More pls

WE WANT MORE

Drat i was hoping Shining wouldn't turn back and after that scene with him and Cadance still swapped that Shining got pregnant and couldn't change back til after the birth. It would've been an amusing prank Crysalis pulls on Shining

This is amazing, you're the absolute best. I want to fawn over this with so many words — there's all these moments that are perfectly executed, sharp beats of dominance laid on top of each other. Characters being complete idiots and loveable and cute. Dirty, filthy talking about the best of things. And I'm speechless. I wish I could find even an ounce of your talent to tell you how well you did, but this rambling is the best I've got.

Thank you for writing, everything is great.

This was great. Again you pull your story in unexpected, but completely reasonable directions. I wonder if the note at the end is a hint at something the reader should recognize or just a funny addition.

Also, did you forget to mark the story as complete?

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I did forget! Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Definitely more.

Maybe something involving Chrysalis being "motivated" to practice her art on all three of them, getting Twilight into the mix, and a Dragonlands arc?

Incredible job on this, really.

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I see your point, but this wasn't really a prank story. I think that would give everything a real 180. Sorry!

This was rad, always love the stories that explore these two’s dynamic and his one is no exception. Having them explore each other’s bodies, helping them both to understand one another was a joy to read. Brilliant work

But…. Come onnnn did you have to stop it there

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Ok thnx but i hope you write another story where Shining as Cadance and vice versa for Cadance where Shining does end up pregnant as Cadance. I find those stories so fun to read as i am a fan of Role Reversal stories.

Wow, really had fun reading these last two chapters.
I do feel like I've got cold water splashed over me now that I'm done reading. Liked the twist that both characters did what they thought the other wanted to do; cadance screwing diplomats and shining throwing them in the dungeon.

I know that honest communication between characters is the bane of stories like this one, but part of me can't help but be a bit upset at how indignant Cadance (the real Cadance) was when she confronted her husband in this chapter. I mean, this all started because she apparently never told Shining Armor, "Honey, I have a lust-inducing aura. It causes ponies to become extremely attracted to me and forget their inhibitions when they're in my presence, but I've learned to live with it and never once been unfaithful to you. Also, our daughter has the same thing."

Oh, and "Also, Ambassador Crimson Wing has a domination aura, which I'm able to resist but I'm afraid you won't be able to."

I mean, Shining Armor (the real Shining Armor) was right to call out a lack of trust here. Yes, he went behind his wife's back [insert sex position joke here], but that's what happens when you know someone you trust isn't being honest with you. He might not have realized that Cadance was withholding information, but he was quite clearly registering a mismatch between what she was assuring him of (that she wasn't being objectified) and what he perceived (that she was), and wasn't getting a satisfactory answer when he informed her of that. While the two of them might have had their "love conquers all" moment near the end, the rest of it doesn't seem like a healthy marriage (especially since Goldenrod knows about Cadance's aura, so it's not like she needed to keep it a secret or anything).

Also, yeah, throwing a diplomat in jail? That's really going to come back to bite the Crystal Empire later on.

Oh, and the sex scenes were hot, too!

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I couldn't have said it better myself. All this could have been easily solved. If Cadance had just explained everything to Shining from the beginning.

Cadance sighs. “Fuck. Okay. Look. Wing has an aura too. We don’t know why. Goldenrod thinks his mother was impregnated by a very powerful, magic-wielding drake. It’s subtle. It takes time. And it’s not like he can control your mind. But ponies bend to his will if he works them enough and they aren’t used to it. I am used to it. You are not. If I’d let you two in the same room there’s no telling what he would’ve done to you. And if you and I worked together, the end result would be both of us humiliated. Shiny, it’s not your fault. But your integrity is your weakness to ponies like him . . . he would have fucked you.” He snorts. “He did fuck you.”

“I don’t care. I could’ve helped! I could have protected you and your reputation. We’re supposed to talk to each other, Cadey. We’re supposed to trust each other!”

“Trust?” Shining slams his hoof down onto the table with a bang. “Then what is this?” he hollers. “What are these?!” He reaches for her wings and pulls.

