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Twilight is Bae/ Check out my main account https://www.fimfiction.net/user/380059/k00l

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This is a really good start for your story. There might be others but these caught me right off the bat. Hope it’s ok helping out like this:twilightsheepish:.

"I... I was being chased by this... this monstrous looking pig... and I tripped." His voice still sounded pretty sad. He shook his head and sighed.

Because it’s Twilight speaking, I think it suppose to be:

"I... I was being chased by this... this monstrous looking pig... and I tripped." Her voice still sounded pretty sad. She shook his head and sighed.

Also:

"Easy there, you're in no condition to be looking for anything in that condition." He told, but she whimpered.

I think would help as:

"Easy there, you're in no condition to be looking for anything right now." He told, but she whimpered.

If you don’t get any comments for you down votes, I recommend disregarding them until you see someone point something out about it:ajsmug:. As I said earlier, it’s a good start and I’m hoping you’ll continue this story:moustache:.

Great Story. Can't wait too see more of it đŸ’œ

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I'm following you on both of your accounts and also can't wait for the next chapter.

I didn't read the new chapter yet, but wanted to tell you something:

I can't tell you how happy I am to see that you are back and just to make it even more special, a few days ago I thought about this story, about how nice it would be if this one could get updated and you did it!

A few days ago you updated the other one if not my most favourite Twilight story, and now this as well.

Thank you for both, really hope if I can ask that much, that for the next one, we won't be waiting this long, right? :)
:twilightblush:

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Thank you so much for enjoying my fics! I'm really happy to hear you like them so much. Also, I do apologize for the long update. On my main account, I explained how I was becoming dissatisfied with writing and how it started to become a chore. So I stepped away for a bit. Now I'm really starting to get back into it, and I can promise you that the next update will not be this long. Twilight is 100% the cutest and most lovable and I really want to continue both this and the other fic. Thank you so much for your patience and loyalty to both fics. :twilightsmile:

I say Give It 2 weeks and Travis going to think Twilight looks awful pretty

funny question where exactly is twily in texas and if they to go to say i dunno houston how is she gonna make sure the army doesnt knab her if she doesnt have a way to disguise herself or does she

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She's in the Chihuahuan desert, it covers this specific part of Texas
tpwd.texas.gov/huntwild/wild/wildlife_diversity/texas_nature_trackers/target_species/maps/Chihuahuan_Desert.jpg

I said specifically near a town called Van Horn, so she is decently far away from Houston, Dallas, and Austin. But she is pretty close to El Paso. I do have plans for her traveling the state with Travis, especially to Dallas so Travis can sneak her inside to watch a Football game. I got some plans brewing for him to keep her out of direct sight.

Yes! convert the vegetarian!

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Football?!

BOO!

Invite her to a hockey game the Dallas stars are still around right? It’s been awhile since I watched a nhl game

If they're going to watch another movie it should be Lord of the Rings trilogy I'm kind of hoping that his natural sweat is something that Twilight likes to smell

I hope you continue this story

*<>* oh no, twilight saw his junk , now she definitely can't get that image out of her mind ... now to see Travis reaction to seeing her bits :twilightoops:

"What the hell just happened?"

Well, Princess Twilight, you were there to listen to a human's confession about being hurt in a war he didn't understand. And perhaps by you listening, it may help him in the long run. You are the Princess of Friendship, so being there is part of the healing between friends.

Yeah, I feel that I am personally getting involved, even if vicariously. Nice chapter. Hope to see where this goes from here...

Nice to see an update to this story, I said it before that I really love a slowly build up one in terms of romance. It is a nice change seeing Twi in the human world aaand enjoying bacon... Her face gonna be priceless when she will get told... :twilightsheepish:

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