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From Episode "The Crystal Empire Part 2"
What if Twilight has failed her test when the Princess sent her to the Crystal Empire to save?
Twilight has failed her test and moves on to another school and moves on from being Princess Celestia's student which they have been close for a long time and see what her future holds?
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Oof.
This needs work.
Intresting start , but i think you can improve at least at this part a bit
like for example: After that she grabbed a few papers out of her bookshelf, lit a candle and went back to her table to coontinue with her Plan.
Avoid using the phrase "and then," you have it way too often and it makes your writing come off less as a story and more as a grocery list we're trying to get through.
I like it.
Yes this story does need work..
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Yeah I have used and then to much I still need a little more work with that
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Thank you for that I will change a bit of it
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Thank You!! And remember that Friday and Saturday I post new chapters.
Celestia really needs to think about what she's doing. She cares for twilight obviously but should have thought long term before dismissing her.
Yes she should
Why isn't there a King Sombra tag?
What about I am sorry for not reacting the way I should have. I know that I put a lot of pressure on you. I'm sorry.
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what do you mean??? You said nothing mean to me
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King Sombra name was on the story but he is not actually going to be in the story but he won't be tagged in the story
Hey Guys!! No new chapter today because I haven't planned the next part yet but next week stay tuned for the next chapter
Is this going to be the Equestria version of crystal prep?
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no not really
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Okay
I wonder if twilight will even bother going to the event.
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What if Starlight glimmer was the headmistress of the school? And if Celestia came she uses what she knows against her?
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She will but I don't want to spoil the story tho but you will see when the chapter is released
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Starlight won't be there but the headmaster is going to be someone from the mlp comics that I read
Nice work.
You did an amazing job with the emotional factor. Though by what was said in the last chapter I still think starlight glimmer coming.
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ok. sorry about the confusion.
WTF? I get she not a student anymore but how, when and why? What happened to the crystal empire, is Sombra in charge or did you just throw some random excuse for her not to be her student anymore and assume we won;t ask wtf?
I think Twilight and company were a little too hard on Celestia there
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You mean the rest of the main 6 and yes they went a little way to hard with her
Excellent as always. I hope celestia feels better soon. Twilight really needs to talk to her.
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Sombra is in charge now and you will see somehow in future chapter