Four
I woke up the next day feeling refreshed. After looking around the room, I collected anything that was mine and went down for breakfast. The delicious smell of cooked food wafted in from the kitchen made me even hungrier, so I took a seat and ordered a portion of hash browns, grilled tomatoes and toast. As I ate the food, it reminded me of my mother's cooking. I miss my parents...
But that feeling went away as i finished my breakfast and bid the innkeeper goodbye. I left Trottingham after gathering up some supplies, and set off out towards Las Pegasus once more. After a while, I stopped for lunch and a rest, and to my utter disbelief, discovered that my wagon had been graffitied at the rear! It was the result of foals messing around, and a good scrubbing would clean it right off, but I kept it there, mainly of what they have written.
The Great and Powerful Trixie.
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Jackson and Carter poured through as many books as they could to find any information, but all the books were filled with either stories of Trixie performing impossible feats with her Godly powers, how elegant and powerful she was, and the list of laws she had formed to help everyone live in a fair society. But there was nothing about her arrival or of the planet's past, and there was nothing about a Goa'uld ruling over the planet.
"This is pointless," Jackson sighed as he tossed another book onto a pile before opening another.
"We should've found something about the planet's past by now," Carter said as she plucked a book from a shelf, glanced at the title, then put it back.
"I wonder if Jack and Teal'c are having any luck..." Jackson pondered as he closed the book he was reading and tossed it onto the pile.
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"And here we have the throne room, where the Elegant and Most Powerful Goddess Trixie holds the daily court to answer the issues of the city and its people. And we're walking!" the tour guide said as she led a small group through the pyramid, with O'Neill and Teal'c hanging back.
"You ever get that weird sense of deja vu whenever she says that?" O'Neill asked Teal'c as they followed the tour group.
"I do not, O'Neill," was the reply from the stone-faced Jaffa.
"Huh, guess its just me..." O'Neill muttered as they walked past a display case containing some kind of purple object. Not long afterwards, the two members of SG-1 came across a hidden door, that someone had foolishly exposed by putting a sign saying 'private' on it. O'Neill rolled his eyes as Teal'c found the switch and opened the door.
Making sure no one was watching them, they snuck through and closed it again. They had emerged in a circular chamber, with a familiar pattern in the middle o the room.
"Sweet, rings. Let's see where they go," O'Neill said as they searched for a switch. Eventually, they found one, and after a brief moment as they tried to guess the combination of the Goa'uld control panel, they had managed to activate them and were transported up high above the sky.
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The Elegant and Most Powerful Goddess Ttrixie pretended to listen to the citizen in front of her complain about the new guests. She was starting to regret to allow them to stay in the city, let alone the planet, but she couldn't let them go. She knew that the portal that they obviously came through only led to Equestria, and if they returned and told Princess Celestia...
"Thank you my kind subject, but The Elegant and Most Powerful Goddess Trixie has an appointment to keep, but I will continue to listen to your problems another time," Trixie said, and the citizen nodded in response, happy that he had the chance to speak to his Goddess.
Trixie rose from her throne and disappeared into a doorway that led to her private chambers at the top of the pyramid. As she entered the room, she closed the door behind her and went over to her bed. It was large, and apparently, it belonged to the previous ruler of this planet. She sighed as memories of her life in Equestria resurfaced. Just thinking about those four and where they'd come from brought up memories of her family, which she would never see again.
But Trixie would never go back. She will win the challenge, and Trixie+plansxcheating=victory...
Or so she thought.
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Hi guys. New chapter.
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What am I doing? I'm popping bubble wrap.
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It's great fun, and it's also good for relieving stress.
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Time for thanks. Thanks to ralfil for pointing me in the direction of a Word substitute. Hopefully the spelling errors and mistakes are less than usual. Thanks to CaptRicoSakara for being awesome and already knowing too much about what's to come. And thanks-
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-To everyone that has liked this story so much that they feel like watching me. That sounds creepier than it should be.
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Also, I gave myself the go-ahead to write a HiE fic, probably starring me, so any opinions/ideas/suggestions are greatly accepted and framed on my mantlepiece.
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Also, I have read Stargate: Equeatria, so stop bugging me about it. Geez... In the meantime, have some bubble wrap to pop.
... Dangit, I ran out of pops...
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Short and late, but I'm also doing something for Overlord-Flinx, and tomorrow is my final day at college and I am way behind on my assignment work.
