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And so the adventures of the monkey king of Zebrica (truly) begin!
But I can't help but wonder,
Is there more cheese for our dear Alex?
......Oh, yeah. And what's up with the minotaurs as well. That too.
...you may want to request a diferent editor...as soon as humanly possible sounds right. Beyond the grammer/word mistakes, I appreciated this chapter, and look forward to the battle.
"Lampenfieber" What does that mean?
Also four baby sitters and pay vacation, he might be weird and put their soldiers into some weird stuff but damn is he a good boss to be around. And a happy army is a loyal army
that bit right at the end
put it through google translate and get ....
lol wut
This chapter was better than the last couple, but... here are some of the errors.
Wielding
A lot
Below me
Two more things:
1. Put a " " after every ellipses
Ex. some…difficulty-->some... difficulty
2. I'm surprised he didn't consider just destroying the bridge
Anyway keep up the good work, I love the story so far.
The Gods have Answered my Prayers! It has been Updated!
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Ah, good old Google translate. What it actually means is:
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Why don't you do it, or hook me up with some good guys?
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Three primary reasons:
1. I have a work/school schedule that occupies much of my free time.
2. Anything I've edited always ends up with my own "additions" to the story, and that usually ticks off the author.
3. I can't really think of an editor off the top of my head, I'd need to re-examine some other stories and try to covince the ones who edited them.
Beyond that, I'm just active enough to give story/character/grammer advice, but just lazy enough that the thought of actual effort makes me cringe.
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But I am lazy too.
I am glad to see you took my advice to heart and covered albeit a bit basicly the logistics of a war campaign. You could also talk about the wagons needed to transport the food, equipment and drinking water, but I am happy that you covered logistics at all. Perhaps you could also talk about how much this campaign is going to cost. War isn't exactly good for the economy.
The Macedonian shields are not meant at all to defend against arrows. Those small shields have no hope of blocking an arrow volley whatsoever. The ones used by the Greeks did in combination with their armour. However those shields required spears instead of the longer pikes to properly wield. The only use the Macedonians got out of their shields was to defend against spears and I guess against Peltasts and their javelins.
However Macedonians were very well armoured by using Linothorax (a sort of armour) combined with helmets, bracers and lower leg armour. Additionally archery wasn't as well developed as it would be in early and late medieval times. The main danger were not archers, but slingers who had the disadvantage of needing quite a bit of room to properly sling around their slinger.
It's not really that important since the Minotaurs supposedly don't have a lot of ranged fighters except perhaps javelin throwers and the choke point naturally makes it more difficult to position a lot of ranged units in such a manner that they can start pounding your troops.
Other people have already told you this, but I have noticed quite a bit of spelling mistakes such as
I believe it should be the very lives of my men.
Could you also give us some more information about the Zebra empire. Are there other states who haven't sworn loyalty to him? Must he pass through hostile territory, how safe is it to go meet the minotaur army. He' smoving his army away from his city, won't somebody tak eadvantage of that? Could he gather some allies along the way? If he says a Minotaur army is on the way maybe he could convince some 'lords' or 'ladies' or whoever rules certain areas to lend him troops to defend their lands.
Keep it up.
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I didn't wanted to go TOO deep into detail because then this chapter would be a lot longer then it needed to be. Also the readers can fill out certain gabs themselves like you mentioned supply wagon. I do that allot in case you haven't noticed, leaving certain things open for the reader to imagine out themselves.
Also you need to consider that the average zebra is allot shorter then you average human, so a same sized shields would actual offer allot more protection towards a Zebra then man. I do have the units design solidified in my head and would love to put it on paper just like any other future units that Alex will have access to in the further. The problem with that though is that my stylus is broken, and until I can receive the new one I ordered I can't really do much, which means that I can't show you all the concept in my head.
Also on the topic of javelin. I like to point our that a javelin is allot more heavier projectile then an arrow. It depends on the strength of the thrower and maybe even the type of tip its using, but when a Javelin gets stuck on a shields its going to be super annoying. They either try to pull it out or ditch the shield all together.
Furthermore money for Alex isn't an issue as you must heave read in a previous chapter. The guy has allot of leg room to work with. Also the different tribes aren't still particularly interesting in joining hims fully at the moment. The curse of power is very much present there as it is here. When some one possesses a position of power and control its usually very difficult for that person to willingly give it away. Even if that person is some returning legend or not. Which is why this battle takes place, its a why for him to prove himself in the eyes of the other chieftains that he truly is fit to rule and to protect his realm from outside invaders.
