There's more to you than meets the eye
The next morning, everyone was at the kitchen table, having breakfast. Sunset held Pumpkin in her arms while Adagio sat next to her, wearing a warm smile. Sonata held Pound, and sat very close to Aria, who didn't seem to mind.
Pinkie seemed very confused, after seeing Aria force kiss Sonata, and seeing Adagio stare at Sunset in a romantic way last night, but everything seemed fine. Sure, she was happy that everything was okay, but she felt like there was a lot of information she was missing. She didn't mind not knowing some things, but this was just too much.
"Alright, I'll speak up." Pinkie said, getting everyone's attention. "Whats going on here?"
"What do you mean?" Sunset asked.
"Goo!" Pumpkin shouted.
"One, Adagio looked at you funny last night, two, Sonata is sitting less than three inches by Aria, but she doesn't seem to care."
"Bawa!" Pound shouted before Sonata hugged him.
"Oh, that!" Sonata said, perking up. "Aria and I are totally going out now!"
"Lawa!" Pumpkin shouted.
"You didn't have to say it like that." Aria said scruffily, yet smoothly.
"I didn't know that." Adagio said, still smiling. "Looks like Sunset and I aren't the only ones going out now."
"Hold on a second!" Pinkie said, grabbing a glass of water, drinking it, and spitting it out. "WHAT?!"
"Are you okay, Pinkie?" Twilight said, a little concerned.
"Not only do I owe Rainbow fifty bucks, but I'm the only one still single!" Pinkie crossed her arms, and slammed her head on the table.
"Ooooh." Pound gooed.
"You made a bet with Rainbow?" Sunset asked, not sure if she should be offended or not.
"If it makes you feel any better, I'm still single." Twilight said, patting Pinkie on the back.
"You're a Princess, that don't count." Pinkie said, lifting her head up for only a moment before slamming it back down again.
"If you slam your head one more time, you'll get a concussion." Aria said with a small chuckle.
"Haha!" Pumpkin laughed.
"Hold on, how does me being a Princess have to do with anything?" Twilight asked, slightly offended.
"Duh, because you can totally get any guard you want!" Pinkie said, bouncing up, completely over her being single.
"I don't want to abuse my power like that!" Twilight half-shouted, blushing.
"You wouldn't be abusing your power!" Pinkie said with a huge grin. "I bet any of those guards would love to get hooked up with a Princess!"
"Gaga!" Pound seemed to agree.
"While that may be true, I want someone who would like me, for me." Twilight said, crossing her arms. "Not because I'm a Princess."
"So, a guy like Flash Sentry?" Aria said with a smirk.
Twilight blushed harder. "Well, yes, but I hardly even know him. He works in the Crystal Empire, not in my Castle."
"Oh, the Crystal Empire is back already?" Sonata asked. "Took it long enough."
Twilight raised an eyebrow. "Did you have anything to do with the Crystal Empire's disappearance?"
"No, we didn't have anything to do with that." Adagio said with a shake of her head. "We just watched... and laughed." Adagio said that last part while rubbing the back of her neck with guilt, earning a comforting hug from Sunset.
"Well, everything worked out." Twilight said with a sigh. "Sombra has been defeated, thanks to Spike. He was able to get the Crystal Heart to Cadence when I wasn't able to. He's a hero in the Crystal Kingdom!"
"Did someone say my name?" Spike asked, coming down the stairs.
"Bahahaha!" Pumpkin laughed.
"Hey, Spike!" Twilight said, waving her hand. "I have a little question. Why didn't you say anything sense we got here?"
"I've been talking." Spike said. "I've just been hanging out with Mr. Feathers for a while. That dude is hilarious! Though, he does say some things that I'm not quite sure what it means."
"And you're not going to until you're older." Twilight said with authority.
"Yeah, yeah, whatever 'mom'." Pinkie chuckled slightly. "Whats for breakfast?"
"For you, dog boy," Aria said. "Dog food."
"Yuck!" Spike pretended to spit. "That stuffs gross! Is there any treats around here?"
Maud nodded, and retrieved a bag of doggie treats from a cabinet. She then poured them in a bowl and set it down on the floor. Spike happily ate from it, and left the girls to their conversation.
