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A gift from a magician gives the former great and powerful Trixie an opportunity to steal Twilight's magic to renew her traveling magic show. However, things don't go as expected and the two unicorns switch bodies instead, forcing Trixie to become the Amazing and Wonderful Sparkle, leaving Twilight in a bind.
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I think i already read this on FF.net
, will you continue the story?, or will it remain in the first chapters??
I expect you continue, the story can take a lot of turns
71360Right now, I'm bringing all four chapters over. The italics don't carry over so I have to go through and do those manually.
Once Return to Flight is done, I will work on this, Pinkie Pie swear!
This has potential. Tracking to make sure.
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Target(eye) acquired, cupcake armed, fire on break of promise.
awsome
Ah I read this before! =D Does that mean there will be new chapters?
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See the post above.
However, I might do one chapter for this story before I wrap up Return to Flight. My keyboard's getting hot lately.
intriguing
This is fun! Please keep it coming!
I wonder how Trixie was able to emulate Twilight's handwriting (err.... horn-writing? mage-writing?) well enough to fool Spike? Surely he's seen enough of Twilight's notes and scribbles to recognize her script.
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Good question! I like to think about those things as I write but that one escaped me.
I can come up with two theories:
a) Unicorns levitate a quill to write so their writing is tied to their magic. Since Trixie is in Twilight's body, it's a non-issue.
b) Trixie is good at forgery.
Take your pick.
72658I can come up with a third one: c. What was written in the letter caused Spike to become so distraught that he did not notice the difference in the hand/hoof/horn/mage/whatever writing.
Good story by the way.:pinkiehappy
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That's likely what I had in my head when I was writing it.
Chapter 4 is now up and I have decided to temporarily take this story out of hiatus to squeeze in one more chapter as a Christmas gift.
73760 Ah, goodie! I was waiting for you to update this on Fan-Fiction.com, but this is even better now that you put it up on here! Too bad you don't have this as "romance" as well, because I would be even MORE excited for it. But, as is, it's still hilarious and I can't wait for more! I love those two unicorns, and it's always funny when things like this happen.
Very interesting idea im liking it.
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Just about every Trixie/Twilight fic I've seen has romance as part of the equation so I'm following the road less traveled.
Of course, having just said that probably will cost me some stars and readers.
Eh he someones in for a beating
Whew! Got this out in record time! Don't be a stranger and leave some comments!
Author’s Hoof Notes
1. I still intend to finish Return to Flight before writing another chapter for Trixie’s Revenge. Granted, this story looks like the more popular one but I think focusing on just one fic is speeding up my progress as a writer. I’m still at the amateur level, though.
2. The machine being used is basically the same as the one seen in the episode Feeling Pinkie Keen save for a few minor additions. Twilight had tried to modify it to be a lie detector but the experiment failed. Her friends thought otherwise.
3. After Twilight gets zapped by the machine, I had many ideas on where to go with the chapter. Some of the rejected ones are below:
a. Angered by the mistrust, Twilight goes berserk, tapping into magic that Trixie apparently didn’t have and escapes. Not chosen because I thought it would make the story longer than I want it to be.
b. Twilight decides to use Pinkie Pie swears against them. Her friends are overconfident so they give the okay to say them out loud for every pony to hear. Hilarity ensues. Not chosen mainly because I couldn’t come up with enough of them.
c. Hocus comes in and explains everything. Not chosen because it’s deus ex machine.
4. Not written as part of the chapter: Rainbow had whispered to Fluttershy that she thought the pony downstairs was Twilight. Given her submissive nature, she went along with the assertion but not so much with using Spike to confirm it.
5. Initially, the Twilight-Spike scene downstairs was going to be all heartwarming but I wanted to flip the mood.
6. A late addition was the Trixie scene and it was written solely because not having her as part of the chapter would be a lump of coal to all my readers.
Enjoyable, though Trixie's scene reminds me a little of the post-Ginyu-body-swap scene, but with less violence.
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I actually watched Dragonball Z but I don't remember that scene. Maybe I subconsciously thought of it as I was writing?
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(I know that story, but yours is so interesting; please don't look up that arc until you're done
)
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Some of that arc is coming back to me but not all of it.
Doesn't matter anyway because I already thought out how I want to end the story but the ending won't be that apparent until the next chapter.
On a side note, oh noes! My stars are going down but I don't know why!
Okay, I said that mostly to use the
emoticon. Still, to any pony not too happy with my stories, if there's anything I can improve on, I'd like to know. Otherwise, I'd have to guess. 
