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Closer-To-The-Sun


You gotta kick at the darkness until it bleeds daylight.

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"Lend me your ears and I'll sing you a song,/And I'll try not to sing out of key,/Oh I get by with a little help from my friends." -The Beatles, ‘With A Little Help From My Friends’

Thanks to Applebloom and her recklessness, Big Mac has a date with Cheerilee on Hearts And Hooves Day. However, he has no idea of what to do and he's worried about the upcoming date. So he and Applejack go around to ask their friends for some advice. Is this even a good idea?


Written for Hearts and Hooves Day 2015.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 13 )

Ah, good stuff in this one. Not a whole lot to say about it, other than I've always been a sucker for CheeriMac; good job Closer-To-The-Sun, and thanks for the cute entry! :scootangel:

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Twilight really need a boyfriend! All for Flash Sentry say 'Yes!'

Cousin helping out family.

How come they didn't ask Spike for advice?

I'm sorry but I was not a fan. The characters were presented as bland, uninteresting and one-dimensional. The story was boring too.

I found a minor thing you may want to edit.

“I actually think you talk with Pinkie Pie, she could give you some excellent tips for conversation with your date.”

You need to add "should" between these two words.

5677942 Fixing now, thanks for pointing it out.

Found a very minor thing you may want to edit, you're missing a quotation mark right at the beginning.

Hiya, Applejack and Big Mac! What can I get ya?”

5677981 Fixed, thanks for pointing it out!

I found one little thing you may want to edit.

Big Mac looked at Cheerilee and noticed that she seemed to put some next effort into her appearance.

That should probably be "extra".

Hey, Twilight. What ‘bout this book here? Fifty Shades Of Hay, think it can help Big Mac out?

Yes this might help with some...ahem...post-date activities :twilightblush:

Asking Rarity for help, a mare who has trouble with colts. This is not going to end well

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