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ThePerverted1EyedBrony


Hey guys I'm here and hope you guys enjoy the fic that I'm currently working on. Also, neither of us are on during the day, so we're only one once in a while or at night, hope you enjoy :)

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In a world where brony's, MLP, and anything MLP doesn't exist, one man must do his duty and help strengthen a seal over 2000 years old, but in his heart he wants nothing but friendship, will he give up on the mission to get it, and if so what will his group of friends endure to keep their friendship strong? What will happen to this rag tag group throughout this series.


First few Chapters are just story on how they all get together.


Written by a friend and myself, edited by both of us.


Looking for a better name for the story, the most liked name that both me and my friend like will be the name and your name will be featured in this longer description.

Rated teen for, Swearing, mild gore (bleeding, broken bones), mild dark tag in certain times, and sexy hijinkx, all characters under 18 are 18 in this fic.

Other tag's include:
NightMare Moon
DayBreaker
Midnight Sparkle
Tantibus
Flurry Heart
NightMare Rarity
Tempest Shadow
Dark at some points
Minor gore

Chapters (13)
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Comments ( 37 )
Comment posted by ThePerverted1EyedBrony deleted Oct 5th, 2017
Comment posted by ThePerverted1EyedBrony deleted Oct 5th, 2017

This is physically painful to read. It's not the worst thing I've seen on this site, but it's pretty damn bad. Woof. Just....this is awful. I'm sorry, it's awful.

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Well if you want likes instead of dislikes, try writing a story that isn't crap. It's pretty straightforward: good stories get likes. Bad stories don't.

Eh, stick with it. Very few people get really popular right off the bat.

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Thank you for your positive feed back, This is from the writer of the first arc, :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::raritystarry::twilightblush::twilightsmile:

Comment posted by ThePerverted1EyedBrony deleted Oct 5th, 2017
Comment posted by ThePerverted1EyedBrony deleted Oct 5th, 2017

Okay, so no one has found the chapter 2 reference yet. Okay, time for another hint, it's not out in the anime version, AKA it's only in the manga you can find it.

Hints:
Seven Deadly sins
Only shown in the manga

Good luck finding it. :pinkiehappy::trollestia:

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Sorry for the previous comment, I (The writer) haven't read what you've written, but I would like some positive feedback on what I might have done wrong to help myself improve. I hope that the other comment by my friend didn't hurt you too much, I can tell you that the next time I see him, I'll be kicking his butt to next century, :fluttershbad::fluttershyouch:

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Time for another hint; It happens after the demon race breaks out and a character is revealed to be one of the goddess race.

Have fun finding it. :pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

The chapter seem to be going very fast and the character is Gary su The story could also use more back confirmation why the àlcorns are in our world and maybe some history of the main character

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The reason the alicons are there will be explained in a later chapter.

As for the main character, he's been alone his whole life. And I you've read all the words carefully, you can tell that his parents had all his acquaintances killed by a mercenary, and the people they did approve, had only used him to further their own businesses. And having a life like that means he's gonna have some trust issues. He doesn't feel like he can fully trust them. That's why he's acting like a mature adult, and showing some childish behaviour. In short; he's gonna open up about his past in a later chapter

And who's the mercenary, well... They're a character that's been recently introduced. Fizzlepop:raritywink:

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If you think we've been bad so far, you have another thing coming. :pinkiecrazy:😈

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Okay screw it!!! The reference from Chapter 2 is at this video's time of 6:30 so watch it if you want to get the reference and the music I want to be playing till the disguise is revealed. and what our hero would SOMEWHAT look like during that one minute. :pinkiehappy:

I found my story on the main page after putting out the new chapter. Thanks to all the readers and everyone that's commented and read this fic. I'M SO HAPPY!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::yay::raritystarry::twilightsmile:😂

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The other reason it's going like that is because: A) it's in his own head so he's kinda OP. B) would you rather have him getting his powers at bad times and things going south because of him learning new powers. So this was a fast, easy, and flowed into the story easily.

It's ok, but do you really need to enlarge and bold so many words. I mean I get it's to indicate one is screaming, but I think readers can tell just by noticing the exclamation point at the end of certain sentences to know the feeling of the person.

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Ya, good point, I think that I should stop doing that, but I did that to show that the character is truly at their limits of BS they're willing to take or to show how desperate the situation is. Also thanks for commenting, I like your fic Girls of my Life, I don't know if theirs a sequel or not, but I made a rule with my friend that any fics he thinks I might like he could suggest so long as they weren't m rating, I hope you still participate in the contests and enjoy the coming of chapter 9 this friday.:twilightblush:

(Written by the writer of the fic)

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Don't you hate it when your comments don't get a response?

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Ya, but oh well, I've learned to put up with it. But thanks for the comment. Hope you participate in the contests for this series and the other contests. (Rules are in blog posts) hope you participate. :pinkiehappy:

FNAF
Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagann
My Hero Academia

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I am also intrigued and shall be following this till the end.

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Thanks. I hope you do. The finale of this arc is the next chapter and the second arc will be made after I've edited all of these chapters and made them sound better. I would also like you to be a second set of eyes on my fic. please PM me if you are interested.

General rule of thumb, my dude.

I'd recommend not bolding/coloring your dialogue and other text, and I would refrain from increasing the font size of your words as well. It draws too much attention away from everything else and I found myself getting distracted to the colorful and huge-font words.

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That's why I'm currently editing the series for things people have told me that they wanted removed, so I've been editing the series and have only edited the prologue through chapter 4.

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As it's creator I agree. I just don't like that it was added to the [Absolutely Disgusting] group. To me that just tells me that people think that my writing is just the worst ever. At least I was able to fiish this arc, and I don't think that I'll continue because almost everyone hates it. I'll just do the editing of the chapters and I hope you enjoy this series when it's written by the owner of this account.:fluttershysad:

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I didn't know; I hope to read your fic but i'm currently on class break but I wish you the best of luck. I also hope you enjoyed the fic

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I will read your story when I'm not busy writing

Just a little update; I would like to find a title that isn't copywritten or something else, so if you have any good idea's for names; please PM me and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. And for Arc-II; I've been working on it, but I haven't worked on it much, that's because I haven't had a lot of free time to work on it with school, family, and work, I hope you all understand that I've been working on it; but I can't really work on it unless I'm alone or I just got hit with an inspiration bomb. I hope you all enjoy the fic and I hope you all continue to read. This is the writer saying Stay Awesome! :pinkiehappy:

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