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Shirlendra


Long time Brony, Gamemaster and Gamer.

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During the height of Equestria's war with a vicious, relentless enemy, two reservists are sent to the northeast coast with one mission: Keep watch over the sea. Isolated on the foggy, rocky edge of the continent, the two find themselves brought together by more than just circumstance.

Collaboration with Gay For Gadot Based off a prompt from Bean's Writing Group Discord server, "The Fog".

Thanks to the illustrious Bean for the coverart and crucial feedback.

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Comments ( 11 )

Me: No!!! You're not allowed to leave us on a cliffhanger and let us not know the fate of these two characters I've grown attached to!

Shirlendra: Haha, great writing go brrr

You both already know what I think, wonderful work as always! And thank goodness that countertop finally got dusted! :rainbowlaugh:

Sweet and dreadful, as all such stories should be.

A wonderful story all the way through. The balance between the tension and tragedy of the ongoing conflict and the blooming romance between Compass and Sundial is well maintained. The conclusion is wonderfully gloomy. Well deserving of a like and favourite.

Well done, Gadot and Shirlendra!

Ding dong, review time here!

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I can now comment while having read this. I loved it, can't wait for another setting from you to take hold.

Well, fiddlesticks. That's a bummer of an ending, but damn, what brilliant writing. Downright exquisite!

Holy shit! This was a stellar exploration of (untagged?) sci-fi. The exploration of life during this war had such painstakingly good attention to detail. Your imagery and prose here are absolutely delightful, and there are more than a few really breathtaking lines in this. Delightfully dark, and just all-around a thrilling read.

Interesting read.

Personally I don't get too invested in short stories. They simply don't click with me, and I have a hard time feeling influence from so little words (yes, I understand this is pretty much 1/5 the word count of the average novel).

I very much appreciated the overall, gloomy atmosphere, though. I think that was my favorite part. The characters were cute in their interactions. I feel this story was successful in achieving it's aims despite my kind of "Eh." personal feelings on such fics. I understand my reaction to be bias against one-shots though, so i'll push that out of the way to be more fair.

The characters sharing a small, loving relationship and supplies, notably treats, with one-another STRONGLY reminded me of the novel The Road. In fact, I initially thought the story was going for a more subtle "the world actually ended and they're just pretending things are "normal" and manning an outpost while their supplies and the charade gradually dwindles", but it turns out it's more straightforward than that. The radio receiver and mention of no backup, rations, etc highlighted this for me.

The mystery of what is going on, and who this vague enemy belongs to is another intriguing aspect.

However, I have to wonder about the sense in building what appears to be a solitary tower as a military installation, tall in silhouette, and operated by two ponies who don't seem to take shifts(?), with a giant "please shoot me" light on it. It is easily and immediately destroyed by a distant enemy while those assigned to operate it are out of commission, which doesn't seem that smart. I forget if there was mention of understaffing, but it seems like there was just meant to be one or two ponies here, with the other arriving somewhat recently.

Wait...did they just...die. like...suicide?

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