Hello! I am Ceehoff, and as you see, I'm the author of "Equestria's First Human". Welcome to my FimFiction page! Here, you can read the other stories I have written other than EFH. Enjoy your stay!
(An "Equestria's First Human" side-story.)
Before the arrival of Equestria's First Human...
Before the founding of "Dragonfire"...
There was a stallion named Hellfire...
This is his story...
How it all began...
(This story has gore in the last two chapters.)
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Awesome! I can't wait to read this, have to go eat dinner.
Instant fave and thumb up.
2200317 You read it that quickly
2200319
Yes, I did...
Jk
I have problems.
2200327 I was about to say
The cover looks somewhat like Doom... in some way. Can't put my thumb on it.
And everything went downhill from there...
My God, I've read the whole thing. No wonder he's been consumed by hatred.
"This Fire,Hell Fire,This Fire In My Skin.This Burning,Desire,Is Turning Me To Sin."
First Thought After Reading The Title.
Oh god, this was amazing
*claps*
Nice going, Celly.
Oh my god, this is amazing!
I just love how the story is turning out and the descriptions the author gives, are awesome! I can't wait to read the second and third chapter. This is really good, thanks for the time and effort put into this!
No not the filly!
After reading this and EFH, I can imagine a Dante's Inferno-esque journey in Hellfire's afterlife. Nice job as always.
Well, damn.
I just finished reading this after reading the rewritten EFH, and I have to say, that was an incredible story. Hellfire's character definitely improved, and I especially enjoyed reading his backstory, now that he's a fully developed villain with an actual reason to do what he's been doing. That rewrite along with this story, was definitely worth the wait. I hope that someday I can write something as good as this xD Your awesome stories actually inspired me to get into writing in the first place, so I hope that you keep writing great stuff like this. Keep up the good work!
Whoever names their child (foal) Hellfire really needs to rethink every action they have done in life.
Whoa, I can feel emotion coming from him—literally.
His name was Hellfire even before he became a villain? You know, it kind of leans his future towards evil when you call somebody that.
The build-up to the tragedy could be seen coming from a mile away by just reading the first chapter; it's just too obivous, even to people who haven't heard of this Hellfire character of yours and who haven't looked at the cover art properly (or they have and they can't decipher the story a picture can tell). As for the story, It was alright - if not a little 'meh' and 'ugh' at some points.
Also, what I find rather ironic is that Hellfire suffers an inglorious, little to no dignity defeat at the hands of a *cough*self-insert*cough* human - yet her killed a dragon all by himself - and then getting eaten alive by a hydra. Look, I like OCs with a agonizingly tragic past who has a personal vendetta against Celestia and (at times) their inevitable defeat at the hands of good (or the crushing jaws of a hydra in this case...) as much as the next guy; but Hellfire, after all the shit he's been through, somewhat deserves a better end than that.
So yeah... there's my opinion on it all.
EDIT: Hold on, now. Just noticed the finished rewritten Equestria's First Human. Let me rephrase my comment.
2236337 Connor's not a self insert. He's a character I made for my high school comic series, who was based on me in little ways. I also like how you analyzed his death, but I just wanted to show a little effect of karma. He made a bad decision in life to lose himself in hatred and thus, he gets a less than dignifying defeat by being gorged on by the hydra. Karma's a bitch. However, I do like how you thought this through, and I mean that with no sarcasm whatsoever.
2237138 Karma's indeed a jestful mistress. While I find Hellfire's death a little unsatisfactory I would be lying if I said that twist with the hydra didn't surprise me - that and the fact that it's a better end to his campaign of evil than getting his horn snapped off and then getting launched somewhere by Celestia, deprived of all dignity (Connor going back to the real world and dying was a surprising twist too, to be honest).
By the way, ignore the "self insert" joke. It was poorly executed.
2238752 Yes, it was a better way to rid of him than my last idea... Seriously, what the hell was I thinking
Also, think nothing of it
I've had some other readers comment on that as well, so you're not the first, joking or not
Jesus Christ... THAT DRAGON IS A BASTARD
Dang...
If this story had its own TV Tropes page, then Chapter 2 would easily qualify for Adult Fear / High Octane Nightmare Fuel.
I genuinely hope his wife and daughter didn't suffer, and that their screams were just out of fear.
Finally read this after it being in my read later for so long. All I can say is good job man.
Finally got around to reading this after having it on my read later list for almost a year. Holy Hephaestus! that was intense. at least now I know why he went bat shit crazy. Great job
Oh my god, I remember this fanfic. I def need to give it a re-read for sure.