That, and the Minotaur are this worlds equivalent of Spartans which means they do share a grudge against the Zebra Persian one way or another. So when word came that the Zebra's are going to have a new Monkey King seating on the bronze throne then of course they of course will try to snuff this new problem out before it becomes a real problem.
Politics can be a dangerous game after all.
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I personally enjoy details like that, because it gives a sense of depth in the story. I am not saying you need to plan every little tidbit, but don't feel scared of giving the readers some micromanagement details from time to time.
Javelins were meant to take out shields, but if a soldier lacked the shield I think they would go through his armour just as well. Considering Minotaurs look really strong I think it would be very easy for them to throw them from a decent distance away. The Romans used two versions a light and a heavy version fo the pilla. The light was thrown first as it could cross even greater distance. Problem with a Phalanx is that whilst it is great at holding the line against pilla they pretty much have to sit there and take it. Javelin rains would devastate phalanx formations.
If you base the Minotaurs off of the Spartans then javelins are definitely weapons they would use. However the way you talk about them they honestly sound more like Thracian barbarians. Even then those guys still made use of javelins. The spartans made use of phalanxes and worked in synch. The Thracians were more a celtic culture valuing the individual warrior instead of the the disciplined formation soldier employed by the Romans and Ancient Greeks. Both saw the advantages of the javelin.
As for money I have nothing against the guy rulling a wealthy city state, but I would request that you give us a chapter about economics so we understand where his money is coming from. What is that city's main import/export, does it use river ways if so which, trade tariffs, who are their trading partners, who are their concurrents, international and national trade, what sort of currency is in use in the case of gold or silver how pure are the coins? Are they valuable in international trade or are they heavily debased.
What is the name of the city Alex rules, how much population does it have, how much military personel, guard personel,...
You don't have to put it all in one chapter, but a bit more information would be nice. That way we know what Alex has to work with.
As for military be careful to not make the numbers too big. Alex seems to rule only one wealthy big city, so I think the max would be around 20k or so. I am basing this off of Athens during their war with Sparta. Although I think he would have to do with less since it takes a while to get logistics on the road.
Another thing Alex hasn't been rulling for a long time how did the minotaurs gather such an army so fast? Maybe they alrady planned an invasion before his coming?
Your art is nice btw.
He should give them tank designs
*KV-2 horde intensifies
Just let the monkey king handle the Minotaurs, his trolling and randomness will have them running for the hills.
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I got through Google Translate: Fever LAMP FEVER. I'M WARNING LAMP FANS
Look, I understand that English isn't your primary language but you seriously need to find someone who's fluent in both German and English to help you write this. I normally give authors some leeway with grammar, but the English in this story is butchered so badly that it detracts from the actual story telling.
Examples:
What you used there is "mitts" as in oven mitts. Like what you wear when you want to take a pie out of the oven. What you needed to put there is midst.
It should read as: "not very practical for daily life, but great for when things go south".
It's Wielding, not "Wilding". There's no such verb as "Wilding".
You're using a possessive apostrophe when you're supposed to be using a plural "s" instead for Minotaurs.
I could keep going, but I think you understand my point. Sorry dude, but the horrible grammar is so distracting that I can't even focus on whatever is going on in the story. Unfortunately, I'm out. Good luck with the rest of it.
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Your explanation between Spartans and Thracian appeals to me, maybe I will have to change the Minotaur's affinity towards the Thracian's sharing allot of Greek culture but fighting more like barbarians. I think the Thracian might have a grudge against the Persians as well, given that a large part of there lands was under control of Persian rule at its very extend to the west.
The name of this city is listen within the description of the story...starts with A. Also a mentioning economics would come regardless at some point. Since Alex City is located in the middle of the desert it would be very easy to assume that the two main rivers flanking the city from east to west are going to be contributing a large portion of the cities income. Not just in food but trade as well, just how rivers where used in ancient times. In fact many city actually reside on rivers for that very reason. A source of water, food and possible trade across it.
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I just read the story and remember 3 or 4 instances of incorrect grammar like you pointed out. The phonetics were close enough that I could still understand what he meant and this is fanfiction, so there's no need to be quite so critical. Don't be such a literary snob and publicly proclaim this story to be beneath you.
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My guess is that he wouldn't have a clue where to start with a tank.
Gunpowder and primitive guns on the other hand...
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I will join into this discussion.
