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Just reading and writting stories for and from anyone.

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This story is a sequel to A legend returns.


William is a normal human that tries his best to be happy. Although his father was arrested 5 years ago for trying to steal very expensive equipment from the lab he was working, and his mother got to work immediately to maintain him and his sister Melissa, but he always tries his best to be a good person.
One day, he stumbles in the park with something impossible: two little ponies with wings, horns, and the ability to speak. He tries to help them, and in the way, he might discover the real reason of why his father is at prison.


This story is a PREQUEL of https://www.fimfiction.net/story/516698/a-legend-returns not a sequel.
You don't need to read it before you read this one, although I recommend you to do it when you finish this one.

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 25 )

i hope you dont stop this story its really so far

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Don't worry, I won't.
I'm on vacation this week, so probably I'll update daily.

love this story already, keep it up. :twilightsmile:

Very nice story! If you can’t make it frequently like earlier maybe some help will be useful? You want it contact me on PM

I'm loving the story so far!

How could William sneak two living beings under his coat without it being obvious that he's smuggling something, due to the two large lumps under his coat?

"With this." I said pulling out my phone from my pocket.

He's going to get a team of hired (umm...) bad guys after him.

Comment posted by NotSuspicious366 deleted July 31st

I then proceeded to devour my piece, but instead of the delicious taste of the sauce with the meat I found... eggplant?

I didn't know lasagna can be made with eggplant.

Interesting story so far.
How were these creatures created tho?

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People will just think that he's carrying ordinary stuff.
Also the fillies were not THAT big.

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I experimented it once.
It wasn't a enjoyable experience :(

I hope I'm not being mean by proofreading the first two sentences.

One day passed. Tia and Luna were planning for entire night how to show Philomena to my mom. For night Philomena was hidden in my room, so I couldn’t sleep since there was so much light, like sun came to my room only to blind me. The next day, which was Friday Tia took her ( finally ) from my room and placed in the living room.

One day passed. Tia and Luna were planning for entire night how to show Philomena to my mom. For [to]night[,] Philomena was hidden in my room, so I couldn’t sleep since there was so much light, like sun came to my room only to blind me. The next day, which was Friday[,] Tia took her ( finally ) from my room and placed[ her] in the living room.

“Miss, can you go to the living room for a moment?” Celestia said while near her was Luna that was crying from ‘laugh attack’. I was looking at them from the kitchen and silently laughing as well

“Miss, can you go to the living room for a moment?” Celestia said[.] while Near her was Luna that [who] was crying from ‘laugh attack’. [{OR} Celestia said while Luna was crying from a 'laugh attack'] I was looking at them from the kitchen and silently laughing as well

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Maybe xD

You will see in next chapters. Something will happen about Philomena

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Thank you for correction. I’m trying my best writing but no one’s is perfect

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I'll correct it as soon as I can :)

Is this mostly an adventure story or mostly a slice of life story?

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