This part always makes me mad at Cadance. She wants to argue about trust. When she herself never trusted Shining enough to tell him the truth about her aura. Which she been living with her whole life. That's bullcrap! No one can blame Shining for doing what he did. Because he was just worried for his wife but if Cadance had just told him and stop making pointless excuses. He wouldn't have gone through with his plan.

It really bugs me that she's willing to trust another pony with her secret (Goldenrod) but not her own damn husband! I mean seriously. There's no excuse for her to keep Shining in the dark like that. What the hell was she so afraid of?

And seeing that Shining now knows the truth. Whatever fears she had been shot down. Shining now fully understands the situation and would trusts his wife 100% and no longer worry about her and the two of them could open their bedroom doors for other ponies to have fun with in private.

Seriously, why is it always so hard for people to do something as simple as honestly talk and calmly explain things or just tell the truth. You can't predict how the recipient would react to the news. Cause it might not go the way you think it would and it just makes you look like a complete idiot.

Just tell him the truth Cadance! It's not that hard.

“Why didn’t you tell me that ponies are treating you like that?” Cadance asks. “I could’ve helped. At least with Wing—”

More like, why didn't she just tell you everything before and why she kept it all a secret from you for so long?

Cadance makes Shining confess things, twice in this story

1. “Why, Shining—are you jealous?”

“Well—” He doesn’t like lying to his wife, and she can usually tell. “Yeah.”

She tilts her head. “Jealous of what?” she asks, circling him slowly. “Do you wish you got to make demands of our tiny, precariously-perched Kingdom? Or do you like to say mean things to a Princess, and hurt her feelings? Maybe you want to grope me in public and get away with it?”

“He groped you?”

“Don’t change the subject, dear.”

“No, I’m jealous that he isn’t held back from speaking his mind, and . . . ”

“And?”

“ . . . and I sometimes get the feeling you respect him more than me. Despite his behavior.”

2. “I know,” Cadance mutters.

Shining nuzzles her neck. “Did you really think I was sleeping around with Wing and the others for a bunch of rocks?”

“No!” Cadance exclaims. “I never did. I know you wouldn’t.”

“Then what—”

“I thought they were hurting you. Or using you. And that you thought you wouldn’t have a choice. I thought that you would suffer their appalling behavior in silence, so that our subjects can have better lives. I thought you would be too polite and accommodating towards ponies who don’t deserve you. And I thought—”

“Go on.”

“I thought you didn’t dislike it as much as you should.”

“You mean you thought I liked it. That I enjoyed it. Tell me. Did you enjoy them toying with you?”

Cadance nods once.

“I see.” Shining exhales.

Unless I’m missing something. She never explained why she kept everything a secret from Shining. Why keep him in the dark? Especially when she knew he was planning something. That clearly showed he didn't trust her enough.

Shining haves, a good excuse for doing his plan. But what's Cadance excuse for not telling him the truth from the start?

It was never about her cheating on him. Shining never suspect that she was. He was afraid she might get raped.

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You guys are right. I think I screwed up the ending. It's easy to judge silly horror movies when the victim could've prevented everything by calling the police, but then here I go basically doing the same thing. Oh well.

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I still love the story and the sex scenes were a lot of fun. But yeah, Cadance not telling Shining everything from the start. With absolutely no reason to do so. Is just as dumb as the stupid decisions people make in horror films.

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Maaaaybe I just assume this was closer to your other works, and I'm not going to say Cadance was lying to Shining at the end, there, I feel like it fits her given character to have a toxic, superior ego to her poor little mortal husband. Who, also to her credit, is a complete idiot and makes terrible decisions. She could have avoided all this by communicating clearly with Shining from the start, but also she shouldn't have to. She's the ruler of the entire country, a literal god who understand how all her little ponies' hearts work, and just how to wind them to get them doing exactly what she wants and makes them happiest. Shining should know how to follow along~

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She could have avoided all this by communicating clearly with Shining from the start, but also she shouldn't have to. She's the ruler of the entire country, a literal god who understand how all her little ponies' hearts work, and just how to wind them to get them doing exactly what she wants and makes them happiest. Shining should know how to follow along~

But she did told Goldenrod about her aura. So why tell him and not Shining? He would have understood. Just as he did at the end of the story.

Being a princess shouldn't matter! What would you say if she wasn't a princess? Just a normal, regular, mortal mare with a magical lust aura. Who chose not to be clear with her husband? More willing to tell a close friend her secret but not the guy she married.

