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CrimsonWolf360


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This story is a sequel to Scars


*Note, the suicide/self harm tag is only there just to be safe. I can't say any more without spoiling a huge part of the story.

*Note #2, This story is prewritten and will be uploaded bi-weekly.

After returning to Twilight's castle, Tempest is eager to find her place among ponykind. However, most ponies still only see her as the villainous commander of the Storm King. Despite Twilight's best efforts, Tempest just doesn't feel like she belongs with the rest of Equestria.

Takes place the day after Scars. If you haven't read that story, I implore you to please read it first. A lot of what happens in the first couple chapters of this story are going to reflect on that story, and you won't really understand what's going on too well or why Tempest's mindset is the way that it is throughout this story unless you read that story first.

Edited by my buddy AJ, as always.

Chapters (12)
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Comments ( 67 )

A solid start, or potentially a chapter 2 depending on how you want to count Scars.... The characters still feel solid, Tempest seems like she's going to be a very real character with real emotions and reactions, and I'm looking forward to getting into it!

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I hope it meets expectations. I've tried my hardest to make Tempest as realistic as I could.

Always happy to see something new from you!

David used to be in the Army right? I don’t remember if he saw combat but maybe he and Tempest could relate?

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David was indeed in the Army. As for if they'd get along? Who knows? It's a mystery :trollestia:

Excellent writing, I’m excited to see how tempest and David get along!

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It'll be exciting to see for sure :D

This is an amazing story, please keep going 🙂

Sky walked over to the front door and opened it to reveal none other than Princess Celestia herself.

Wait, when did celestia get involved?

Comment posted by CrimsonWolf360 deleted Aug 23rd, 2019

"...If just one pony believes in you / Deep enough, and strong enough / Believes in you..." :fluttercry:

Tempest will finally get the help she needs...

Tempest isn't 'okay'; she hasn't been 'okay' for a long time. She will be, though. She needs help - most importantly she needs to finally have a proper unicorn specialist look at her horn for closure; can it be repaired or is it non fixable; some damn closure on this. She needs a support network, friends she can talk to, maybe a psychologist or therapist... Still, this is very good; she's put a first hoof on a new path to walk.

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I agree wholeheartedly with you. Tempest has been through a lot. She needs a lot of help to fix that. One afternoon of venting won't fix two decades of trauma.

"I can't thank you both enough for sending me your letter and getting me here in time. It appears that once more I will have to reprehend all of Canterlot with a sternly worded speech voicing my disapproval." Celestia said, shaking her head.

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Most importantly I would like a scene of some "horn specialists" looking at Tempest's horn; Celestia organizing it all; she's the Princess, let's see her flex a little royal muscle and get Tempest in to see some of the absolute best specialists Equestria has for this! If nothing else, get Twilight Sparkle on it; she's the scholar of magic after all, maybe she can come up with something based on the advice / guidance of the specialists. Something like this would go a long way to helping Tempest be at peace.

This was a good story and I’m excited for your next on!

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Thank you :D

I hope it meets your expectations. I'm really excited about it ^_^

I know it's a personal thing for me, but the human insert OC brought the story down a bit for me. No disrespect to the OC's owner, though; overall 8/10.

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Well, I mean, this story is part of a universe that kinda revolves around my OC's, so... yeah.

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I was only partly aware of this. Your OC is not badly-written or anything, it'd just I don't like the character archetype. Still, great story, 8/10.

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I understand. Glad you liked the story otherwise though.

Well color me impressed, you managed to make another story that has exceeded my expectations and more. Bravo, and I welcome your book into my Silver Standard Library, where books that go above and beyond the normal code take their place in the light. Well done, and I look forward to reading your newest book as you continue to inspire and astound me.

Thank you so much for all of your hard work,
Shadow Quill, Messenger of the Moon.

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Thank you so much. I really appreciate that :)

I do hope you enjoy the rest of my stories as well. I try my hardest to put my heart and soul into them ^_^

You mention that Scar story but cannot find it in your account

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It's linked to this story... that's weird. I don't know why it wouldn't show up on my account. It's rated Mature, so maybe that's why?

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Ah maybe because of that. Have to check my settings , tough I think I put filter on Pony Mature stuff for a reason 😉

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Understandable. I hope you enjoy the rest of my stories then :)

"No... She's not." She whispered before walking off.

Awww... Poor Tempest :fluttercry:


Also...

It was as if the entirety of Canterlot had disappeared in the blink of an eye, and the eight of them were the only living creatures left in the whole city.

Aren't there just seven of them there? The Mane Six minus Dash, Tempest and Spike?

As soon as I read that location description I knew what, or rather who, was coming :D
Although I kinda expected Sky having to go dive after Tempest and catching her mid-air... Am I thinking too dark? :twilightsheepish:

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Ah... you have exposed my horrible math skills... It will be fixed

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I thought about it for a while. I just figured that'd be a tad too cliche for this story ;)

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Heh, fair enough. You're probably right about the cliché, seeing as that was what I expected ;)

"T-thank you, but I don't think that... wait... I never told you my name." She said, eyes squinting in realization.

Ohh, Sky... Classic mistake, saying something you shouldn't know...

Really enjoying the story so far :)


Also ;)

Right below the neckline of where her bodysuit would have bee, there was a small scar, right next to her jugular.

I think that should be a "have been".

Amazing story, can´t wait to read the next part tomorrow :twilightsheepish:

Nice, wholesome story. Glad things turned out well for Tempest.

(minor spoiler for the show's finale)
I wonder how the fight at Canterlot castle would have turned out if Tempest would have been there as Twilight's royal guard. Tirek, Chrysalis and Cozy Glow probably wouldn't have taken over so relatively easily with her in the picture :)

Incidentally, I've also had this story's cover as a wallpaper for a while now, this time on one of my phones. Nice to know it's story too :twilightsmile:

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I'm glad you liked the story. And the art ^_^

I hope you enjoy the next story just as much

And Crimson Sky has made an appearance. It'll be interesting to see how these two interact, especially since Sky can relate to Tempest when it comes to dealing with guilt over past actions. Also curious how ponies in general will eventually warm up to Tempest; a bit surprised that seeing her associating with known heroes of Equestria isn't enough for them to come to the conclusion that she is at least worth the benefit of the doubt. I've been enjoying the story, thus far, and look forward to reading more when I can.

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