"So, whats the plan for today?" Aria asked curiously.
"Well, school starts back again tomorrow." Pinkie Pie said with a tap of her chin. "So I guess we're restocking up on school supplies."
Sunset nodded. "Makes sense, which is strange for you. I could use more paper and pencils. It wouldn't hurt to get a couple more notebooks."
"I'll call Rarity." Pinkie said, going toward the phone on the counter. "No doubt she'll want us to pick out some clothes."
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The entire gang was walking to the Canterlot Mall, having already dropped off Pumpkin and Pound back to Mr. and Mrs. Cake. Rainbow seemed less than happy about school starting back, and having to get new school supplies.
"Ugh, do I have to?" Rainbow said, dragging her feet.
"Yes." Rarity said, slightly lifting her nose in the air. "As many paper airplanes you've thrown, no doubt you need more paper. And that pencil crossbow you made? No wonder you kept asking to 'borrow' pencils."
"Hey, don't judge the bow!" Rainbow snapped. "That thing was cool! It was made of pencils, and it shot pencils!"
"If you were going to shoot pencils, you should of at least made sure they weren't sharpened!"
"I'll admit, that was a bad judgement call. At least it didn't hit anyone."
"The teacher wasn't so happy about having to pry it out of the chalkboard."
"It was pretty amazing how it went so deep." Pinkie Pie chirped in. "But why did we still have a chalkboard? I mean, the school can easily afford those Promethean Boards."
"Yes, it would be better than those screeching chalks." Rarity said with a small shiver. "But we shouldn't get off subject."
"You just wanna keep bitchin' at me." Rainbow complained.
"I wouldn't call it 'bitchin'." Rarity said with a shake of her head.
"You ARE bitching." Aria said, chucking.
"Ah agree with Aria." Applejack said, smiling. "Ya are bitchin' quite a lot."
At that point, they were now entering the Canterlot Mall. It was like a small city inside, with wide, tailed floors, hundreds of people roaming the open areas, many small stores on the sides, and a second floor right above that held more stores. To people who weren't used to going into malls, it was quite a sight to see.
But most of girls were used to seeing the sight, except for Twilight, who was amazed by it.
"This is amazing!" Twilight said, looking around. "Its like a city within a city!"
"Cityseption!" Pinkie chirped.
"What?" Rarity asked. "Don't you have malls in your world?"
"No, we don't." Twilight said, shaking her head. "We have market areas, but no malls."
"Well, here at the mall, you can find pretty much anything your looking for." Rarity said as if she was a sell's person. "Sometimes they even have a sale on vehicles."
"You mean that automotive carriage thing?" Twilight suggested.
"Exactly." Rarity nodded. "Anyhow, I think we should split up into groups of two. That way we will get everything faster. Rainbow and I will get ten packages of paper-"
"Why me and you?" Rainbow asked.
"I need to make sure you don't make an army of paper airplanes." Rarity said with a roll of her eyes. "Anyhow, Sunset and Adagio will get ten packages of Pencils, Aria and Sonata will get ten trapper-keepers, don't worry darlings, I'll give you the money, Twilight and Applejack will get ten three-subject notebooks, and Fluttershy and Pinkie will get ten packages of red, black, and blue pens.
"Hold on a second." Twilight said, a little nervous. "I'm glade to help, but you know I won't be attending this year, right? I have too many responsibilities in Equestria."
"Of course, Darling." Rarity said, putting her hand on Twilight's shoulder. "We just need you in this so we can get things done faster. Besides, we're getting supplies for you as well, just in case you need to come back.
"You know, just in case we have another little disaster we need your help with."
"Oh, that makes sense." Twilight said with a nod.
"Good, when we're all done, lets meet up at the food court. Now, lets go shopping!"
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A little while later, everyone got ten packages of everything they needed. They met up in the food court, just as Rarity instructed. Fluttershy and Pinkie got there first, then Twilight and Applejack, then Aria and Sonata, then Sunset and Adagio, and Rarity and Rainbow were the last ones to get there, only because Rarity was complaining about the horrible design of the store.
"Everyone got everything?" Applejack asked, looking around, causing everyone to nod in confirmation.
