My name is Nuke.
I am called many names. The guardian and destoyer of worlds, the headless horseman of Death. But I don't mind that much.
I had saved humanity from destruction in just a few years. Took control of the worlds nuclear aresenl and stop the aggressors who wanted to use them for harm stop.
That led to the Third World War, which I help crush the enemy Roque states and finally, in years, humanity and peace were united for the first time.
I am leading Humanity to a great age in space exploration. I had recently discovered a new way to travel across the universe.
Worm holes.
They can help us expand farther into the gaxlay. There's the chance for life, but nothing that could get as close as to us.
Right?
My name is Scootaloo.
I don't have any parents. I have to live at the nearby orphanage. It sucks and the other foals there are Jenks and bullies because of my poor flight skills.
At least I have my Scooter and my two best friends, Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom and my idol, Rainbow Dash.
At least until I discovered a robot landing near ponyville that is from another world.
What have I got myself into?
My tingles are tingling
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I confuse, what does that mean?
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What states play roque? Like, Connecticut or sumpin?
Besides the spelling errors... try spending half an hour with Stable Diffusion or the anime waifu generator and then tell me AI is a good idea.
So did you just not see the episode with her parents, or did you decide to kill them off for funsies?
Gosh, I thought we were over the orphan Scootaloo thing!
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The Revisionist powers of Russia, China, Iran, North Korea, Belarus and Pakistan. (The later two get drag in)
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I saw the episode, but I decided to do something different for the story, a unqiue take on it
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It's going to happen evenaulty, let's just not try to piss them off
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Rogue ≠ roque
Taiwanese
To, not for.
Helped
NASA
Prototype, and Monitor
Yawned, Looked, Notifications, Usual
Carousel Boutique
Orphanage
Scootaloo sighed, Continued
The, Orphanage, Shoved
Pegasus
(That's most of the errors for the story.)
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Unique
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Eventually
(Ok, now I'm done correcting.)
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lmfao you rekt him
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Someone gonna call an ambulance
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Sorry, I get to fixing it
11 to 11 like/dislike ratio.
Perfectly balanced, as all things should be.
Poor scootaloo. Hopefully the human will adopted her.
You hear that author.
Also f those kids. Got By Luna hope you don’t get any nightmares from her.
Um what links?
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What links?
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You said in the notes there linked to the original creator
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I couldn"t add the links, but you can go to my DeviantArt page, Nukekiller123 and go to my military favorites folder. You can find them that way
sorry about this.
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Hey it’s okay, but could you perhaps link your deviant page, since it might make things a little bit easier?
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Ok
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So link please?
And guessing human going to adopted scoots perhaps?
By the way love the artwork withscootaloo. Did you commission it or do it yourself or find it online somewhere?
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Its the new link at the top under the notes, its "Military Favorites"
I actually made the cover myself
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Ah gotcha. But I mean can you link your deviantart account
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It does
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Ah got it thanks and a follow to you.
But is this you?
https://www.deviantart.com/nukekiller123
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Yes
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A he gotcha thanks
Oh pretty nice mostly. Well of course there is xenophobic/racist and nobles well most of them are not nice but some are.
But just in case I recommend you carry some heat with you just in case.
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Thanks. To me, this is probity the most realistic outcome.
Also, new name
Want me to come continue the story for you?
I somehow doubt that guy is truly left alone, got the biggest target on his head possible
No idea what I found, but I’m gonna keep reading for now.
I’m kinda curious how the world outside of America is doing in this story. Has the EU become a federation yet? (Among other things…)
Interesting start I guess. Tech development is extremely fast paced, but I wanna be forgiving for now.
This story gets a watch…
I'm going to be brutally honest here, this story so far reads like a 10 year olds self-insert power fantasy, especially the beginning. Seriously, one man (who so far acts and talks like a young teenager), being being single handedly resposible for all of this war ending and victories, with zero reason as to why? That, on top of the really bad grammar, makes the fact of this story having so many dislikes unsurprising.
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This is supposed to be fanstey. I'm 16. None of this is supposed to be realistic. It's just supposed to be fun.
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Yes. After WW3, Europe units into federation, but it's still in it's earlier stages of life.
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He can easily kill anyone that tries. That's going to be in a later chapter.
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I'm back. I just need a break. Bu you can do you own off shot.
Nice thinking adding in current politics as history.
I see we got a true american writer here. As an european we might be allies here, but this rivalry with you and the russians if getting old. (literally). XD
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Hey. We don't mind NORMAL Russians. We hate the ones that think they can just take what they please and restore a old empire that suppress millions of non Russians. That's something the Ultranationalists don't get.
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Fair enough, I don't doubt that. it's simply that your writing style screams "american". XD (No offense.)
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I AM American. But I don't care. It isn't harmful.
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I know. Isn't it interesting how the human mind can correctly guess a different person's nationality by reading one of their stories, despite never having meet in real life?
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I guess so.
A few problems with this: 1) Pythons are ambush predators. If they fail to catch you once, they won't waste energy chasing after you, unless you did something stupid like stealing their eggs or something. 2) Pythons don't have fangs. They can't bite you. 3) Pythons can't roar.
On a different note, I like the way you wrote Scootaloo, even if it's a bit fast paced. The stereotypical "evil orphanage headmaster" is a bit overused, but it work well enough. Keep it up!
Finally I suggest that you try to avoid turning your OC into a Gary Sue. It's a common pitfall in fiction and can ruin a story if you handle it incorrectly. Here's some usefull info
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Hello. Nice to see you stick around. I do have a pacing problem. This Python, though nice for the information, This python was just angry at Scootaloo for getting his head smack on some rocks.
As for the Gary Sue part. Thanks for the heads up. She's not perfect. In fact, the fight is one of the flaws. Her fears often get the best of her. Loneliness is another as she doesn't want to be abandoned again.
Nuke has a similar loneliness. Part of it is do to his introvert self, but another is he once a squad of mates, but they were all killed in action(more on that in later chapters)
As for the evil orphanage trope, just wait. It gets worse and ties back into Scootaloo's past. If you hate them now, what until you find out what they do later.