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It's been two years since representatives of the United Human Federation arrived in Equestria, begging for help in a crisis situation. Months later, the Human-Equestrian Alliance was formed. But now, relations between the two species are strained, as mistrust begins to boil. It comes to a head when all UHF forces leave Equestria during a massive invasion, leaving the ponies to fight for themselves. Have the Humans abandoned their allies? Or do they have something bigger up their sleeves? The clock is ticking, as the ponies are on the verge of complete surrender, and humanity might just be Equestria's last hope.

(A/N: I know this is a beaten to death idea, but I'm putting my own spin on it, as well as some "Ace Combat" Elements.)

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 45 )

Excellent.
Two things though.
Double space; my God was that tedious to read as a wall.
"Guns guns guns!" Cole said... (PARAGRAPH TEXT HERE)

"Rouge One..."

"I... Know what..."

Like that (underlines added to show where quotes from the story are, and not my critique)
And, thoughts should be italicized or single quoted.
But aside from that, I want moar.
:D

Good story and great discription on the battle scenes keep up the good work

Wow, it's only been a couple hours and people already want more!
Well, I must give what my public demands!

Betrayed. Forgotten. Abandoned.

In Vorkuta, we are all brothers.

...I just had to say that.:twilightblush:

Ace Combat 4 Crossover. Awesome! Will definitely follow.

Ive seen that sorce pic somewhere oh yea it's from a game u can dowload on iPad called metal storm something lol random comment :derpytongue2:

I hope the wait will worth it :pinkiehappy:

NEW CHAPTER OMAGAAAAAAADDDDDDD :pinkiegasp:

Your story is so awesoome :rainbowkiss:

I can't wait to read more !

A ribbon insignia on a tail of a fighter jet AC4 Mobieus one? Blaze from AC5? Update NOW!

To all you AC4 vets, feel free to make Mobius 1 "You"

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Holy shit! As a Blaze fanboy, excuse me while I ejaculate for second...(grunts) :pinkiegasp::fluttershbad::raritydespair: ...okay I'm done! :pinkiecrazy::yay::twilightblush::twilightsheepish:

Those emoticons I used for my grunt...:twilightoops:

And now I must read this! It better be well-written or I'm gonna be pissed! :twilightangry2:

Silver out!

But one thing annoys me : This is the United HUMAN Federation, so why is everybody is American, and is using US weaponry ? :ajbemused:

I mean, it would be great if you could include more European (and why not Asian, if you like challenge :unsuresweetie:) characters (French, German, British,...) or some European technology in all this :ajsmug:

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Thanks for pointing that out, I hadn't thought about that.
The UHF is definitely not just American, they are a batch of every nationality, I just haven't gotten around to how to pointout the accents without breaking the 4th wall any more than I have
As to the tech, I am guilty for using only those of the US,and I'll be sure to include more European weapons from now on

Feel free to PM me if you need advice about French military (i'm French)

PS : As for the accent, maybe you could put some words in other languages or something like that (i'm reaally bad am writing :twilightsheepish:)

Fox One- Semi-active radar missile

Fox Two- Heatseeker

Fox Three- Active radar missile

That is the only critique I have for you.

Decent story.

Silver out!

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Euro, Russian, Asian and American tech all mish-moshed together would work just fine.

Anyways, this story is great and the military accuracy is surprisingly good.

You're doing good work here.

Silver out!

Ok, so here's my deal.

This was one of the first stories I ever read here. I read it back when there was only one chapter (which was bucking brilliant by the way), but I didn't have an account, and couldn't favorite it. When I did make an account, I came looking for it, but couldn't find it. Now, here I am, five months later, and this pops up in a group I was browsing.
Naturally, My first reaction was to say "Thank you sweet baby Jesus" :pinkiehappy: and give it an insta-fave and an upvote.
Then I see there are two more chapters than when I last saw it and I said, "MUST READ" :pinkiegasp:
Then I read it, and was put into an awesome coma. You have got some great stuff here. I would offer to help you out with any military matters, being something of an Ace Combat player and military-minded person myself, but you seem to have it all under wraps, which is why I enjoy this story so much.

Keep up the kick-ass work.

MOAR PLLLLEEEAAAASSSSEEEE

If you want this to be a true Ace Combat 6 crossover, you had better include the Aigaion, Gyges, and Kottos aerial squad! I will dislike this if it does not.

Ace Combat is a good game, but I find that hard to crossover with MLP.

The Great Eternal Artist,

Akasuna no Sasori

Soviet-Class Dreadnaughts

Oh please tell me Boris will make an appearance!:rainbowkiss:

In any case that was a nice story, though I'm curious what the Gryphons will use against the humans. Considering the presence of multiple known aces this may become a very short or very dangerous war.

Don't get me wrong, I love this story, but it's something of a wall of text. Perhaps indent your paragraphs, or leave a space between them? :twilightsmile: it would make reading it much easier on the eyes.

Other than that, you don't disappoint! If I could give it another upvote I would!

I loved the Ace Combat games, and I like the way this is going, and by the way Garuda was mentioned I can only hope Strigon team will make an appearance. :D

Keep up the good work on this story.

Oooh, it's been a while!

Also pegasi is the correct plural for pegasus, not pegusi. Just thought you'd know.

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DAMN I KEEP FORGETTING THAT!

Thank you :rainbowlaugh:

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Write it down on a post-it and stick it to your screen.

You needn't't hurry in posting chapters. Ask any reader of fanfiction and they'll tell you they prefer quality to quantity. Take your time, post only when you feel like you've done a good amount of revising and editing. That said, I enjoy the content you did deliver, and eagerly await the next chappy.

THAT HAS TO BE THE SORRIEST EXCUSE FOR A DRILL INSTRUCTOR I HAVE EVER SEEN! WHY IS THAT PRIVATE SMOERS?

But in all seriousness that was actually quite adequate

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It makes sense though that they would be sending those of different ranks to be drill sargeants. With half their homeland conquered and forces scattered, they would have to use whatever is left around.

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SIR! I AM NOT ENLISTED! I AM IN AIR FORCE OFFICER TRAINING AND THEREFORE NEVER FACED THE WRATH OF A DRILL SERGEANT SIR!

Also, Thank you!
Though I was unsure how to react when I saw Gunny Hartman commented on my fic... O_o

its short its sweet and it keeps to the pace, shoooooot i cant wait till the next chapter =D

A tunnel, if there is no flyin through a tunnel at some point, then no favs from here

"Talisman replied, fury in her eyes. "
Her?


...............Sure! Why not?

"Fox two!"

I just love saying that over the radio to my wingmates when I'm in the simulator. :)

Warlock for da win.

He he. Napalm-equals-fun!

Hope this continues soon, this is great!

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