Well, I for one can't vote 5/5 hard enough to make it go up, but I guess somepony might think it's predictable and be all
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I'm not one of those ponies. I noted the strong parallels, but am still genuinely interested in the resolution of it all.
for nits to pick, but this story is really enjoyable, in my opinion. 
I'll have to comb the story
Keep up the good work.
***SPOILER ALERT***
Author’s Hoof Notes for Tip of the Hat
1. Apologies for making this chapter short. I just wanted to come out with something quickly to show that, yes, I have finished my other fan fic, Return to Flight, and have begun working on this story.
2. Initially, I wanted Twilight to do the research and find out the details about the amulet but I found that to be boring.
3. I had no plans to bring back Hocus but since his actions got the wheels moving on this plot, it made sense for him to explain his rationale in some matter. That and it allowed me to provide some Trixie backstory and avoid using flashbacks. Not that I don’t like using flashbacks but it would have taken a while to set up and I don’t intend to make this story long.
4. Even though Hocus uses some French terminology, I actually hear him more like Bela Lugosi, the actor who played Dracula in the 1931 film.
5. How does Pinkie know Hocus? I left that out so that it’s open to the reader’s imagination but for me, she either found her way into his hat like our favorite derped-eye pony or she met him when the travelling carnival was still in operation.
***END SPOILER ALERT***
Or Pinkie, being Pinkie just knows him from the interdimensional highway....... :)
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I could picture Hocus being responsible for teaching Pinkie a thing or two about breaking the 4th wall...or the other way around!
Actually, the thought of Hocus and Pinkie joining forces is kinda scary, especially considering my Dracula hoof-note.
***SPOILER ALERT***
Author’s Hoof Notes for A Deal with the Trixie
1. If the first part of the chapter feels short, it’s because I wrote the second half first. I knew what I wanted to do at the magic show forward. Before that, I thought of doing some filler but decided it was better to keep the plot moving.
2. Quick note, since Trixie left early in the morning and arrived late in Hoofington, it pretty much took all day. With all the stops, Twilight and company took a day and a half to get there.
3. For a while, I had trouble handling Pinkie and Fluttershy in this chapter and after watching Boast Busters a few more times, I realized why. They don’t have any lines! Doy! Consequently, giving them an opinion on Trixie was all but impossible. At least I gave Pinkie something to do but poor, poor Fluttershy. Then again, why was she even there at Trixie’s show in Boast Busters? I wouldn’t think that would interest her. Oops. I’m going off track. Ok, moving on.
4. I was going to add more detail to Trixie’s appearance and the design of the cart but I decided to let you folks use your imagination. From my perspective, it has a “mysterious” feel to it but it’s still flashy. I initially had Rarity say something along those lines.
5. I almost made Trixie say Ursa Major but then I couldn’t get Rainbow’s line to work.
6. I didn’t want to spend too much time on the magic act itself for obvious reasons.
7. Trixie’s big magic trick was…I have no clue. Just coming up with two other feats from Trixie was hard enough.
8. Just my viewpoint, I didn’t want Princess Celestia to be involved in the plot in any way but I needed Twilight to have some kind of leverage. It does seem low for our adorkable purple unicorn but suffice it to say, she wasn’t going to mess around. Oh, and when Hocus said Trixie has to do it willingly, it was more on “casting a spell on her” or using physical force. Twilight would really want to see Trixie punished but like I said, Trixie has the better position here.
9. Trixie’s a drama queen when she cries, if you didn’t pick that up.
10. As for how it ended, wow. I shocked myself when I wrote it. That wasn’t the idea I had when I first started writing but with this plot, there’s just so many ways it can twist and turn.
11. For those expecting lengthier chapters, I’m seriously trying to condense everything since I may not have as much time to write as before. That and I continue to emphasize that this is my thought on how a sequel to Boast Busters would go and that means I have to get everything resolved by the next chapter.
12. I'm just adding this to those that don't follow my blog. I took some time to write a guide on how to develop a good OC pony, just because.
Developing OC Ponies Guide
*** END SPOILER ALERT ***
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Not writing in order?
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Shocking yourself?
Blasphemy!
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Good day.
Keep up the good work.
The Great and Powerful Trixie has returned, well kinda......
Very fun story to read.
