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Maltrazz


Maltrazz the Plotsmith. Writer, reader, gamer, and connoisseur of Villains. "A Hero, pony or otherwise, is nothing without an excellent Villain."

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...have a tendency to go awry in the most unexpected of ways.

When the Crystal Heart's power destroyed King Sombra, all of the Empire rejoiced. Little did they know, they had played right into the ancient tyrant's hooves.

Having over a millennium to plan, Sombra knew that if a pony managed to get past his traps before he could reconquer the Empire, their was little chance of him surviving. So, he let himself be 'killed', in order to get closer to his true goal undetected; the Umbrum trapped beneath the Empire.

Hiding as just his horn, Sombra laid low in the very heart of the Crystal Palace, biding his time, until the entrance to the underground section was opened by the new Crystal Princess and another princess with a purple coat and familiar magic. Recognizing that magic as that of the pony that foiled his most recent efforts, and knowing of only one princess-to-be with a coat that color, Sombra swears to make Radiant Hope pay for moving against him once again.

Using his magic to reach the deepest depths beneath the Empire, Sombra reached the sealed Umbrum undetected, and reformed his body. Having devised a way to free them during his own imprisonment, Sombra began so, fulfilling his goal even without controlling the Empire. Bursting free in a wave of shadow that left no doubt of their return, Sombra gives Cadence a message for Celestia before following his own subjects into the night:

“Give this message to the Two Sisters. Deliver unto me the princess that yet again hindered my efforts to free my people to me within a week, that I might exact my revenge against that traitorous Radiant Hope, or I shall show all of Equestria why the Umbrum were so feared!”

However, when a week passed, and Sombra found out that the princess in question was not Hope, but rather a new princess named Twilight Sparkle, he finds his plans for revenge derailed. Bound by his word, when she offers to go with him to prevent a war, he finds himself with a 'prisoner' against whom he holds little ire.

And as time passes, Sombra begins to see that he and his 'guest' have more in common than he initially thought.


AU as of Chapter 34 of the 'Friendship is Magic' comics.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 152 )

Let me guess.
Sombra's rhyme was based from that villain song, "In the Dark of the Night" from "Anastasia." Yeah, I recognized the moment he started saying it.
In fact, he matches it so well, even someone made an animatic of the song with him in it.
I'm not kidding! See it for yourself!

6489841 Yeah, I've seen a couple different videos for it, so I wanted to see how well I could adapt it to use in a story. Given the situation, I felt it was appropriate enough not to feel too forced. I'm actually listening to this one right now:

https://youtu.be/Hcrb0C_25EM

Ummm is radiant hope that one mare from that one animatic and when sombra turned evil and shit? just a hunch c;

6526270 No, that is a random background pony that has absolutely nothing to do with Sombra beyond having been enslaved by him along with the other Crystal Ponies.

Radiant Hope first appeared in Sombra's backstory in issue #1 of the 'FIENDship is Magic' comics, and later in the main 'Friendship is Magic' comics. Hope was Sombra's only friend growing up, and saved his life, but she abandoned him when he discovered his Umbrum heritage and Dark Magic, and overthrew Princess Amore.

Needless to say, that animation was made by someone who never read the comics. >_>

Here's an image of her.
http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/List_of_comic_ponies#Radiant_Hope

6526284 OOOOOHHHH!!!! Ohhhh lol thanks ^^;

6526298 No problem! I am happy to explain explain anything that my readers don't understand! ^_^

6526302 Do you mind if we have a random conversation? cause I am very bored XD

6526307 I'd rather not fill up a story's comment section with such, but feel free to comment on my profile, and we can have a discussion there.

Comment posted by Magical Shield deleted Oct 25th, 2015

Loved the story! It was great! :pinkiehappy:


... Do you think one day the show will get Sombra to appear again....? :rainbowderp:

6563155 Well, he came back in the comics, so it's always possible. And since three seasons equal about a year, the premier of Season 6 would be about the time for the next Chrystal Faire, so if he were to make a return, I imagine it would probably be then.

For the part of in the dark of the night i cant help that it could fit Grogar more as he has been dubed the Necromancer by the fans

6581806 I keep hearing the name 'Grogar', but I'm not familiar with the character. Was he from a previous Gen?

6582120 Indeed. He has been considered the second biggest evil in Gen 1 just behind the original Tirek. He is a demonic looking Goat.

