opinion of your work, a separate piece on a similar subject.
Strictly speaking from her portrayed personality in the show, almost all of Celestia's bits were OOC. I fully expect authors to do what you did (i.e. have her be playful and fun and whatnot) in moderation, as an exception to the rule, as it were. The rule in this case being dignity and/or elegance, which is something that canon Celestia is almost never without, even when she is being playful.
...That doesn't sit well with me.
1357398
Of course not, but don't expect stories that are made in 60 minutes to be perfect.
Also I wasn't really trying to go for a canon story. It's what I interpret of what could of happened during the events of the invasion. But to just to prove that she isn't the most elegant princess Equestria has ever seen, here's a photo.
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That cake looks awesome.
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I was more referring to the general attitude. This had a lot of errors, too. Not the really glaring kind either, but the kind that makes what you're saying muddled and harder to understand. It really detracted from the piece for me.
You've provided two examples of exceptions to the rule. Again, that is something I fully expect, for comedic purposes. Your Celestia was essentially ^that, but consistently, rather than occasionally. Hence, OOC.
Edit: Having just eaten a very full meal, I can honestly say that that cake horrifies me to the core.
Very good for a 60 minute challenge.
ChaoticNote used Controller Smack!
: Bring forth the ale! And don't forget the hops this time!
It's Super Effective!
A thousand pardons but I just HAD to. Also, poor Chrysalis, always left out hmm? Great story Sir Chaotic of Note. Great story indeed.
You just had to post it after I stopped lurking fimfic eh? Just had to!
ughhhh that story and that video right in the feels
This is very good given the time frame you had to work with.
I applaud you, good sir.
1364278 Yea, if only it wasn't released at midnight when everypony is still asleep. I'm surprised I've even made it to the Popular Stories bar.
1364300
I'm sure your readers will find it quickly enough. Don't worry so much.
Please disregard the dumb comment I replaced. *beats head on desk* Stupid!
1364322 Don't hate yourself for that. I've read both of them.
1364351
Nooooooooo......
This story made me feel, and that video
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1364351 i didnt see the connection of the story to she song till the last half then i was like
OHHHhhhh
also
can we have some sort of epliouge or sequil
1365235 Only if I get enough people to support it, which this is a surprising number given the fact that the moderators released this while I was sleeping.
1365280 i think you will
trust me
this is too good for us to let slide
I like where this story is going.
it's
so
BEUTIFUL!
god i hope i spelled beutiful right, i can't spell anything
1366621 Beautiful.
1366621 Every favorite counts.
1357398 So what you are saying is essentially force ourselves to conform to canon just for the sake of it?
Bah, correct me if I am wrong, but I think it is called fanfiction for a reason. People will have many different interpretations upon a character, and quite frankly that is the spice of life to me. I don't want to have some character forced to act in a certain way, just because the source material demands it so, or they be shot on the firing line. Does that mean that we should forget any fan interpretations of Luna Pre-Season 2? I think not.
I can't believe about what you said on the one-on-one
Otherwise, As good as Past Sins
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I WANT MORE!
1367521 That means a lot thanks!
1367357 You misunderstand me, a bit. I meant that Celestia was so out of character compared to canon that immersion was broken almost entirely for me, especially considering that this story was supposed to be sad. If I might reiterate:
This was said in reference to a serious type of story, as this one is supposed to be. For laughs, I'm entirely on board with an author setting canon down on a table and running for the hills. Here, though, that doesn't fit. A serious subject deserves a serious approach, would you not agree?
1367601 I HAD 60 MINUTES!
Edit: I was confused in the middle of writing as I couldn't decide if I wanted serious or funny. So I went with seriously funny.
1367736 No no, I understand. I've said my piece to you already, it's just that the guy I responded to seemed to have misunderstood what I was getting at.
It's pretty good, considering you did it in 60 minutes.
The video, and the first part of the story... all the flipping FEELS.
Ah, I see I'm not the only one who saw that video.
I was thinking of it throughout all the dialogue with Chrysalis, and that was enough to make me get a watery-eyed. You did an amazing job.
Words, I can't even put it in WORDS!
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to 
The fic was good, I was goign to write a good review to that effect, and then I watched the video, and I went from:
Favourited and upvoted
Argh dammit I'm still tearing up.
Honora Imperator
Edit: I wouldn't argue if you gave this a sequel or continued it, this was good. truly good.
Great story, and it has The Queens point of view. I said, in some other post, trying to feed your people means you aren't all bad.
The video you linked....words fail me. I already watched it twice.
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Thanks for the words of encouragement. Even if this story was done in 60 minutes flat.
1357103 Lol, didn't know I got the first comment xD
Ahh, the memories...
1784489
Wanna relive them?
1784494 Already did....
*manly tear*
1784498
Aww that's alright! Here, let me hugz you!
Hugs M3Xkillers.
(Ye-esss. One down, a lot more to go...)
1784514 Accepts hug Can I have a hug from Luna? ;~;
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1784573 Yay!
Rubs Luna's belly ^3^
I like the story even more now. The feels aren't as pronounced as before but are still there.
My first reaction can be viewed on comment 15
So many years later, and this is still the best Queen Chrysalis story on Fimfiction.
5149400
Great Chrysilis story, is it to be continued?
5635096
Sorry to say I don't have any plans for a sequel.
I liked it. Nice characterisation, I actually found it more heartwarming than sad.
Cya
Raziel-chan
5635168 please......
7280452
Sorry man. This story was only meant to be an interpretation of what could have happened during the episode. The best I'll do for it is go through the story once more and comb the mistakes. Maybe give it polish, but right I don't believe this story needs a sequel.
7281779 ok
Wow, this isn't bad at all for something you only had 60 minutes to do. sounds like it was a fun challenge. I think going serious was the better choice. Thanks for this.