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She's young... she's innocent ... she's so cute even the Dark Gods wouldn't dare to make her cry...

Who is this young unicorn filly with the big smile that makes ancient evil entities nervous?

She is "The Herald"...

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Comments ( 39 )

When I read the description, I thought I was finding a story I could tear into...

I am happy to report, that it is not. This is well done, however, not exactly something I'd be interested in. I do still wish you good luck with this story, because I can see the effort behind it and I find it very commendable.

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You could do with a pre-reader, but this was pretty good! :twilightsmile:

1189394 Me too... TWE is eating my innocence!

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I Originally wrote this as a one-shot, an idea I had as a 'catch-all' solution for all the war and grimdark stories I see around here. Instead of armies and overwhelming firepower as I normally daydream about, I had the idea of something so teeth-achingly cute that any bad guy would give up without a fight.

I might make more chapters, hence the 'Incomplete' tag.

Odin cursed little filly with the cute and the popcorn and the advice and...fine. Tracking for great justice.

1189453 One quick question, is this based on religion? Just sayin' :rainbowkiss:
Yup, I daydream about overwhelming firepower too... Armour clad mercenaries shelling Canterlot with 105mm artillery while modified jet fighters take out pegasi... Anyways, I just write comedy (mostly) to deal with it :rainbowlaugh:

1189486 Nope. It's a twist on several ideas I had. :derpytongue2: It'll be a secret to be revealed whenever I decide to start writing on this again. Back to the Broken Mare for now! :twilightsmile:

I have to say this is quite nice! :pinkiehappy:
Photo Finish will express my desire for more... :coolphoto:

I LIKE IT. Take a thumb, kind sir/ madam :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Usually whenever I see the phrase "who is this pony" in a fic's description I know to stay the heck away.

But this is a really sweet little story you've got going here and I am very curious where you take it.

Carry on, good sir or madam, carry on.

:pinkiehappy: This story make me imma happy. it make good feelz in my everywhere. lulamoon......love that name. good tummy feels

LOVE THIS STORY!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

I would like some popped corn.:fluttercry:

1189453 I strongly support more chapters.

Neato..... I like it. :rainbowlaugh:

yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes-yes! :twilightsmile:

Would the wards stop me from hugging the hearald?
Who cares ill try any way, she is just too cute.

1563381 Just be sure to ask first. The Wards are there to keep anypony from laying hoof or magic upon her without her consent. :twilightsmile:

...And THAT'S how you deal with Anoying Dark Alicorn OC Mary Sue/Gary Stu's, YOU VANISH THEM TO THE SUN!:pinkiecrazy::trollestia:

I have to say, I love this. Hope it updates soon! :fluttercry::heart::twilightsmile:

this. this was cute.:rainbowkiss:
Almost too cute.:pinkiesick:

She's cute.

Too cute.

Bullets won't stop her . . . . we have to remember that Evil Things masquerade as Unbelievably Cute.

The Teacher didn't want to damage Scar's mind... Hmm... Maybe She didn't kill or brainwash him?.. I'm curious what She did with poor guy...

3572489 It's best you don't know. Trust me!:trollestia:

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I just wanna know, what kind of god She is. And Her actions is the best way to know it. How She deals with stubborn jerks, when Herald is not enough? What She do with them? Not death and not brainwashing - so what?
And what Herald is? The Teacher created her? Or Herald is brainwashed villain from the past, with erased memory and transformed into filly? Or Herald suffered something very bad in her past and The Teacher takes her and help when she ask Her to get rid about terrible memories? Or Herald is villain, that feel repentance and ask The Teacher for new life to do good things to compensate all bad things she did in past, and The Teacher granted her wish? Or... I have very good imagination and can make many theories, so tell me, please, what Herald is? Or write it in the next chapter, please :raritystarry:

And what about Nightmare Moon incident? Why The Teacher didn't help Her own daughters?

3572619 Oooo you are hitting so close to the mark. I haven't been able to post anything for any story in awhile due to my college scheduled. I've got ideas, and have started writing another chapter for this, but it will be when it will be!

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Agrh, so frustating!.. I can't wait for the next chapter!..

Hey, are you still alive?..

Hello-o?.. Are you still there? :rainbowhuh:

Welcome back. Sorry I couldn't come up with anything but I knew if I saved this something would happen. I hope the Pinkie Pie party from chap 1 is next. I like the idea of a little filly whom, it appears, could confuse Discord.

I immediately don't like this kid. I don't know why, but my gut reaction is to hate her, her teacher, and everything they stand for.

I'll be keeping an eye on this story. She's even more suspicious now.:trixieshiftleft:

I see another person abusing the broken feature box...

Thee, thou, thy, and thine. Please learn all four before you use them.

And by proclaiming the Teacher to be a God, you flushed this story right down the Mary Sue drain. It's a clumsy and hamfisted way to deal with the Gary Stu issue and turns a clever concept into "my imaginary penis is bigger than yours."

I liked this story, but your misuse of 'thee', 'thou', 'thy', and 'thine' kind of put me off. When the Teacher was called a god, this whole thing went into the Mary Suedom.

Yay, new chapter of Herald! Aaand, Herald have a daddy! "Saint Peter, don't you call me, 'cause I can't go, I owe my soul to the company store!". But where's Pinkie Welcoming Party for Herald and her daddy? If there's hanging a gun, it must shoot! But you said "until Teacher sent them back to work", so there was no party... It's a broken plot, you know?

4138734 Perhaps, but my use of the 'Teacher' is consisting with all other appearances so cannot fit the definition of a Mary Sue.
:pinkiehappy: Who she is, is a surprise for later!

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