Yea, ancient ranged weapons were rather undeveloped, particulary personal ones. There were practically only slings, short bows and javelins. Because of that, despite existence of nations exeling in this type of fighting like Cretenians and Rhodesians, range forces had 3rd grade importance during battles. Even commonly used javelins didn't have a main role of killing, but rather to force enemy warriors to drop shield, pilum was specialized in this matter.
About phalanx, you forget about one very important matter. Macedonians was able to develop their falangas with sarissas (pikes) and smaller shields, because they had something that the Greeks did not have. CAVALRY. Macedionians were living on plains, rather than main Greece hills, so they had big, well-trained cavalry forces. Macedionian phalanx was great on front fight and very numerous (conscripts instead of free citizens), but it was slow, difficult to maneuver on battlefield, very susceptible to flanking, useless on hard terrains like forests. It was great on blocking and defending, far worse during attack (only few cases of successful attacks against enemies don't using falangas too or not being barbarians). That was role of cavalry, to perform winning strike during battle. Look at battles of Alexander The Great. He won most his battles by cavalry maneuver, like flanking or breakthrough.
Phalanx without support of cavalry was almost helpless, doomed to get flanked, if enemy commander had common sense. Romans were able to defeat 2-3 times more numerous hellenistic armies, using weakness of falangas. Phalanx was just first massive, easily createable (not like persian Immortals) professional infantry unit. That was the source of Macedonians successes, not some OPness of phalanx.
Edit: slight corrections of terminology.
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Why Alex don't want to invest in some types of medieval weapons, like halabards, crossbows... or firearms? Stupid matchlock would render powerful minotaur warrior into very big target. Heck, he could even use Roman legions as model.
Yes, i know, you like Persians and Hellens and this is story about building of new state in this climats, but still.
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Let's see. We need technologies of gas engine, advanced firearms, welding, electricy, periscops, rangefinders, transmissions, mass production of steel...
And industry, tones of fabrics.
Also KV-2 was too unreliable. T-34 is far better. These unending waves of terror...
But tanks are always better than anything, because they are so cool. So good idea.
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I am aware of that. Stop tell me the obvious
Also if I was going to give these guys the knowledge of halberd, gunpowder, flintlocks and cannons then this fic would be very short and boring as Alex and his forced would just roflstomp everything with no build up or a sense of satisfaction.
But don't worry, all of that shall come in duo time.
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Does Alex even have the chemical formula for gunpowder on his tablet or at least memorized? If not then at best he might be able to jimmy rig some kind of magical equivalent, but then he would just be putting the idea out there for other, more magical, kingdoms to take advantage of, and that would be bad.
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Considering magic I think gunpowder wouldn't necesarrily be OP, but nonetheless it would be impractical to pursue regardless. The formula for gunpowder is relatively easy to remember, but to make it practical in gunpowder weapons that's another problem.
First off it would be a pain in the butt to set up a mass production process for potassium nitrate and depending on how easy sulphur would be to get that would be a problem as well.
Secondly unless Alex knows how to create primers then he will be stuck with at best muzzleloader flintlock firing mechanism. That's not even talking about figuring out grain sizes for the black powder.
It also took centuries to properly develop metallurgy to an extent that guns didn't explode regularly. Not to mention the various means to improve accuracy. The social aspects of developing strategies to employ firearms would also be a pain in the butt as well as people not wanting to use them. New technologies rarely get a warm welcome.
My advice is to focus primary on economic development. Introduce seeding drills, four crop rotation system to improve harvests and selective breeding for cattle. Now the tricky part begins. You will see your harvest tripled at least, which means you need to get rid of the surplus to prevent inflation. Nw you can start making trade deals both to court the other Zebra kingdoms and internationally. You will be able to undercut their prices, which means more money for you.
It also means that if their situation grows severe enough you can literally force them to either join you or fall. Market dumping is a form of economic warfare.
Your city is prosperous good then you can start up the next part of your plan. Inventions like the seed drill, mechanical reaper and thresher will mean less people will need to do agriculture, which means mass unemployment. Pump gold in your economy through building projects. Build silos to hold the excess of grains and other crops, start building a trade fleet, improve your harbours and throw some money everywhere to attract people to your lands. Mostly craftsmen, scientists, architectures, doctors,... to improve your industrial capabilities. These will allow you to imrpove your military equipment as well.
Military technologies you could introduce would be the Heliograph and flag semaphore for ranged communication. round towers instead of square towers, Machicolations for improved walls. All those things would be within his capabilities.
