When Spike is enchanted so that any yes or no question will be answered with a yes he tries to use this power for his crush Rarity. But when he asks the wrong question he's inadvertently set himself up to create a harem for himself.
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very nicely done!! i cannot wait to see what happens next
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Thank you, I hope you’ll enjoy it
When it's tempest turn maybe have her secretly wishing for someone to love but think her horn and her past as a villain will discourage anyone from getting close like that. Her soldiers might respect her as a warrior but as far as romance goes she is alone.
Very nice chapter,i enjoyed it.
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i'm sure i will
There's still more?
Thought that having Daybreaker, Luna/Nightmare Moon, Bon Bon, Spitfire, and Tempest Shadow would have been the "finale" for this story?
Luna's dream walking powers should come into play during her corruption, watching or made to act in spikes dreams of everypony fucking. She could visit Celestia's dreams and see her being submissive to spike.
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Glad you did
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So emotional manipulation, we’ll have to see when we get to her
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I intend on Spike taking the other kingdoms of Equestria as well as the Equestria girls world as well
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It's something definitely worth considering to be sure
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Maybe that could push her loneliness to the point where when spike shows up she is more than likely to fall for him with not much work of his behalf.
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Interesting thoughts
Love it
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Thank you
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Damn, he will have the largest harem.
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Never leave a job half done
Comma after sperm.
You can remove "a trace of".
Celestia. Not Celestial.
Goddess.
Colon, not period.
Period after asked.
Comma after said.
Couple things. One, comma after dawn, powerful and so. Second, shouldn't it be at its most powerful at the Sun's zenith when it's highest in the sky?
Period, not comma.
And again.
And again.
And again.
And again.
Spike was still molesting.
Question mark, not period.
Comma after Smiling.
Comma after left.
Period not comma.
Comma after please.
Comma after that.
Period, not comma.
Comma after said.
Comma after spy.
Comma after director.
Period after asked, capitalize the I in in.
Period after fighting, capitalize the s in she.
Comma proudly.
Young mare.
Comma after immediately.
Comma after floor.
Period, not comma.
Comma after dramatic.
Comma after symbol and replace the latter half of the sentence with "he instinctively knew that Ivory was now entirely his."
Widened.
Comma after all.
Comma after useful.
Period after Very and skills.
Comma after Ivory.
Talents lie.
In this.
Comma after "and" and magic.
Comma after materials.
Period after request.
Comma after that.
Comma after Ambitious.
Comma after there.
Comma after and.
Comma after government.
Comma after you.
Comma after so.
Comma after harem.
Tempest.
Luna.
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That was a long one, but I've done those corrections now. Thank you for your help
"Should a Princess really be using her subjects for demonstrations?" Spike teased
Whoops. Now all princesses really must use their subjects for demonstrations.
"Ambitious, aren't we?" Spike said
Well, Spike hardly needed to make himself and Rarity more ambitious, but that's done too. :)
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Oops I have to reword those at some point
Very good chapter.