The Cutie Mark Crusaders have exhausted practically every means they can think of in order to try for a Cutie Mark. However during their latest escapade involving hosting a tea party, a mistake gives Scootaloo an entirely new perspective on life. A perspective that keeps on expanding, transforming and warping her behaviour. Can Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle find a way to bring her back to her senses, before she gets too out of control?
(As commissioned by Maniko/MeisterLi)
2018 update changing the cover to some fanart by Cosmonaut
Chapters (8)
Holy moly 26,000 words!
This is gonna be a while. Liked in advance, just for the sheer amount of work you put into this.
[edit] posting this as a single chapter may not have been the best idea. Long chapters scare readers. I've found, that the word count generally accepted per chapter is somewhere around 2.5 to 4.5 thousand words. If I were you, I would have found a way to break this up into chapters.
While I can't doubt the story's premise as being anything less than thoroughly interesting, the great deals of exposition and the sheer chapter length make reading it seem to be daunting at best and I can't currently bring myself to tour in its entirety. I might suggest splitting its acts up into chunks; it's a lot easier to keep tabs on a chapter than it is to do so on a paragraph.
You also happen to miss a few points of punctuation - especially in dialogue tags, where the commas are almost endemically omitted - but I wouldn't suggest one worry oneself with that too much.
The terminal comma in general seems lacking and used where it shouldn't be, which creates a slightly jarring effect; for example, in
an em-dash would do quite well in the second comma's place, a comma taking the period's.
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I did separate it with a few breaks along the way, so I guess I could split it along there. That should split it up to about 4-5 thousand a piece.
[Edit] Now fully sorted into chapters.
2223855 Now there're even more words! And yeah, now it looks a lot nicer.
I can say be careful with long chapters, because I am guilty of them often. They scare people with less willpwoer away. ten, three thousand word chapters is a lot more comforting than one thirty thousand word story.
Once you get the story going, and get people reading it, then you can get away with long chapters, but for firing off it's a bad tactic.
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Seems I dropped a word at some point during the copying and pasting. I'm sure it wasn't important in any way, shape, or form.
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hopefully not.
Oh, Sweetie Belle. The truth. It comes out...
And yet, I find myself laughing.
(Damn, I'm evil.
)
Are we going to see a bonus chapter? Also...
"My books!" yelled Twilight.
"My bed!" Exclaimed Spike.
"My brand!" Shepard yelled.
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Oh Shepard, you and your special eyes.
As for a bonus chapter, I could see it happening, as long as you're referring to a Cheerilee bonus.
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Yes, I'm interested to see what Cheerilee will do at that size.
Also I want to see if Silver Spoon's going to do anything, because you made it sound like she was going to turn over a new leaf.
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I'm sure I could work something out when I get free time.
As for Silver Spoon, I'm not so sure, maybe I could give her some extra development somewhere.
I loved this fic! Are you going to write more macro/micro stories? Cause I'd love to see more of this, especially if it involves Twilight. I want to see our adorkable pony having size problems.
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I've written nothing but macro/micro recently, I'll probably do more, and Twilight seems like a perfect candidate.
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I just need to find a decent scenario to work Twilight into.
2341425 My best ideas are about Twilight trying a size spell, reading an old spell book with two pages together that create an unintended spell, Pinkie Pie messes around with one of her experiments, Spike wanted a shrink spell to spy on Rarity, Discord was bored...
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Funny you mention Spike wanting a shrink spell to spy on Rarity. I already started on something like that.
Are you thinking of making a bonus chapter, or maybe another story like this one?
There aren't enough of these stories on the site.
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Well someone else asked for a bonus chapter, so I guess one will come eventually.
As for 'more stories like this' do you mean more stories about the giant CMC? Or stories about giant ponies in general? Or do you prefer to see just general macro/micro?
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All of the above.
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And would you prefer them to be of a similar length as this one?
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That would be nice, most of them are really short.
A very well put together macro story. I liked this quite a bit.
Lol im a Guy XD
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Hmmmmm...
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What?
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I have no idea how that happened.
3253869 The thing is it didnt happen...I LIED
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The moral of this story:
Children are idiots.
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Pretty much.
Oh dear....
Somehow, despite the randomness of the story, the ending still feels a little incomplete.
Just perfect.
6362884 Agreed.
...wat
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Twilight’s just that good at magic that she can insert her name twice into a single sentence and make me look like a fool.
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XD
Haven't read this yet, just mentioning the ads on the page were both for Stash Tea.
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They know. Either that or Zecora is real, knows about this story, and has set up a business to benefit from the wants and needs of your average macrophile.
Who knows?
I remember reading this story when it came out, a great read and now with a great title picture.
I just wish there were more stories like this.
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Stories like this? Which means what exactly?
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Non-smut macro involving one (or more ) of the CMC being huge. It's a pretty cute concept in my opinion.
A minor nitpick but I’m pretty sure the school House has one room that’s it. There are no hallways