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i feel like your editor was somewhat slacking in this chapter, but at most i only spotted 10 wrong words
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My mistake, I'm still fairly new to this editing thing.
You REALLY should see this thing in its unedited state. I don't know if it's because he's German, or that he just doesn't care and just leaves it to his editors. XP
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no problem, at least he cares to edit his stories in the first case, there a some that want their story to stay the way it is, unedited simply because it was back in a time where their writing was bad, and then times that they finish the story, and don't want to go back and edit it simply on the principle that it is already finished, like no one is ever going to read it again and want an edited version, anyway I'm just rambling now, you did a good job nontheles
1. Discipline leads to Victory
2. It is Victory in War that brings Immortality
3. Immortality is the Gift of Chaos
4. In exchange, Chaos demands Blood
5. Thus, Blood must be ever spilt
6. Therefore, Eternal Life demands Eternal War
7. Eternal War demands Eternal Discipline
8. Chaos will always have Blood: Yours or Theirs
-Eight Principles of War- Breviary of the Alpha Legion
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Well my principal is simply that I am lazy. Its a serious condition we all suffer one way or another.
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i like your stories, they greatly amuse me and you still add in a strategic aspect, that'd the main reason i even tried to read this, because you added politics and managing an army, if it was just the guy being crazy on an everyday basis i would have dropped with like fresh cat shit, but becuase you added the other stuf i have grown a fondness for this guy, that's why i like that new story you made, even if it is just a slice of life with him as the mc it will still entertain me now
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Well this is an empire building type of story. Of course I will be forced to add a bit more "detail" into everything that happens.
(In a good way, of course!)
In that case I hope you won your last rounds of 4x games.
Because in this game you are all in.
They had a good teacher: You.
Good chapter!
I'm curious how the battle in the next chapter will turn out.
(It will be in the next one, right?)
Found a small error:
That dot doesn't belong there.
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Actually, they are 3 now, not just 2.
no get out
you can't tell me what to do. You aren't my real dad
Yeah I understand german Du bist ein Kühlschrank
Yeah I get german, you don't need to test me anymore
okay I swear to god Alex is just a reincarnation of Discord
I see you and I know you
*Ahem* discord
well you couldn't make it more obvious that Alex is a mirror of you
I would say something "weird" or out of the blue here but I've only gained 3 hours of sleep and 5 mosquito bites the past night (one is on my face... like how the fuck did it get there) so I'm going to pass out. See ya
Looking back, I love how these are all "edited". Even though the people that were in charge of "editing" forgot how to read. Only mild disrespect intended. Proofreading is a thing for a reason.
Blows my mind, two in the first paragraph.
*thumbs up* Looks fine to me.