Sunset Shimmer was going to visit Equestria for a while during summer break. She was ready to get away from the craziness that is high school, and ready to use some real magic for a change, as opposed to her empathetic magic.
Problem is, her friends catch wind of her plan, and beg to go with her.
Now she has to hope that Princess Twilight isn't going to freak out when Sunset tells her.
This is going to be fun!
I've seen quite a few stories of Sunset Shimmer going back to Equestria, but I haven't seen one with her taking her human friends with her. It seems like a good idea, but who knows.
Not that I'm trying to downplay the other stories, just I see a comedy gold mine here. Seriously, this is going to be awesome. If I can write it.
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You're right, this concept isn't very used, if anything, the closest I've seen have been sci-twi and even just Luna so I'm curious to see where you will take this.
7708182 Thanks! I just hope I don't royally F this one up.
I'm just as surprised as you are there isn't anything like this on FimFiction.
This is nice. Pretty funny and detailed. Quick question though: why couldn't Spike go? Given his intelligence there's no reason he couldn't.
7708714 Because I didn't want him to go, that's why.
And I don't think Dog Spike could handle being able to breathe fire. Plus, why would he go? He's probably looking forward to being able to sleep in.
Finally, I can't really think about how to write Spike. It's easier for me to leave him back then to force him into the story.
7708824 Ok that makes sense. It's just when I first read this part:
I thought he was complaining about not going. Now I realize he had complaints about going. Thanks for clarifying.
7708862 You're welcome. This is my second story, and my first one has been out-liked by this one within 12 hours. Still feel like a rookie.
7708983 Don't worry. This is pretty good and I know you're only going to get better.
7710035 Thanks for the confidence.
It's nice to know that people want to see more.
this is a really good story hope you do more stories like this in the future
7713603 How about I focus on this one first. Maybe after the next EqG movie, if it gives me any ideas.
7713665 Ok fine with me
This bit doesn't feel right. A tad to 4th wall breaky in my opinion. Otherwise, still fairly interesting read overall.
7741728 I'm just trying to be funny. There is a comedy tag.
I'd ship them.
I want to see a food fight between the two pinkies. And just how rediculous it would be
7741871 Exactly
7741958 Sounds good! Will do
Huh..... Never for one second did I ever consider a Starset ship.
Good on ya, mate.
7742877 Is it really that uncommon? Huh.
7743291 Dunno, this is just the first that I saw actively attempting to ship them.
Like FedEx. ((c) DaWillstanator, donut steal.)
7743307 Well, seems like a terrible waste. This is really my personal favorite ship.
7743322 All the power to ya then. Can't wait for more~!
7743401 Thanks for the confidence.
7743507 No problem. I'm gonna be writing a 4-piece story myself soon.
7743687 Sounds good! Can't wait to see it.
To be honest, this chapter feels like it was written by a different person than the previous two, after reading all three in short sequence. The sudden frequency in swearing from zero to every third phrase, the talking-the-reader, the really forced shipping (and this coming from a lover of crackshipping, it's about execution, not existence), it also just feels a lot less polished and more rushed, possibly related or unrelated to those things, I don't know for certain. The other two were written story chapters, this one feels like you used a talk-to-text app and just kind of rambled. Maybe a good thing for some, but not in my taste alas.
I read the 2nd and 3rd chapters because the 1st and 2nd chapters were promising, but had it led in the style of this third one, I doubt I would have read a second chapter. It's not awful enough to leave a thumbs-down, but I feel as if it has significantly changed in target audience.
7744929 Thanks for the criticism. As far as the swearing goes, well, almost anything, if prolonged, will result in swearing. This is only my second story, so I guess it's inexperience that makes it seem different.
Also, thanks for not being a b--ch about it. The world needs more people like you.
After reading the first chapter I was in awe of how well written this was thus I shall be keeping a eye on this one. And as such I shall be placing it into my favorites and well written book shelf. I look forward to reading the other chapters.
7757619 YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
Yay! My idea made it in!
Can't wait for finish hope soon
7860219 If you have any ideas as far as what they could do, I'm all ears. I have no idea where to go from here.
7875072 To be completely honest, I haven't worked on this fic in a while. Probably should, though. People are still paying attention to it.
7875086 And Fancy White Pony is my least favorite, and I can't write her without making her like they did in EQG:LoE
7875218 Yes.
A wild Fluttershy has appeared
7940556 Go References!
really like it so far, looking forward to read the rest
Best solution ever
7951209 Twilight is best scapegoat.
Look here, Sky. Gordon can be a very important character in Equestria. Please brings him in.
I'm pretty sure if they accidentally bring the pony version of pinkie it wouldn't make a deference. Great so far I love it
Please continue
nice update!
You do know that it is a fact that Starlight is just as powerful as Twilight?
The alicorn excuse is dead now, because the Pony of Shadows said Twilight is ALMOST as powerful as Starswirl, a unicorn.
Element of magic has more to do with friendship and is only at its full potential with her friends. It also doesn't make her the best at magic. There are ponies more loyal than Dash and ponies more generous than Rarity.
Starswirl himself prooves that a unicorn can be more powerful than an alicorn.
Starlight is officially as powerful as Twilight. Any excuses that she can't be are all dead.
Starswirl himself prooves that Starlight can match and even surpass Twilight in magic. The alicorn excuse is officially dead.
In the actual series, Twilight was trying her hardest to stop Starlight. She wasn't holding back.
No matter what excuses people try to use, the series pretty much does say Starlight is as powerful as Twilight. Any reason people use to say she isn't are fan invented and have no bearing on the series.
Love it and the comparison views. I agree with Spike on doomsday possibilities.
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If I remember canon correctly, Twilight had more magical knowledge, and thus more options for how to use the power that she had. But yes, I agree, the show clearly portrays Starlight as having alicorn-level power.
Dang, I'm really interested in this little spat now.
Looking forward to more!