I thought of attacking the minotaurs with arrows, and when they reach the bridge, cut it down. They suffer losses, and have to go the other way around onto another chokepoint.
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Bastion type of fortresses (these 17th century star-like), underground sewers, depending on author fanon of medicine level in this Equus some ideas like antibiotics (you need to find correct fungus for peniciline), vaccinations or pasterisation and universal education are in range too.
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Bastion fortifications are usefull, but would require quite a while to build, not to mention it's revolutionary so nobody quite knows how to build it yet. Unless somebody else already invented it, but doubtful since that would cause others to follow suite. I focused mostly on stuff that is quite easy and quick to implement.
Underground sewers would be a hassle to build if they don't already exist. Tunneling was mostly done by using the cut and cover method, which obviously can't be done in a city At least not unless you want a small uprising on your hands.
As for antibiotics. Equestria is messed up on that level. You get the impression they have modern hospitals, but yeah...that depends on the author.
Pasterisation is a possibility, it could be easily done. I forgot to mention the printing press which he could use for branding. Most people couldn't read, but pictures and emblems did the job. Helpfull for commerce and for copying knowledge. If you get people to stick by your brand then other people their wares whilst maybe superior in quality will still not be picked over yours.
He should also stimulate a rebuilding project to replace wooden buildings with stone ones to prevent fires, perhaps some more greenery in the streets, improvement of garbage collection and more hospitals to prevent disease spreading.
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Printing press is rather 100% existing on Equus, proofed by existense of newspapers in show.
And modern regard about healthcare and general cleaness is most useful to introduce. But with "stonification" of cities you can have troubles. Good stone isn't so easy to find and extract. Better idea on desert land with great river are clay bricks, or, if you know recipe and have indegridients, concrete.
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Right, clay bricks would be the better road to go. When we're talking about these mass projects the cheapest road that can get the job done is the best. Next up would be the industrialisation. We know the ponies have trains, however do we know what their engine uses as fuel? it could be that they don't have steam engines and use some kind of magical engines. This could explain why they aren't more widespread.
I doubt Alex could build a steam engine. He could give enough hints for some of the brighter minds to start constructing one, but that still took a few decades to perfect in the real world. However the ancient chinese had a sort of semi-industrial society by using waterpower and since he has two large rivers at his disposal. Stuff like whaterwheel powered trip hammers, watermills (for grain, textiles, lumber, paper and metal) and perhaps even powering blast furnaces for steel production(if he knows how those work).
Perhaps he needs to build some canals, some aquaducts and some pipelines to maximise the use of hydro power as well.
However all those things would lead to mass unemployment issues. Not necesarry bad for the state since he could use those jobless people to start new settlements or reoccupy abandoned ones. We don't know enough about the ancient zebra empire for more specific stuff, but ports are going to be needed. Drydocks and getting some ship building experts are the first things to come to mind.
Taxes could be another thing. Place heavy taxes on the import of finished products and low or no taxes on base resources. Only allow the export of finished products and not of base resources. Of course it depends on what type of trade agreements are already in place. Mercentalism is a good system to earn a lot of money until everybody else starts using it as well of course.
I doubt it would be realistic for him to quickly become the ruler of all of the zebras, but saving them from the Minotaurs and by being the most powerful faction I think creating a sort of 'confederation' or 'bond' with him at the head would be plausible. Further military interventions (as with Equestria as is foreshadowed in the description) could give him more and more power slowly, but surely.
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You sir should replace Susara is Alex advisor, I am sure he will allow you into his cheese stash for your amazing work.
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Thank you. I started this to give you some ideas and to motivate others to give you some ideas of their own. I enjoy these 'empire building' type of stories, so I try to keep the few writers who write them motivated and to assist them to make them as entertaining as possible.
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Mercantilism is useful if you possess goods , that cannot be obtained other way. Otherwise it may end on economic crush, when somebody develop his own ways of producting of your goods. Also it's agressive strategy easily antagonizing other countries, which may answer in similar ways to you. France after death of Richelieu and Louis XIV (Sun King) was victim of this.
Industrualization requires at beginning masses of unemployed peoples, deposits of coal and iron, group of wealthy investors and big market to start. Technology isn't everything in this case, i'm afraid.
His land contain, from descriptions, great river and deserts like Egypt. We can forget about transport net of canals and closest mountains allowing for aqueducts may be to far. More sense have state project of irigating, to increase food production, what allow for population growth.
