Two mares, the beloved daughter of a witch, who was raised and bred to do evil deeds and selfish acts, while the other, the mistreated stepdaughter of the dark lady, treats all who she beholds with kindness and care. When the king of their land desires for the pure hearted mare to be his wife, as she looks in every aspect like his later spouse, he sends her brother for her. But the happy ending doesn't come as easily as in most tales of love and truth...
I found this fairytale called "The White Bride and The Dark One" (Changed 'Black One' to 'Dark One' so no one would be offended.) I do hope you enjoy this because it's going to be much longer then the others I've made.
And the cover was made by my very talented and fantastic friend, Jade Crossroads, who is my best friend and most importantly, the most creative and wonderful artist on this sight in my perspective!
Holy Luna this story got liked fast! I didn't expect it to already have people liking and favourating it after like five minutes of it being out!
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Thank you for liking it so far
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Wonderful to hear that you like to give any new story a chance! Theirs so few people I know who do that so thank you!
Is this a Fluttercord story?
Just asking!
The story caught my attention! I like the setup of Fluttershy coming from a kind and loving family. You captured the dialogue between Fluttershy and her mother very well. I felt the sadness coming from them.
I felt that there could be a little more talk on Mr. Shy's remarriage and his death. What made Mr. Shy marry Chrysalis, of all the mares? How could he not see how wicked she was?
Overall, I am curious to see what happens to Fluttershy and Zephyr Breeze. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Please continue.
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Yes this is a Fluttercord story. I thought that Fluttershy was all too perfect for the part of the white bride and discord was the only one I could ever think of to be the king so yeah!
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I'm glad you like the story so far and yes I think I'll add in a few things about why he married Chrysalis when I get the chance
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I will gladly continue this (most definantly tomorrow if not sooner!)
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I'm glad to hear it! :)
Are you going to continue?🤨🧐
More?