When Spike is enchanted so that any yes or no question will be answered with a yes he tries to use this power for his crush Rarity. But when he asks the wrong question he's inadvertently set himself up to create a harem for himself.
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Am I right that this "Sweet Melody" is a OC from another Author?
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Yes from Judoon Warrior
Thanks for the update! Take your time on updates!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it
So for the “gala “ are you going to be making oc’s to attend the event?
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I’m open to it, but it’ll likely just be npcs, maybe I’ll get some oc art to represent them
Since all the strippers already want spike why not trick Octavia into checking out the music under the guise of what does she think of it? Then she will play it and be caught
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Something along those lines is what I had in mind, specifics are where I’m struggling if I’m honest.
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Maybe melody could say she hoping to play it for the princesses but is unsure it is good enough.
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Hmm yeah I could work with that
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And have spike there when she plays to add to the temptation
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Not a bad idea, perhaps she could be persuaded to perform at Luna’s whorepalace
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Maybe that could be where the music is supposed to be played that way she can always claim stage fright and have Octavia take her place playing for the princesses. That way she won't be able to escape the trap.
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Hmm, perhaps. It could be as simple as the two just playing together
Comma after day.
You'll want to clarify which stripper. Because it sounds like she's giving Mrs Cake the day off.
From what Sapphire could tell, Octavia was surprised to hear from Sweet Melody again and was more than excited to meet her and her new friend. Apparently, she also had some news to share with the stripper. Sapphire found herself quite curious to find out more.
Period after Ponyville, comma after however.
Comma after such.
Comma after establishment, "it", not "that".
Comma after whore.
Missed a quotation mark.
Comma after Oh and soon.
Comma after oh and worry.
Comma after plan, period not comma.
Comma after dracony.
Comma after night.
Comma after Melody.
Ultra super alluring what?
Comma after so.
Capital R Root.
Comma after magic.
Comma after asked.
Period.
Comma after oh.
That feels, unnecessarily dark.
Comma after besides.
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Thanks for your help as usual