When Spike is enchanted so that any yes or no question will be answered with a yes he tries to use this power for his crush Rarity. But when he asks the wrong question he's inadvertently set himself up to create a harem for himself.
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The only thing for me was that this felt more like an end game. Something that ended the story rather than something in the middle. With clues to this finale being spread through out the story and then accumulating into this. It would then fit better with the ‘ultimate’ villain finally joining the harem
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Yeah I can see that, I don’t know if it’s worth making a sequel for this story to have it continue and have the first one end with the children being born. But that will screw with the rating
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If you do it does mean the new story does start from scratch (ratings wise)
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I believe so, but you can link the oringinal as having a sequel
I actually like Fimfiction clop stories where the bad guy wins. Don't listen to the neighsayers. You carry on with the Spike domination.
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That is true. There are several different options on what you could do:
-Continue story as is with Spike travelling around Equestria and expanding the harem
-End here and have a minor time skip. Maybe with most of Equestria under his control with it then being about the fall of Celestia and Luna.
-The next is ending it and having a big time jump to after Flurry had left to the past
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That last one does sound appealing somewhat, and as a plus I can name it the diamond in his horde this time. But I don’t think the ratings of the second story will ever match the height of the first. Though maybe I’m putting a bit too much stock in the ratings
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It’s up to you. If you wanted you could always put it up for a vote and see what people would like?
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That’s true but maybe only on fimfiction. Chyoa has it possible to link chapters and make branching paths. I’ll consider it
Also is this latest chapter a vote chapter? Or is it an error, there isn’t a vote option?
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It’s there in the text, but here’s a link: https://strawpoll.com/polls/NoZr3eNoay3/results
To all those who are whining.
This is a PORN story catering to a fairly specific fetish. No one should have come in here expecting "the good guys" to win. "The bad guys" are the protagonists here.
Also, thus story is formatted to have audience interaction, via strawpoll vote, EVERY CHAPTER. Which makes me confused that there are so many people complaining about the plot. Like, how is darkstar supposed to keep a long game plot going when they don't know what the next chapter is going to be? This ain't the next Tolkien y'all. Lower your expectations a little and just have fun.
Tldr; people are blind and bitching because they couldn't see the very clearly fetish story having a "bad end", and expected far to high quality from said fetish porn story.
P.s. I for one, think you are doing a lovely job darkstar. Try not to let the fools get to you.
Lmao each of the non-avatar accounts there complaining about this story were all made after mid-February this year. It's almost as if all of them made accounts purely to shittalk and bash this fanfic lmao
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Lmao, I didn't even think to check that.
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Truthfully you are not the only one who doesn't get why they are whining about mind control sex story.
I'm not opposed to the twist with Flurry, the only problem is, much like the reveal of her identity, it kinda comes out of nowhere.
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Ah yes, let us compare two completely different writing styles. One that is pre-planned and written with zero audience participation, and the other that has the audience choosing where the story goes every couple of chapters. And let's not even explain WHY one is better then the other, let's just be rude about it.
As for "fake outs and clear direction". This whole arc didn't need to happen, so fuck darkstar for even trying to write something with substance in a story where we the viewer can undo it in a heartbeat, I guess.
The very nature of this story type makes having a clear direction difficult.
Whoever this is with the army of alts can go and lick an exhaust pipe.
(I'm not actually trying to cuss you out darkstar, I'm just trying to get my point across.)
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You do realize the majority of people have a name of some sort they'd prefer to use instead of slapping their hand on the keyboard until the name goes through.
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There is only a singular 1 in your user name
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Ah, now we are editing our comments to be completely different because we forgot which alt we were on. Lmao, good job
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The whole sentence is different, the fat finger excuse would work if you misspelled, but you didn't.
I haven’t had any real issue with the story, and I don’t really understand why dubious morals in a porn fic about a mind control harem sets so many people off, but it is what it is, I suppose.
Write what you enjoy writing and take the story where you like. If you have to try and corse correct or try and appease everyone, it’s never going to work out. Go with what you think is best, and there will still be people who enjoy it.