Cadance haves no excuse. Especially since Shining straight up told her he was planning something. She could have told him everything right then and there but chose not to for some unexplained reason.

Sure, she was never being unfaithful to Shining. But she wasn't making things clear for him to understand. He was worried for her and after how upset and angry she was the last time she dealt with Crimson Wing. It only made him more worried that Crimson would succeed in actually raping his wife this time.

And it sure doesn't help that When he overhears others, like his guards. Talking about the things they saw happened to her without clarity, Chrysalis and Wing kept calling her a whore and saying she spread her legs for other nations leaders to get what she needs for her kingdom easier and Flurry (despite not knowing that Cadance was a fake) didn't at least called out on her mother behavior of actually eating her out. Instead of doing what they would normally do with the cooler. She could have said something after the sex. Since she was too horny to say before. But would have been great if she did.

And of course, Chrysalis lied to him about how she needed him to fuck her so she could obtain love to power up her magic.

Everyone in this story have been treating Shining badly and all because he is simply oblivious to what's going on when he’s not looking, keeping unnecessary secrets from with no explanation or reason.

But most of all he didn't fully trust his wife. That's his only real crime.

Well can you blame him. She wasn't making things easy him, when he voiced his worries for her. So, everyone is in on the situation in one form or the other. But Shining is purposely left out it and is just expected to just sit there and let his wife get molested and talk down too by everypony who comes in range of her and never need to know the reason why and if he ever she's the same thing happens to Flurry. He just needs to be the good father who lets it all happen and never speak up or questions why both his wife and daughter are constantly being molested by pony's day in and day out.

Like you said. He should just follow along and be happy with his life. No questions asked.

Poor Shining Armor. I feel sorry for you.

Is it sad to say that I’d like to see a sequel to this in the future.

Oh man, now I want to see two Shinings double teaming Flurryheart. Does this story take place in the same universe as 'How to Discipline Your Little Sister', out of curiosity?

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Eh, I wouldn't really worry about it too much. You're a good writer and people can get pretty emotionally invested in the actions and motivations of the characters you write. I certainly do. It's a good problem to have, I think.

Will there be any more chapters for this story or is it completely done?

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It says "The End" and is marked as completed. Don't know what else to tell you. Are you asking if there will be a sequel? Maybe. I don't have any plans but it's not impossible. What sort of continuation are you imagining? What do you want to happen to the characters?

This was a hot story overall. The characters of Wing, Sugar and Spice all had a lot of personality, and the sex scenes ooze with desire. Very nice.

It’s true that this is a story that requires people keeping secrets from one another in order to work, but I’d say don’t worry *too* much about it. It isn’t as if real life couples don’t hide things from each other.

I think you really hit on something with Wing and the twins. I’d like to see whether he can make his designs on Flurry Heart come to fruition.

Part two was a bit weird for me (not your fault, the writing was still good, it's the character combo that's just weird for me). Really enjoyed the rest though.

“Shiny, ponies have been eye-banging me since before I hit puberty. Everypony wonders how easy it would be to fuck me. Ponies always assume I’m a slut, or a whore, or even an evil succubus demon. Wherever I go, ponies grab my flanks or stroke my wings or lick my neck. They literally cannot help it. Who fucking cares if ponies only bow in my presence because they want to look between my legs, or if they’ll only follow my lead to stare at my ass?”

“Why didn’t you tell me that ponies are treating you like that?” Cadance asks.

Then how the hell Shining didn't notice back when you two started dating?

Now that you two are married and he’s near you (unless his back is turned) I can understand, but back then, especially before anyone even knew you two were together. I would expect that Shining would have at least notice.

I mean for freak sake a mare was just grinding herself on top of Cadance back, in front of a crowd of ponies. So, nopony never once tried doing that to the real Cadance in front of Shining?

It really makes you think how Cadance was able to keep the whole thing secret from him for so long. I know she had years since she was a filly to get use to it before meeting Shining, but still.

If it ok with you, can I write a prequel to this story?

Now add an extra chapter or sequel where Shining and Cadance have an orgy with Twilight and everyone gets pregnant, just for shits and giggles.