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Da~amn! Look at those curves.
if he marries one of the does he could assimilate the countries into one! see, its the perfect plan
Great chapter looking forward to the next
This here was pure genius
Dem curves indeed.
Anyway, Alex certainly did good to take the timid gazelle to talk, huh? He didn't need to provide any persuasion to get the information from her.
And a declaration? Of what? Cheese for everyone from Sheogorath?
I presume it's a declaration of war.
Welp, things just got way more complicated. Joy!
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Good method with circa 4000-5000 years of mostly successful usage. But this method had disadvantages. You can marry one princess, who will try to push interests of her homeland and House (and by this, she can make other noble Houses and tribes unhappy) or, if you marry more princesses, you have harem, that ALWAYS becomes absolute horror of deadly intrigues and dirtgames. And you need to forget about any happiness in your marriage, unless you are lucky bastard.
Hmm...I don't mind a protagonist with comedic value and who does random stuff at times. However there is a difference between such a character and somebody who is too dumb to live. Yours is starting to lean more towards the latter.
Your character is getting a bit too sily for me personally. "We didn't want to assasinate you, we wanted to kidnap you." Is that supposed to be comforting? Apparently for the MC it is.
Really? Nothing too nefarious? I can dig a character that from time to time or even most of the time is rather laid back. I can not dig a character that is borderline incompetent. The stuff those Gazelles tried to pull on him is not OK in any way, form or shape. I applaud that the doesn't make rash decision and tries to get their version of the story as well, but that does not mean their intentions were not nefarious, especially considering his fate at the end is left...ambigious.
Also whilst they are maybe following orders they still tried kidnapping him. I don't think anybody ever went free because they were 'just following orders.'
I don't mind a silly character so long as he realizes the moments where he can be silly and the moments where he has to be serious. If he doesn't I at least want him punished for his idiocy.
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How is the progress on that other chapter for that other story going along?
Alexander the unicorn also needs to exercise his antics...as a unicorn.
Found a few mistakes
Giving everybody enough time to react and for me to hid behind Susi for protection.
*hide
Bakuss did insured me that
*insure
is patrolled by Palace guard but
*by the
to be stuck in her for attempted assault.
*here
The risk outweigh the benefits.”
*outweighs
She flinch a bit back
*flinched
“Sorry did I missed something.”
*miss
so when watching her nipple on those Microsoft paint minerals
*nibble
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Well as stated in the author notes after this things will finally begin to be cranked up a notch. I mean Alexander now has a war on his hands that simply came into be, because he is here. They are obviously powers out there that don't want to Zebra's to reunite so the best time to strike would be now.
Also there is allot of legend attached to the line of Monkey Kings, so if its not the Zebra's then the very presence of a new hair to the throne is also enough for foreign powers to intervene.
Alex will have to get serious and clever regardless, the very life of his own citizens is at the line now. So hopefully I can redeem your view on him in future chapters to come. Specifically the next one which already has over 4k words under its belt.
Yes its still under construction, especially since I am planning to add the BATTLE into it as well. Will have to see.
Keep it going.
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For the love off...why cant you peoples just highlight the entire paragraph that has the mistake in it. Its easier to search and find, especially in chapter as long as this.
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Not to mention those hips
OOHHH!!! *hops on tipsys*
This looks promisin! Ah'm so excited ta read this!!
A declaration of war? A declaration of love? A declaration of cheese?
Mmm, cheese...
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Forgot the most important word in the entire sentence -_- Not just missed by me but by my editors as well. Are we all blind or something?
Also I fixed it now.
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I'm juuuuuust getting on it, so I should be done with it today
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perfect~
might i suggest a magic staff my friend? preferably one that can clone itself, change it's size and fight on it's own? preferably one n otehr creature can lift.
alright, first this is a nice chapter, second that second picture is down right adorable.
I see you too played Final Fantasy 12 (or was it 11, hard to keep track).
Those are some nice curves~
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because then the the majority of paragraphs would be in the comments.
or held you’re a simple wanna be burglar and criminal inside of them.
erase the "a"
Even more intriguing was the blue colored gem that of them had imbedded into the front of its skull
that one of them had
O
killjoy
nibble
fidgeted
Two things I wish I had, BFG 9000 fro DOOM and Nethacite from Final Fantasy...
No offense but you really need some capable editors, there are a great deal of spelling and grammatical mistakes that disrupt the flow of an otherwise entertaining story
Lol. Nothing is ever interesting unless you have Shaka and Ghandi in a game. (This story definitely needs civs like them)
Also, get ready for a massive flood of impis on your borders or something.
