Twilight stays with Spike as his life finally reaches its end.
rated teen for Sadness. Don't read if you can't handle sadness
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Silver Butcher
I shall Butcher your dreams
Silver Butcher
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...really really kinda needs an editor. Or six.
My Feels were kicked, hard
This is one of the first ever fanfictions to actually make me fully cry.
This is a very moving and emotional fanfiction, great job
Good story, it made me cry a little
The story itself is decent for what it is, but there's a noticeable number of grammar or spelling errors in it.
8487354
thanks you, this was my first attempt at making a sadstory
8487843
I need an editor I know.
8487290
im aware
8487360
it made me cry to, and I wrote it.
8487304
im sorry bout that. but that is what the story was meant to do.
8487929 I know
8487917
No problem, keep up the good work!!!
The grammar, of course, needs fixing, but the idea itself saves the fic for me. Dragons live for a very long time, but to travel so far into the future that it's Spike time to go is very clever. You should be proud of yourself writing this little piece despite the prose—which is easy to improve over time.
Overall, I enjoyed this. Get yourself an editor, keep writing, and you'll improve before you know it.
8489752
you know any good editors?
8489754
I'd be willing to help ya mate.
Send me a G-Doc if ya have one.
8489338
I don't know if I should right another sad story, this one is still making me cry
Ignoring syntax, the concept of the story certainly has promise, though the execution of it is rather mediocre.
The emotion in this story is too forced and saturated, and it ultimately takes away from the story as a whole.
Perhaps if this story was more drawn out and expanded upon, then it would feel more complete instead of feeling ultimately rushed.
8493185
How's this one?
8493118
You do whatever you feel like, if you are finding it hard to write sad stories then try and go for a comedy, romance, adventure etc. But if you enjoy to write sad stories then go for it!! You could even do something like an adventure mixed with a dark storyline if you really want so it's not just all one category
Hopefully this is a useful comment to you :3
Huh...what's this water coming out of my eyes.....this..this was so beautiful
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thank you
9279852
I'm sorry, I should have put a warning at the beginning. (WARNING, ONION CHOPPING NINJA'S ARE NEAR!)
Seriously thou I hope you liked the overall story tho. even if it was made to make you cry.
9279859
yeah, unfortunately, I seem to have a gift at making people cry. it's simple if as your writing your not crying...start over
I'm not crying, you're crying!
9291415
sure, sure I'm the one crying.
9291472
Yes, thank you! *Sniffle*
I'm glad I cried
9465564
I'm never writing sad stuff again, It makes me cry when I wright
I swear to God my long dead heart beats once every time I read this
9610415
I am a master of sadness, and I'm not immune to my own powers
Beautyful
1 like. That makes 80
The sequel is not for me since i read she dies in war. No thank to stuff like that...
Damn... I have to go there eventually with my storys to
So beautiful I didn´t cry