"Good." Rarity said with a nod. "Now, I think we should go to the clothing store to pick out some new outfits."
"Hang on a second." Adagio said, holding up her index finger. "I couldn't help but notice, you asked us all to get ten of everything."
"Thats because there's ten of us, darling." Rarity pointed out.
"I get that, but Aria, Sonata and I said we weren't going back to school." Adagio said with a straight face.
"Oh... um... you see..." Rarity began to stutter, but then inhaled deeply, and exhaled. "I was hoping maybe you could change your minds."
"And why would we do that?" Aria asked, raising an eyebrow.
"You've all came a long way. Yes, I did hear you girls were going to get a career in instrumental music, but I was hoping you could at least finish high school, and maybe go to collage. There are collages with musical classes, and some collages that specify in music.
"Maybe, just maybe, if you go to one of those collages, then you might be able to re-learn how to sing."
"It isn't that simple." Adagio sighed. "Back in Equestria, if our gems got destroyed, then we lost our ability to sing forever."
"Actually," Twilight cut in. "I think I see where Rarity is going with this, even though she doesn't know everything about your pendents. Back in Equestria, your gems were a part of you. But here, your gems became pendents.
"There may still be hope that you can sing again!"
Adagio sat up, shocked at the realization. She looked over to Aria and Sonata, and seen they were just as hopeful as she was. She took a deep breath, and looked back to Rarity.
"Alright, I'm convinced." Adagio said. "I'll go back to school."
"I hope you're ready for what I went through." Sunset mumbled, only heard by Adagio, who rubbed her on the back in comfort.
"I'll go back too!" Sonata chirped.
"Eh, what the hell." Aria said, hiding her smile.
"Yay!" Rarity exclaimed, clapping her hands. "You won't regret it!"
"For a while, they might." Sunset said, just loudly enough for everyone in the group to hear. "No doubt, they'll get the same treatment I did."
"But that will pass." Fluttershy said, trying to be helpful. "We just have to prove to everyone that they've changed."
"I got lucky." Sunset pointed out. "There might not be another villain attack for them to fight."
"Maybe we can throw a huge party!" Pinkie suggested.
"If the other students know what the party is for, they might not show up." Sunset said, quickly shooting down Pinkie's suggestion. "I know I'm sounding like a downer here, but I just want them to know what to expect."
"Maybe if they see that you're going out with the leader, they'll realize they've changed!" Rainbow suggested.
"Maybe some of them, but that won't get all of the students. There's going to be a few that think I've been mind-controlled."
"Well, at least it'll be a step." Rainbow mumbled.
"Maybe they can participate in charity events." Fluttershy said, inspired. "Think about it, would the old Dazzlings do anything like that?"
Everyone stopped, and looked at Fluttershy.
"Darling, thats a great idea!" Rarity said happily.
"Really?" Fluttershy with with a smile.
"Absolutely!" Pinkie half-shouted.
"I think this will actually work!" Sunset said, much more happier than before. "The school has lots of charity events that goes on through out the year! All we have to do is wait until the next charity event, and have Adagio, Sonata, and Aria participate in it!"
"I'm in." Adagio said, smiling.
"Me too!" Sonata said, smiling even wider.
"Whatever." Aria said with a shrug.
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A little while later, the whole group was at the Canterlot High School statue. Twilight was holding Spike in her arms, standing in front of the said statue.
"I am really pleased with what I've seen when I came here." Twilight announced. "Sunset wrote to me, telling me that Adagio, Aria, and Sonata was being reformed. I'll admit, I was a little skeptical at first, but I've seen more than enough to know that they've really changed.
"I'm also happy that I didn't have to fight anything when I came here." Twilight chuckled lightly. "Its nice to catch up with you girls instead of having to focus on defeating someone... no offence."
"None taken." Sunset said with a smile, Adagio, Aria, and Sonata nodding in agreement.
"Until next time, girls." Twilight said before walking through the portal.
As Twilight was walking through, they could hear Spike asking about what a cunt was, followed by Twilight yelling at Spike in disapproval. Everyone laughed together, Adagio making a mental note to give Mr. Feathers a treat.