6582464 Hmm, seems like I should look into him.

Love your story update soon

good story is it going to continue

6697655 Hopefully, but the Season 5 finale has all sorts of new ideas bouncing around in my head, so we'll see.

6714483 Cool, the last two eps of season 5 where great.

Can't wait for more :heart::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile::derpytongue2:

6715086 Thanks, just don't be surprised if you see me post a time travel or alternate dimension piece before this continues.

I hope you update this story soon it's great.

6730672 Thanks! I've got a lot of ideas bouncing around in my head right now, but I'll make sure to finish the next chapter up as soon as I can focus on it for long enough.

I really like this story! Are you planning on updating it anytime soon?

6884720 Thanks, and the next chapter is about halfway done, but I'm working on several stories at once at the moment, so I'm not sure how long it will take to finish.

I like the story, I felt that you might've forced "In the Dark of the Night" from that video into the story when it might not have been necessary. So far, what I'm reading feels like "Bride of Discord" to me. But I do like the mention of the fake pony legs when Sombra and Baleiro were looking for armor. I hope you come back from your hiatus soon and continue the story.

6912302 I admit that I have trouble meshing songs into stories as smoothly as I'd like, but I still feel that it came out well enough.

Can't say I've read Bride of Discord. Is it here on FimFiction? I may have to check it out.

Glad you liked it so far. The next chapter is about halfway done, but I'm working on several stories at once at the moment, so I'm not sure how long it will take to finish.

6912849 I understand and will try to be patient.

Comment posted by immolation12 deleted Feb 15th, 2016

There's gonna be smooches, I can tell. :rainbowlaugh:

:rainbowlaugh: ....


:pinkiecrazy: i see spanish.... :pinkiecrazy:

Awesome chapter!

6938141 Galician, actually. That's the language the Umbrum's names are derived from.

6938681 i thought it was spanish... :rainbowlaugh: i just did, as soon as i saw the word "Si" i automatically thought spanish :rainbowlaugh:

6938801 An easy mistake to make, as the two languages have similar roots. However, if you translate the two new Umbrum names from Galician, you'll get a hint about a few more that will be showing up.

New charpter, yay! :yay:
This was really cool and the suspance is killing me, I can't wait for the next!

Love it!
I can't wait for the next chapter to see what happens next! :yay:

I just realized Celestia could totally counter Sombra's "sewing distrust of the Princesses" move by claiming Twilight volunteered (technically true!), as Princess of Friendship, in order to reform Sombra. :trollestia:

Also, using Galician for the Umbrum language is unique; I like it! :twilightsmile:

7019851 Perhaps, but after seeing Twilight paraded bound through the city, it would ring as a hollow excuse to many.

Well, Sombra is Galician for Shadow, and less common than Spanish or Italian, so it seemed the obvious choice for such an exotic race.

I've read all three chapters that you've uploaded so far and I can say only this: I LOVE IT, I have been looking for a decent Sombra Twilight piece that wasn't either finished or poorly done, I also like how you've depicted Sombra knowing how to play politics!

7033905 Glad you're liking it so far!

Yeah, given his cunning, it felt like it would make sense for him to set that kind of political trap.

Long description too long. :facehoof:

Will read though. :scootangel:

Eeee! I've been waiting eagerly for an update to this! :pinkiehappy:

Twi's obviously going to overthrow Sombra by befriending everyone, duh! :rainbowlaugh:

7087196 Lol, well maybe not everyone. Ira and Baleiro certainly don't seem to like her much.

7087242 I'm sure they just need to get to know her. Nopony can resist her adorkable charms. :twilightsheepish:

Your overconfidence is your weakness."

"And your faith in your friends is yours," he shot back

Star Wars reference!

I love this story, can't wait for more!

7087825 Yep, but definitely accurate for these two, nonetheless.

:rainbowderp:

Oh shit, sombra has a sister... :rainbowderp: everything just got worse for Twily :rainbowlaugh:

Yay, an update! This was really good! :raritystarry:

I am very, very pleased with this update. Yes. Very lovely.

Nothing much to say other than my same old praise as always. And that I wish you'd speed up the update rate for this one, lol -- I'm really interested to see what'll happen next.

Oh -- as for any minor errors, I only noticed one:

It only only to her a moment to locate the source

When Twi is grossed out by the Umbrum cooking meat.

Super duper awesome. I'm loving this story. This shall be the very first one going into my favorites.

7097059 Glad you liked it! :twilightsmile:

Thanks for catching that. It's fixed now.

What? You mean A Somber Tale isn't in your favorites yet? :pinkiegasp:

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