When Spike is enchanted so that any yes or no question will be answered with a yes he tries to use this power for his crush Rarity. But when he asks the wrong question he's inadvertently set himself up to create a harem for himself.
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I really loved this chapter! Thanks for this!
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Thank you
Switch the punctuation marks around.
Period, not comma.
Comma after immediately.
Comma after slave and Tiara.
Comma after on.
Comma after arms.
Comma after soon, not period.
Just THAT I could be seen.
Question mark, not period.
Period after whimpered.
Comma after Tiara.
Comma after cunt.
Or her mother.
She slowed her pace, even as Silver Spoon panted.
Comma after you and Tiara.
Period, not comma.
Exclamation point after Celestia, comma after more both times.
Period, not comma.
Comma after soon.
Comma after me.
Comma after ah and course, period after you.
Question mark, not period.
Comma after pussy.
Comma after you, worry and darling.
Comma after afterglow.
Comma after energy.
Comma after bed.
Period after legs and comma after right.
Comma after mistaken.
Comma after kindly.
Comma after excellent.
This was a very fun chapter. It also gave me an idea. Since Sapphire noticed that Silver had smaller tits than her mother or Fluttershy, she could change that, giving them significantly larger tits and asses that look fake, but feel natural. Bimbofy them, as such.
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Either I'm getting worse at grammar, or you're getting better a spotting it. Thanks again.
As for your idea, I personally like it. Something I could do for a filler chapter, I'll need to find some good fanart though.
11761583
The latter, I think.
So glad I found this story, it is nice finding a well done spike dominate harem, especially where spike is a bad guy and wins, can't wait for more
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Thanks for the support, I’m glad you enjoyed it. I wanted to make a story where Spike would gradually become the bad guy (over the course of the Ponyville arc) since I always felt it would be too out of character for it to happen from day one. I hope that paid off well