It was another normal day in the next morning. Twilight woke up and got her breakfast and then went to the Sugarcube Corner to work with Pinkie. When Twilight got there and Pinkie was there waiting for her and Spike by the door.
"Hey Twilight," said Pinkie.
"Hey Pinkie! Are you ready to get to work?" said Twilight.
"You Bet! And later all of our friends are going on a picnic because Rainbow Dash has found a good spot for it!" said Pinkie.
"Ok," said Twilight.
Then they went inside to work and as for Twilight, she is in charge of the cashier.
With Spike on her side, they got to work while Pinkie Pie was at the kitchen to do some baking. Once they have taken their places Spike saw something strange going on in Twilight's face so he couldn't help it by talking to her.
"Is something wrong Twilight?" said Spike.
"No I am ok everything is fine I mean I am not with the princess all day and doing all the crap that she gives me," said Twilight.
"I know you are happy but you were being said about something else," said Spike with a wired face.
"I was?" said Twilight.
"Yeah, but let's talk about this somewhere else I don't want Pinkie hearing this," said Spike getting out of his seat.
They walked upstairs to talk and then found the perfect place to talk. Then they went inside the room and closed the door so no one can hear them talking.
"Ok Spike you win I will tell about this," said Twilight.
"Ok so spit it out right now because I am your friend, your one and only friend you can trust and talk to," said Spike.
"Alright, so it's actually Princess Celestia," said Twilight.
" I knew it! So tell me what's up with that?" said Spike.
"I might think that I have a strange feeling that she might try to get me back to study with her and send me lots of letters and visit me to talk," said Twilight.
"Well at least your not wrong because while you were sleeping last night she gave me this letter," said Spike handing her the letter.
After Twilight holed the letter with her magic then Spike spat out another letter from his mouth.
"Wow she can never be more annoying and I will read it when we get home," said Twilight putting the letter in her bag.
After Twilight put her letters in the bag she and Spike went downstairs to get back to finishing their work, and when they were downstairs everything was still and also no costumes came in.
"Well at least everything was still when we just talked for a few minutes," said Spike.
"Yeah, so let's get back to work," said Twilight.
Soon they got back to work and sold all the cupcakes to the ponies in Ponyville.
Back in Canterlot, Princess Celestia was in her private lair with the magic ball in front of her watching Twilight and watching what she was doing.
"Great now she knows about my plans of getting her back even though what she said about my annoyance really hurt my feelings but I'll take it anyway. But I won't give up on getting her back as my student and being in my studies," said Celestia.
After that she grabbed a few papers out of her bookshelf, lit a candle and went back to her table to continue with her plan.
Oof.
This needs work.
Intresting start , but i think you can improve at least at this part a bit
like for example: After that she grabbed a few papers out of her bookshelf, lit a candle and went back to her table to coontinue with her Plan.
Avoid using the phrase "and then," you have it way too often and it makes your writing come off less as a story and more as a grocery list we're trying to get through.
I like it.
Yes this story does need work..
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Yeah I have used and then to much I still need a little more work with that
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Thank you for that I will change a bit of it
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Thank You!! And remember that Friday and Saturday I post new chapters.
WTF? I get she not a student anymore but how, when and why? What happened to the crystal empire, is Sombra in charge or did you just throw some random excuse for her not to be her student anymore and assume we won;t ask wtf?