Building new main portcity as window to world is good idea, but it's not always possible.
I still hold claim on increasing education expenses. Military academy, school for officials and university always pays off.
Question, do you like Civilization serie?
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You don't necesarrily need to produce goods others can't produce. You just need to make sure that the consumers buy yours. A good way to do this is by producing cheaper products than your concurrents. The USA is capable of producing it's own automobiles from scratch, but not a single major car company does that. They may put the cars together, but the engine for example will be produced in Taiwan or China. Mostly because wages in those countries are lower, so it's cheaper to let it be done by Chinese than Americans.
However if Alex has a semi-industrial society and the others only have artisanally created goods then he could make his goods cheaper. Of course since we're talking internationally other countries could take steps to halt his mercentalism in some ways.
The trouble of France had more causes than just antagonizing other countries. Louis XIV was arguably the problem of France. His ways of limiting the power of nobility costed immense amounts of money by wasting it on grand events to keep the nobility at Versailles. His many wars were the deathblow. The real hero is France was it's minister of economics Colbert who managed to develop a system that managed to keep up with the expenses for a while.
As for the requirements of industrialisation. I think most of them are or could be present. Iron is probably alright, but coal might be a problem. Then again worst case he could import iron and coal, we know he has the coin, a market could be created or manipulated and unemployment will come once Alex implements our suggestions.
I think it would be better to compare the city to Babylon rather than some place in Egypt since the author is basing it off of the Persian empire. This could be important for various reasons. Mesopotamia was more often victim of nomads, had a more favorable position along trade routes like the Silk route and the two rivers (Tigris and Euphrates) acted dfferently from the Nile in the sense that they flooded on the wrong time for the harvest season.
As for education I don't disagree with you there. In fact since he seems to have a lot of money at hand, so he should probably invest in education as soon as possible. Attract some foreign expertise and advisors as well mostly for areas where the Zebras aren't as strong for example ship building or some sorcerers for protections against magics, metallurgy,....
I don't play the civilization series. Looks like an interesting serie though.
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I doubt that world of author possess global market, it lack efficient worldwide information net, massive transportation abilities (like transport ships) and great corporations. So it's impossible to outsource branches of industry somewhere, where it is cheaper. Generally during XIX century, for country to industrualize, it needed to had all mines and initial markets in this country. That's why all colonial powers was looking for new lands. For new markets and resources. And they had probably bigger ships that Zebras have.
Also the beginning of industrualisation was production of cloth. On Equus this branch is FAR less important, that for us, so it cut on of starters of process. I fear too, that Zebrica may be too far from other highly civilized nations, like Equestria, so trade between may be risky and costly. Like Silk Road, where there were transported only light things like silk, spices or art, nothing mass-producted.
Even if Alex land is rather like Mesopotamia, than Egypt, then still he may have trouble with habitable lands for citizens, as constructing and maintaining new by irigation is hard and continous work. I bet there is more cities near great rivers, but they are probably strongly independent and proud from this fact (like in ancient Mesopotamia), so cooperation and centralising may be hard.
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I wasn't suggesting to outsource. In fact Alex should keep as many jobs reserved for his own subjects, so he can keep the money circulating in his economy rather than seeing his money dissapear overseas. Alex could make his goods cheaper by:
-Using machinery to cut back in the amount of employees he needs to hire. (thus less wages)
-Producing goods faster than artisans elsewhere could through the use of machinery.
-Producing larger bulks of products than artisans of other countries could through the use of machinery.
If he can produce goods cheaper, faster and in larger bulk then he could start a trade war similar to what Standard Oil did under John Davidson Rockefeller. Is it nasty? Yes, but if he could get so ingrained in the economy of certain countries that he could influence their decisions then that would be a huge boon for him.
Speaking about Standard Oil. Oil is another product he could capitalise on. If Zebrica is also an oil rich region then he could really see the cash starting to flow. Oil was already used for oil lamps for a long time and you don't need fancy equipment to get oil from oil seeps.
Ships will be another problem. Ships with large cargo holds also needed lots of rowers and those rowers need to get paid and fed. This made it not a very attractive venture for long distance trips. That only got solved partially through the invention of Clippers. Those ships seriously shortened travel times. However they could only carry a small amount of cargo so they were used for stuff like spices that even in small quantities earned a lot of money.
Chinese treasure ships build by Zheng He were also pretty good.