Please forgive me!
I know about the future? @__@;
...Sweet.
Maybe it will be well-written. Too few are.
(I mean the HiE fic BTW)
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Ack! A talking book! Run fer yer- oh wait, it's you. Looks like you changed your name. Very snazzy.
Anyways, to the reply!
Since when is Minecraft not awesome? I'm not starting the LP videos yet, as I plan to do them when 1.3 comes ground, but it should be soon, as weekly snapshot 12w25a has been released today! Also, do you have Minecraft for the pc?
I can't guarantee that the fic is gonna be well written, but I will try my best!
789410well if this story is anythign to judge form i know it will be
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As for the story line/format of the story i have no idea i have 0 imagenation when it comes to writing or coming up with original content,but i do hope you do something out of the norm and a bit unusual,
exempel if he/you where top take up residents don't use ponyville, you were planning shipping dont use the "main six" (not saying any of these shod not be in it), have him/you be some sort of a power player if that includes magic or just awesome fighting skills, or something else entirely doesn't matter just as he/you can kick some as if need
(but at the same time not be OP in comparison to any protagonist)
Thats all i tips/pointers/idea´s i realy can give at the moment, but i whod love to work as a ball plank to bounce/discuss ideas and thought, so if you come up with something i'm more than willing to devote some time to give you my thought on them.(assuming you care at all wath this random internet stranger thinks of course
"Fragged42" in his story "Over the Edge and Through the Wood" (even tho the story is progressing in a way that suggests ponyville bebe a center part and we know nothing about shipping)
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Nails what i mean when i say "something out of the norm and a bit unusual"
and if anyone reading this haven't read that story you should it's really good and he's update rate seams to start pick up to
As for this chapter, not much to say aswome chapter as useal nuff said,
except there's this one thing i find confusing, Trixie said "She knew that the portal that they obviously came through only led to Equestria"
docent SG1 comming througe the stargatel proving that it can lead to other places or am i just missing somehtign oblivius here and making a fool out of mysealf??
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Trixie doesn't know that the Stargate leads to other planets. She just got lucky on her first attempt of dialling and ended up on P8F-211 by chance. This fact may also suggest that a form of humanoid beings may inhabit the same planet as Equestria, or that human-like beings may have visited Equestria in the past and left behind something to indicate their existence. I will cover more about this in a possible sequel, maybe...
As for opinion about the planned HiE fic, it's hard to do something that isn't original or has been done to death. Currently, I'm bouncing ideas at the wall to see what sticks. And an idea about an entire glue factory from Earth ending up in Equestria stuck pretty well, but now my walls are covered in notes covered in industrial strength superglue. Hmm, maybe I should have done this mentally instead...
793698 okay that makes a bit more sens, having SG1 who is oblivious not from P8F-211 coming though the stargate who'd prove it leads to other worlds unless Trixie seen or heard of creatures similar enough to humans to make the connection/assumption they came from equestria, so that kinda works thanks for claring that up, and is she in for a chock when see learns the stargate to to tousends of worlds, i wounder if she will go mad whit power and try some aggressive expansion..
as for a glue factory it ain't original i can tell you that
but in the end as long as something is well written the content doesn't matter as much
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Cool
MFW I saw a fic that had Trixie playing a goddess:
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Makes sense how Trixie believes that the stargate only goes to one place. She should just get really luckly as stellar drift and such make random dialing near inpossible to get a lock.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Get your fat ass back onto this project! NOW!
I love this, you captured the athmosphere of the team perfectly. trust me, i own all ten Seasons of SG1 on dvd ;). look forward to seeing more from you down the road.
I don't like how O'Neill is roped into the Challenge or how he stupidly insulted everyone. He could have blurted "That's a Horse." and after that held his mouth or apologized or at least make the Challenge something else and the stakes not evicting her from the planet(That is dumb. This Horse thing is something strange and unique. Why aren't there any Goa Uld there, the Horse thing might have some way of fighting them. It's obviously a new type of alien and SGC wants allies more than anything else.)
Sorry, but I can't upvote a story that's roughly 1000 words per chapter including ~50% author's notes that aren't properly marked as such.
That said, I do try to be fair, the concept is good, and the writing is engaging (when I'm not accidentally starting to read an un-marked authors note and getting irritated at being torn away from the narrative), so I'm not downvoting it either. (This site really needs a more nuanced rating widget)
Too short, abandoned in 2012