The Do-Over Party

After a party goes wrong in a small farm town, Pinkie Pie arrives and finds Cheese Sandwich. What kind of party will the two of them plan together… and what lasting effects will it have?

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Phantom Dragon

Phantom Dragon #1 · Mar 18th, 2016 · 1 · ·

That was really good I liked it. If this was an episode I would have liked it.

Summer Dancer

Summer Dancer #2 · Mar 18th, 2016 · 1 · ·

YAAAAASSSSS, DAT ENDING THO

Sketcha-Holic

Sketcha-Holic #3 · Mar 18th, 2016 · 2 · ·

It's been such a long time since I've found a charming and well-written interpretation of Cheese Sandwich. I always love fics that present Cheese as his own character instead of just "Weird Al Pony" or "Male Pinkie Lite." I've always hated it when he was presented as an obnoxious maniac like Pinkie is often presented as (speaking of which, you wrote a top notch Pinkie).

The conversations between him and Pinkie, as well as him and Amber, were so full of substance that I couldn't help but squee. And I like how Cheese learned a different way to throw parties. And I like the little tease at the end. Yes-a-rooney, you get an upvote from me.

Also, is it just me, or is Amber some sort of high-functioning autistic?

Fruity Treeze

Fruity Treeze #4 · Mar 18th, 2016 · · ·

Aww, so cute!
Someone else finally gets that Pinkie and Cheese are two different characters, not just cheap clones. This is was a cute story that showed that even Pinkie and Cheese have differences which help them learn from each other. Now, if you'll excuse me, I'm just going to go to that corner over there to squee some more.

TheGuineaPig45

TheGuineaPig45 #5 · Mar 18th, 2016 · 2 · ·

I NEED to read this when I get the chance.

Xiutik

Xiutik #6 · Mar 19th, 2016 · · ·

Now THAT'S a good interpretation of Cheese. Sometimes I feel confussed, I never got to understand why, but Pinkie's parties were better that Cheese's, and finally, my search has finished: Pinkie asks herself who she is throwing a party for, and Cheese only asks to himself how to impress them.
Two different questions, in result, two different types of parties.
Amazing job, i love cheesepie, DAT ENGING THO!

PD: Pinkie, I know you love him, don't fight it anymore.

_Undefined_

_Undefined_ #7 · Mar 20th, 2016 · · ·

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Also, is it just me, or is Amber some sort of high-functioning autistic?

I hadn't intended that when I wrote the character, but I see how she can be read that way. In my mind, she was just particularly introverted because her studies have prevented her from interacting much with anyone other than her parents. (It also doesn't help that her first two conversations were with extremely extroverted characters.) Now that she has a couple of friends that are more similar to her, she'll come out of her shell more.

(speaking of which, you wrote a top notch Pinkie)

Thanks. Given her exuberant personality, I was very conscious of walking the line between "zany Pinkie who gets to be the comic relief" and "Pinkie who acts somewhat normally so she can advance the plot."

(realizes that he used the word "personality" in a story about ponies; decides it's okay)

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