Habitable land will be the big limiting factor in this story I fear. Stuff like the Faiyum oasis or Lake Moeris were projects that took quite a while to complete. Of course maybe some nearly finished canal lies somewhere forgotten or the geography allows some easy fix for our problem. Gunpowder as explosive would be usefull for excavation purposes. This could seriously speed up demolition and excavation processes in construction projects.
The land is as you said is probably divided between various independent and powerful city states as was the case with ancient Mesopotamia. A combination of economic warfare, military invasions, subterfuge and diplomacy will have to be used to get the place centralized under one ruler again. Similar to the reunification of Italy or the Qin's wars of unifaction in ancient China.
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About industrualization, there may be one problem. Problem called Guilds. If they exist and they have similar privileges as in Middle Ages, they will obstruct any attempts of replecing them. And if they exist, they are probably very influential and rich, so antagonizing them at beginning will be stupid act.
Galleys are useless as even medium distance trade ship, because of wasting storage for additional food and water for rowers and susceptibility to bad weather. Only ships with only sails are useful in this.
And uniting processes of states/tribes with long traditions are in 90% of cases very bloody businesses, with multitiude of wars and kills.
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Guilds will be a problem if they exist and have similar privileges as they had in real life. Alex has two options I believe to deal with them:
A). Use his absolute power to forcefully dissolve them and replace them with perhaps a personal company.
B). Make deals with the guilds and slowly absorb them. A bit of divide and conquer. Those who willingly go along with his plans sorta flourish. Eventually the guild will be disbanded, but the members of for example the Dye work guild could become part of the next Dye work company for example and those who resist could be forced into bankruptcy through a trade war.
Alex is in the good graces of the religious leaders and is seen as a messiah in the eyes of the common folk, so he's got some popular backing against the guilds if need be.
Unless Alex knows a lot about shipbuilding or at least enough to give his shipbuilders an idea of how to build a sail only vessel then long distance or even medium distance naval trade is probably out or very limited. Good news though is that if Alex has oil he could make some crude napalm. Napalm is a game changer in naval warfare fought with wooden ships. Of course warfare is a bit of a hassle as we don't quite know how magic can influence it.
Greek fire was amazing against wooden ships in real life, but if a unicorn can cast a spell with similar effect from miles away then it becomes kinda worthless.
The story has a gore tag and maybe when it comes to the unification part it might need it as well. I prefer a story where unification is shown realistically rather than a story where everybody openly receives the supposed messiah for ease of writing.
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I wonder what author is thinking about us, seriously disputing over his self-insert fanfiction in land of colorful, magical ponies...
About this Civilization serie, I strongly recommend Civilization V with both main DLCs. Very nice game. And have a lot of mods, including pony ones.
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The author is probably thinking something along the lines of. "What a couple of goofballs , debating so seriously about a world of magical ponies. Oh well free ideas for me. "
At least that's what I hope. I gave my original suggestions as a way to help him improve his story, give him some ideas and motivate others to do the same and of course to learn something more myself.
I will check the Civilization series out. They look like interesting games.
Thank you for the discussion. It was very pleasant to discuss this kind of stuff with somebody. I enjoy world/empire building stories, but it's unfortunately a rather tight niche in fanfiction of all kind.
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I never knew that you where physic as well >_>
Also this fic isn't really a self insert Alexander is just a small extension of my overall character, being a symbol of my more mad and crazier side rather then the whole picture.
Same with Nava, being a representation of my more down to earth character.
None of my characters are full blown self inserts, you might even make the argument that they are completely different characters all together, thanks to certain character traits they have that I in reality don't have.
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Thank you too for dispute. I also like such theoretic discusions.
Probably we will meet again in next chapter .
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Pleasure to help.
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Stranger danger.
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A healthy dose of madness.
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Magic, that's all the explanation you need.
Can't plagiarize now can you
Wow, really love the build up to the war; even if it probably won't carry a lot of risk and uncertain victory. It'll still be fun to watch Alex's plan come to life. (Pls don't take a month to update.) (unless it's going to be epic, then feel free to take as long as you want)
Good chapter!
I enjoyed reading it!
Will we hear about this poor messenger and his 'transport' again? Or are they just one-time background
ponieszebras?And I'm surprised they didn't consider destroying the bridge, or at least prepare the bridge for immediate destruction in case his tactic fails.
Why can I hear a thicc accent?
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No time, it would have taken a while for them to arrive and time was already short. They needed to move out quickly if they wanted to intercept the army at the bridge.