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It's Twelve.
So thing are starting to go from 0 to 100 in a less than timely way, I'm ok with this.
god damn that booty on the 2nd pic but something feels off about it, I think it's because the angle of the back is slightly pointing down as if she was bending her front 2 legs but she standing up straight.
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Artistic choice, need to priority that ass.
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...Well your priority has made her ass and thighs appear like she's part bird. Cause... well it is hard to actually see it fitting without her bones having been broken and realigned, or mutated, so yeah, not really all that into it. The booty is top grade, but does not fit with the pose or body alignment.
A declaration of war? Already? Alex is one unlucky bastard. Wonder if it's the pony princesses, as the description says that they think he's a threat to their nation
Or he would simply get lost and never be heard of again.
And me.
But I wonder why. I mean, he does so many unexpected things I should expect him to do unexpected things like that.
Including readers like me to keep them reading. (It's working!)
Yup, more coffee needed.
Good chapter!
I can't wait to see what happens next!
Also, good work with the pictures.
I guess I found a typo:
Should that one be "species"?
Your sexy approach is damn good Nava
8385282 I am happy to hear that he will improve. I like the story and I also like the persian/mesopotamian style you use. Under used in stories like these.
Considering Alex is going to war I hope that you will also adress matters of logistics (there's a saying amateurs speak of tactics, professionals speak of logistics, an army that can't be fed or is ill equipped or can't replenish it's battlefield lossess isn't going to be a veru succesfull army) and economics (you might win a hundred battles, but if you need a hundred and one to win, but can't afford one more then you still lose).
I think Alex has popular support on his side since he seems to be an almost messiah like figure for them and they're fighting a defensive war (they're the ones who's homes are getting attacked, that's always a good boost for morale).
Now though, I imagine Alex rules no more than a single city state since so far no 'bannermen' or other nobles who rule other cities have sworn fealty to him. Nothing has been said about governors either so at the moment it looks like he controls one wealthy city state. Maybe this would be a good moment to make alliances. One of the ground types Sun Tzu describes in the Art of War is called 'ground of intersecting highways.'
"Ground which forms the key to three contiguous states, so that he who occupies it first has most of the Empire at his command,"
Basically make sure your neighbours either help you and/or don't help the enemy. I will be curious to see how Alex will reunite the fractured Zebra empire. I imagine the place is similar to China (or what is modern day China at least) in the Warring States period. A lot of those rulers of city states probably don't want to give up their power to Alex. I don't know who declared war on him (one of the other zebra's? a foreign force?)
If it is the former and he is powerful then make sure Alex tries to make alliances with weaker Zebra city states. That was a common tactic during the warring states period to prevent one state from growing too powerful. Where should he search allies? Trade partners (If Alex falls their trade agreement might fall as well if the new conquerors wish to either break or 'renegotiate' the deals), weaker city states (these might become the next target), the enemies of Alex's enemies (the enemy of my enemy is my friend, use this saying with a grain of salt. The Americans found that out the hard way with the Taliban. Sponsoring them to fight against the Soviets only for the Taliban to turn against them the moment the Soviets were gone).
Economics and trade are powerful weapons in their own regards. Make sure your state is rich enough to raise and maintain a proper army and keep your population happy. If you bind people to you through trade then they will become very hesitant to see you fall, hell you can take over states through economic warfare. It's been done before.
If it is a foreign invader then you can rally the other Zebra 'states' against a common enemy. Much like how nobles (in for example France) during the early medieval period would war amongst themselves until there was a foreign enemy to be united against. That was the purpose of the king in the first Middle Ages. The guy had little authority and was mainly there to unite the realm in the event of a foreign invasion.
The centralization of power in France was a slow process though taking generations to complete and many wars both external ones and internal ones.
I hope this helps you out.
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Just use the find and replace keys/app
THEY CHEATED, THEY SKIPPED YOUR TURN!
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My though exactly, maybe console commands or something.
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Call the Devs for help.
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The support for there game has long expired, they have moved on to new projects.
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Hmmm call in some other hackers to do the job.
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This is not a Displaced fic.
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Crap, knew something was odd about it. Thx for telling me that.
Last sentance was a reference to Civilization wasn't it?
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Any turn based game really,
I wonder who waged war? The nation the assasin was from or the doe's nation... or maybe something "equestrian". *nudge nudge*
Not going to lie, I'd like to see him hook up with the younger gazelle
No one likes the edgy one.
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I second this comment.