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Dull Mist


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Silver Quill's childhood crush was a simple, fleeting thing, although one that he didn't really understand. But when he finally meets the pony that interested him so many years ago, his normally calm and organized mind is thrown for a loop. Now he has to get his feelings under control and not make a complete fool of himself while trying his hardest to get rid of this cursed writers block that got him here in the first place. Easier said than done.

First fic, constructive critisicm welcome.

Chapters (22)
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I am interested in this. I would like more. :pinkiehappy:

Made for each other? It certainly seems so. (Then again, how often is everything as it seems?) Sign me up for this ride.

1173871 Well I am nothing if not a crowd pleaser, so you can expect some more soon. Glad that you liked it.

:facehoof: silver quill no one gets bored when pinkie pie is in town

ITS PONYVILLE I CALLED IT

For some reason, a good portion of this chapter was cut out when I uploaded it. If you found the entrance of the exam to be confusing, rest assured that it makes much more sense now. I also corrected a few other various errors.

You need to work on your grammar. One of your biggest problems so far is that you keep on forgetting to put quotation marks around dialogue.

1183418 Thanks a bunch for the input. This is the first time in a long while that I've done creative writing just for the hell of it, as you can probably tell by the quality, so I'm not completely used to needing to use quotations. I looked through and fixed what errors I could find.

Really enjoying your depiction of Luna, can totally see her as being a musician. Keep up the good work.

More please. :pinkiehappy:

I CLAIM THE ALMIGHTY FIRS- 'gets hauled off in black van'

Luna your matchmaker i knew why she wanted him to go to ponyville :trollestia:

Luna is kind of trollestia but Luna :scootangel:

Okay, I gotta use this.

also, first.

Yaaaay! He finally meets her! :pinkiehappy:

But now I have to wait for ANOTHER chapter...:fluttershysad:

Okay,so you have anuff detail in the story and the plots good. The only problem i have with it is his casual relationship with princess Luna. I get that it's casual, but shes the Princess. Have him studder when trying to just say Luna. Or when hes talking to Applejack have him refer to her as Princess Luna. Just a suggestion. All in all a good story, keep it up.

Silly, obviously "Baking is like science for hungry ponies came from Pinkie herself! :derpytongue2:

There were a few grammar errors in there. Only small ones though. Good job.

I have to agree with 1376229 but nothing much to complain about

Huzzah! Another well-written and well-developed fic to read!

Love it so far!

Awwww, it's getting really cute between Silver and Twilight! :heart:
I really like the way you write, and I'm really enjoying this fic so far. :yay:

another great chapter

the romance is coming into view!

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Am I doing the romance part of this right? I can't help but shake the feeling that something is missing, or that I'm not going about this the way that I should. I'm just wondering if there's anything that doesn't sit well with the readers.

1569871 well if there is i can't find anything, try a chapter from Twilight's point of view.

1569871 I think that you're doing the romance part very well at the moment. I particularly liked the bit with Twilight's eyes, and the way Twilight might feel the same way for Silver. Don't think that you're doing anything wrong, cos I don't think you are! :raritywink:

:pinkiehappy: yay~ great job

(and might i just say my OC is an author :duck: )

Oh wow. Im early. Great chapter though :pinkiehappy:.

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Meh. I don't mind if you don't. Good story so far.

Why does this story only have 34 likes, it deserves sooo much more...
Cant wait for the next chapter!:rainbowkiss:

My powers of clarvoyance tell me that a future chapter will involve a conversation with Rarity on the subject of love brought on by Silver's emotional confusion.

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OI!

I'm the one writing this fic, not you! Don't be spoilin n' shit!

(You're half right)

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Oh, wouldn't you like to know? Just gonna have to speculate like everyone else I'm afraid.

" it almost sounded to Silver that she considered it to be the worst possible thing to happen to somepony."

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Great chapter!

I love this story :twilightsmile: :twilightsmile: :twilightsmile:

“Que?”
It wasn’t every day someone said something that stopped Silver right in his tracks. Heck, it wasn’t even every year. But as Luna as his witness, Spike had done just that.

i think you changed to another idiom there

:facehoof: UGH! I can't believe the guy still dosen't get it even after it's spelled out for him and served to him on a silver platter. I realize guys have skulls harder than diamond (myself included), but even I would've figured it out by now. And I'm pretty sure I'm nowhere near as smart as Silver. Don't take this the wrong way. I love the story and I like Silver as a character. I just really hate it when people act stupid. IT DRIVES ME CRAZY!:twilightangry2:

Watch your back Silver Quill, everypony is conspiring to 'throw you in for a loop'.:ajbemused:

Excellent story :moustache:

Although I think that Silver seems to be a bit too well balanced, I really like the story. I hope for new chapters soon, and since I don't quite yet understand how to watch or follow a story, here's a favorite.

:pinkiehappy:

Huzzah! A new chapter!
And things progressing quite well. You've paced the character and plot very reasonably, not like other 'first-love-at-sight and BAM date...' sort of things.

Only thing I noticed:
"out note, deep and throaty, mad itself known to him."

*made ?
Great chapter! I especially enjoy the emotional introspective moments, showing that the character doesn't really understand what's going on.

YAY :yay:

That ending is pretty good. Normally, Twilight wouldn't be caught dead saying something like that. And what's this, did Silver smile, like, a big smile? Oh, Luna, look what you've started!

I predict more cuteness at the cost of more awkwardness as each character decides what exactly this 'date' means.

Great work. :moustache:

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