Author’s Hoof Notes for The Show Must Go On
1. First off, JMO, I fell far short of what I wanted to do for the final chapter, the largest area being Trixie’s character development. Yes, it was rushed and that’s the result of starting this story at the same time as Return to Flight and taking a long break from it. I might end up doing a re-write down the road and add a chapter to cover that properly.
2. Doing a carnival was something I wasn’t planning to do but it was either that or assign the Mane 6 roles directly related to the magic show. That meant much more dialogue to write between them and I tend to struggle with it.
3. The initial plan was to bring back Hocus but decided to only provide support from afar. Whether he’d join the traveling carnival, that’s pretty much a no brainer. In fact, he probably had the list of ponies on the ready just to pull off a carnival himself as a romantic gesture.
4. I wanted to add a few more elements to the carnival but I held back partly because I want to use them for another story.
5. Rainbow being in the dunk tank, well, I felt like giving her a comeuppance courtesy of Fluttershy.
6. A last minute change was the final magic act. It was going to be transforming Spike to a large dragon but I wanted to avoid borrowing something from the show for once.
7. I intended for Trixie to write a letter to Princess Celestia which basically apologized for stealing Twilight’s magic but, eh, it felt flat to me.
8. One final note. I strayed from my usual writing style on this chapter to be more grammatically correct, mainly with attributions. Not sure if any of you liked that or not.
As fast as she came Trixie runs off into the night.
The whole time I had imagined Hocus in the crowd.
Good story I enjoyed it very much.
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Odd since I blocked Hocus out of my mind. Now you got me thinking he was just beyond the horizon, making his move and getting a big slap. Oh, I should have done that!
I'll admit that I was slightly disappointed in the final chapter. First off, it just begs for a sequel. For another thing, it was indeed VERY rushed. The whole scene where Twilight and Trixie switched back could've easily taken a good half page to a full page, not just one sentence. Plus, the ending...seriously? All that and Trixie just leaves? I mean, I really loved the premise of this story, it made me laugh, but...yeah, as you stated, this was kinda a poor last chapter. I'm really not trying to be mean, but...that's just how I feel. I also feel bad that it's over.
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If there's a sequel, it likely won't be coming from me. Writing stories with multiple characters is beyond my capabilities atm and I'm not sure I'll get there. Honestly, stories like these may be handled better written as a transcript.
As for the change back scene, I saw it as being exactly the same as the first time Trixie used the amulet and taking the reader through it again felt redundant but then again, I could be wrong. The ending, well, I never intended for Trixie to do an 180 on her personality. It's only the start of a change.
(Actually, Trixie said she was going to talk with others first which implied she was going to come back. That probably did not come out well enough in the story, though.)
IF I do a rewrite, I'll likely split the day before and the day of the carnival into two separate chapters and expand on both. The former would focus on Trixie getting more comfortable just being herself and the latter would be a sprinkling of more detail all around. Right now, I'm just fizzled out and it showed.
IF someone does write a sequel you should post a link on this story
151480 I'd try it, but I'm no good at writing Trixie in-character. I love Trix, she's one of my top 8 favorite ponies (all of which might as well be tied for first place, they shift so frequently), but I just can not write that boastfully to save me.
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If anyone decides to, just message me about it and we can work that out.
The only other plans related to this story is possible re-tweaking of the last two chapters to add more depth but the underlying story will stay the same.
I didn't realize you finished this. It was still good and the last chapter was okay. I hope to see more of your works.
Before the wheel hate
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I've forgotten about that line.
I will say that while I was watching the episode unfold, I kept saying "That's from my story!" Even the part where Trixie takes over Ponyville was a direction I contemplated going with Trixie's Revenge.
This chapter right here makes me come back every time (7th this year), and loves Twilights attempt at con-convincing her friends, and that moment with spike... Makes my day
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Thanks. That was probably one of the best chapters I wrote. Admittedly, everything after that is shaky.
Re-reading it again. I liked it that much. Must be my 6th time actually.
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Well, glad you liked it that much. This is actually my least favorite fic I wrote. So many things I did wrong, I would fix it if I had the time to do so.
"We’re so lucky have this gift bestowed to us"
missing a to and the to that is there should be on. I think.
4671819 Oops. Well, mistakes are expected, especially with this fic. No editor and I wrote it at the same time as another fic.
"have decided to longer be"
Missing a 'no'.
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It's been fixed
Trixie Trixie Trixie......strong raw Magic power is useless if you know nothing on how to use it effectively.
In fact, you're only hurting yourself further than if you'd just practice using your own magic.
Come on TGaP. Think about it.