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ThePerverted1EyedBrony


Hey guys I'm here and hope you guys enjoy the fic that I'm currently working on.


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In a world where brony's, MLP, and anything MLP doesn't exist, one man must do his duty and help strengthen a seal over 2000 years old, but in his heart he wants nothing but friendship, will he give up on the mission to get it, and if so what will his group of friends endure to keep their friendship strong?


First few Chapters are just story on how they all get together.


Written by a friend and myself, edited by both of us.


Looking for a better name for the story, the most liked name that both me and my friend like will be the name and your name will be featured in this longer description.


Rated teen for, Swearing, mild gore (bleeding, broken bones), mild dark tag in certain times, and sexy hijinkx, all characters under 18 are 18 in this fic.

Other tag's include:
Slice of Life
NightMare Moon
DayBreaker
Midnight Sparkle
Tantibus

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 20 )
Comment posted by ThePerverted1EyedBrony deleted October 5th
Comment posted by ThePerverted1EyedBrony deleted October 5th

This is physically painful to read. It's not the worst thing I've seen on this site, but it's pretty damn bad. Woof. Just....this is awful. I'm sorry, it's awful.

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Well if you want likes instead of dislikes, try writing a story that isn't crap. It's pretty straightforward: good stories get likes. Bad stories don't.

Eh, stick with it. Very few people get really popular right off the bat.

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Thank you for your positive feed back, This is from the writer of the first arc, :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::raritystarry::twilightblush::twilightsmile:

Comment posted by ThePerverted1EyedBrony deleted October 5th

Has anyone spotted the reference in chapter 2 yet?:pinkiegasp::trollestia:

Comment posted by ThePerverted1EyedBrony deleted October 5th

Okay, so no one has found the chapter 2 reference yet. Okay, time for another hint, it's not out in the anime version, AKA it's only in the manga you can find it.

Hints:
Seven Deadly sins
Only shown in the manga

Good luck finding it. :pinkiehappy::trollestia:

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Sorry for the previous comment, I (The writer) haven't read what you've written, but I would like some positive feedback on what I might have done wrong to help myself improve. I hope that the other comment by my friend didn't hurt you too much, I can tell you that the next time I see him, I'll be kicking his butt to next century, :fluttershbad::fluttershyouch:

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Time for another hint; It happens after the demon race breaks out and a character is revealed to be one of the goddess race.

Have fun finding it. :pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

The chapter seem to be going very fast and the character is Gary su The story could also use more back confirmation why the àlcorns are in our world and maybe some history of the main character

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The reason the alicons are there will be explained in a later chapter.

As for the main character, he's been alone his whole life. And I you've read all the words carefully, you can tell that his parents had all his acquaintances killed by a mercenary, and the people they did approve, had only used him to further their own businesses. And having a life like that means he's gonna have some trust issues. He doesn't feel like he can fully trust them. That's why he's acting like a mature adult, and showing some childish behaviour. In short; he's gonna open up about his past in a later chapter

And who's the mercenary, well... They're a character that's been recently introduced. Fizzlepop:raritywink:

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If you think we've been bad so far, you have another thing coming. :pinkiecrazy:😈

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Okay screw it!!! The reference from Chapter 2 is at this video's time of 6:30 so watch it if you want to get the reference and the music I want to be playing till the disguise is revealed. and what our hero would SOMEWHAT look like during that one minute. :pinkiehappy:

I found my story on the main page after putting out the new chapter. Thanks to all the readers and everyone that's commented and read this fic. I'M SO HAPPY!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::yay::raritystarry::twilightsmile:😂

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The other reason it's going like that is because: A) it's in his own head so he's kinda OP. B) would you rather have him getting his powers at bad times and things going south because of him learning new powers. So this was a fast, easy, and flowed into the story easily.

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