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Dashie04


Your friendly neighborhood writer of entirely too many trans ponies! (Dashie | she/her | Discord: velvetred2004 | pfp by Malphym)

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I am not who I think I am…
I am not who you think I am…
I am what I think you think I am.

(Thousand Words Contest II, 3rd place in Experimental)

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 13 )

My god this hit me hard, I’m gonna be rereading this over and over huh?

Great job :3

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That’s all it was. It’s all a mask. I’m just trying to please everypony else… was there really anything left of me?

interesting start!

A mask.

But apparently the mask was worth talking to.

oof. reading the natural mirroring of who we are around as wearing a mask or being a chameleon, or something like that?

It wasn’t cute.

I want to feel cute.

aww

I didn’t see it.

I couldn’t. No matter how much I wanted to.

Thankfully, I’m good at pretend.

oof, sometimes all the external validation in the world is not enough

“I say this with love, you’re my favorite mare.”

It always felt so freeing to be called a mare. They already thought I was one.

I wasn’t one.

But, I wasn’t me either.

augh. but what does that mean?

…Could I say mare? It felt right… but, what if that was pretend too?

ah yeah. gender, am i right? (i mean not to make light of it, these feelings do suck)

Please help me free me can I be cute? The pretender pretending that I’m doing well. I don’t deserve to be treated well, it’s an act it’s all an act. All. Everything. I—

MARE.

MARE.

Frag/

Ment/

Ed.

oh that is really cool! love the formatting, love the stream of consciousness here. all of these thoughts that the narrator kept dammed away, bursting through here and there at the seams until they all come out in a torrent like this. love the ambition here, the 100-even wordcount is impressive. thank you for writing!

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Thank you for reading and enjoying the story!

Thanks for the 8 seperate comments as well.

Ooh, brilliant work in capturing dysphoria and the burden of an eternal facade. The narrowing vortex of text in the last chapter brings to mind water circling a drain, down and down into a terrible yet inevitable finality. Great stuff throughout. Thank you for it and congrats on the bronze.

Hello! Have a slightly belated courtesy note for my review. I kinda guessed the general subject of this story, but the fic is thoughtful and sympathetic without being cloying, which is a good balance to strike. Easy for me to upvote.

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