When Spike is enchanted so that any yes or no question will be answered with a yes he tries to use this power for his crush Rarity. But when he asks the wrong question he's inadvertently set himself up to create a harem for himself.
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Finally
Still seeing this a bit harsh and bias, but whatever.
Heck yeah! 😎
And here we frickin GO!!!!
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Hope you enjoyed it
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Sorry it took so long
Good chapter. Sorry about the comic. If I had any extra money I would donate but right now I’m just living paycheck to paycheck.
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Don’t worry about it, it was a long shot in the first place
Period after Celestia.
Comma after asked.
“Your memories Twilight have come from the rewritten timeline since our Master didn’t use the root to give you memories.”
You can just remove the "Twilight" from the sentence. Also, Root. Capital R.
Comma after perhaps.
I don't know what the right term WOULD be, but, I don't think it'd be "queen".
Solar Court. Also, unless there's a Solar Court of the Night, you can probably remove "of the day".
Comma after so. Also, you're missing a fragment of a sentence after window.
Hearth's Warming.
Comma after hands.
Remove "Ivory". Also, rodents are animals.
Said with a small grin.
Comma after mean, period after Princess.
Certain that under my control.
Comma after done.
Period after Equestria and comma after skills.
Comma after that, dragon and "which" before meant.
Period, not comma.
I feel like slut would fit more than whore.
Period, not comma.
One "he knew" will suffice.
Comma, not period.
Again, I feel like sluts would fit better.
Capital R.
Comma after Celestia.
Dragon Lord. Capitalizition since it's a title.
Question mark.
Celestia, not Celestial.
Comma after Master.
Of feeling.
Comma after eye.
Comma after me, period after Spike.
I enjoyed it.
To be fair, comics take a LOT of time to make, especially if you want them to be GOOD. Moreso if you want it be an adaptation of the story, not just snippets of story you want to see in comic form.
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Thanks I fixed that all now. And as I mentioned with cold ghost it was a long shot with the comic. Though I hasn’t considered doing specific snippets. Not sure which parts would be good examples though