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Aww, I'm sad it's ended. But on the plus side, this was a sweet ending to a very fun ride!
A satisfying conclusion. Well done!
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Thank you!
since i didnt edit before ill do it now
sitting
soo many capital letters.
thats all i could find also nice ending
fantastic job!
5858181 Thanks
the corrections have been made
5858190 Thank you
Not a bad end to the story; I'm overall liked it, though I think Sunset's and Adagio's relationship was a bit rushed, and no one brought up Psychonata again, even after Aria and Sonata started going out (they might want to have that particular conversation). As for errors, I noticed you capitalized a lot of words that really didn't need it, such "villain", "college", and "school". Also,
Did you mean to say "skeptical", here, or was she actually skittish?
5858458 I'm glade you enjoyed it. I'm just a beginner at writing and I am quite surprised by how well this story did. And thank you for pointing out those errors. They have been corrected.
5860579 Well, it was certainly a good early story. Glad you went and changed the errors I pointed out; it shows me that you care about your story and want it to look and read well. I look forward to your future stories.
5884887 Thanks
I'm a big fan of the Dazzlings and its great to hear that I did good
5889085 All of my work was done!
5926833 Actually, for when someone is executed by breaking their neck with a noose or strangulation by the same method., hanged is the correct term.
5928141 derp.
sorry. I forgot the Equis VS English word meanings changed. My bad
I love this fanfic
maybe you should make a continuation
very good story
Well, it's good. Though, I don't like that "Adagio is leader and should be good at strategic games, but she suddenly lost" led to nothing.
Damn. Sunset has the best of luck.
ITS OVER!
I liked this, it was fun.
A couple of grievances though(and I'm probably going to get down voted for this):
You seem to use the word "seen" every time the word "saw" is required.
The ships Sundagio and Sonaria seemed to sail in out of nowhere. I know the Sundagio one had some hints to it in the way of some of those jokes between them, but there wasn't enough development between the two beforehand. The Sonaria one had a bit more development before they got together, but not much.
Other than those things, I liked this story. It was fun enjoyable, and I'll probably forget my grievance over the romance thing after I see what you do with it.
Now, on to the sequel!
6816191 Thank you for your input. In truth, Lightning (my Co-author/brother) and I didn't intend for this to be a romance story when we started. But there were quite a few people who wanted SunDagio and SonAria, and we do like to let our viewers "take the reigns" on these things. As long as they don't suggest something that would change the outcome of the story drastically, then we usually do put in their suggestions. We had a viewer who wanted a chapter to have Pumpkin and Pound Cake in it, so we put it in
. We wanted this story to be about The Dazzlings becoming reformed, so this left plenty of room for suggestions. As for us putting in "Seen" instead of "Saw", we are amateur authors, so mistakes like this is bound to happen. We try our best to not let it happen, but sometimes we can't help it. Thank you for your input, and have a nice day (or night, whenever you see this).
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It's night when I'm seeing this and I have to say something:
You call yourselves ameture authors? I call you authors with potential! You churn out this story and call yourselves ametures, and I say this; I have read a few hundred fics on this site and this one is good enough to stay out of the bottom 25 percentile. Keep up the good work, hone your skills, and you could be great.
That is all.
LOL grumpy bitch, LOL Mr feathers
6974415 I will never stop wanting my errors pointed out. I don't care if it's been five years since the story has been completed, if you see an error, I will gladly correct it
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a. It's tradition going back to the first Trek fanzines in the seventies.
b. In most properties for one reason or another the most well characterized characters tend to be one gender. And why would you want to ship an awesome character with a mediocre one when you could ship two awesome characters together.
Hey everypony, as some of you know, Thunder won't be writing much anymore and so he left me the reigns. This will be my first time posting a story and I'll admit most of 'A Dazzling Reformation' was done by him, I just gave good idea's. I'm thinking of using Cloud Filly as my editor as well, but I'm not sure yet. I'm also not sure of what story to do yet, so I would like some idea's from you guy's.
Also, if I have any error's at all or something doesn't make since, tell me and I will fix it to the best of my ability.
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Thank you.
Huh a realistic reformation
I bet this is way too late, but this should be spelled college, I think.
It doesn't have to be blue though.