This story is a sequel to A Spiked Hologram
This one day, just after I left my bed, it occurred to me, there is a world outside of my home.
I guess there is a reason why I had been living on the second floor and had a balcony, on which I apparently never had been yet.
Maybe I had merely lived here for about a week, enjoying the Muffins and Cider for breakfast every morning. I couldn't complain, though there is more to life.
Now is the time to explore, just what this did mean to me.
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"Pegasi" is plural, not singular, and you misspelled "curfew" in the chapter title.
5054758 Thanks, nice to you you again, I haven't see you for a long time. It has been a while, hasn't it?
Ah, yeah. As in Rainbow Dash and Soaring?
Sorry about the typo, I'll fix that first thing.
Just curious, what brought you back to see this particular story?
Did I set off your 'Proximity-Alarm', or something?
Thanks again.
5055720 Actually, I was checking my feed, saw this, saw the typos, and corrected them before I realized it was one of your stories. Then it became clear.
Seriously though, you've published over fifty stories and you're still this bad?
You're not related to Cute Kitsune Kaydee/Cute Neko Hibiki/Cute Nightingale Stargazer/etc are you?
5056273 I guess I was triggering the Proximity Alarm, then.
If you are to truelly enjoy a story, you need to turn of these Editorials, or they will ruin every story you ever attempt to read. Is this by chance a work related 'Problem'?
Just curious, am I the only writer whose typos you see on the site?
I guess I do write a lot of stories, then consequently publish them at this site.
To the best of my knowledge, I am not related to any of them.
Since these most likely/ID's, I can't be certain.
If they were and simply forgot to mention they were here, for what ever reason, although I guess e are 'Closet Bronys', so we could hardly expect them to tell either of us who they are?
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I don't think you understand. While it's possible for a novice to write an enjoyable story despite many errors (there are authors I follow closely on this site who have serious flaws when it comes to grammar and spelling), there's a point at which the quality of writing is so terrible that it's physically painful to read.
The quality of your writing is so incredibly bad, if I were your composition teacher, I'd be having a very long chat with your parent or guardian about all the Fs I'd be giving you. And when anyone attempts to give you criticism and help you improve, you blow them off with one of your half-assed "the problem isn't me, it's you" lines like you just gave me. You simply don't seem to want to improve as a writer, and that makes it exceedingly difficult to take any real interest in your writing.
If you were willing to accept criticism and work to improve, then I'd be willing to give you a fair shot. But that's not what you're here for. You're here for instant gratification. You're here to have people tell you how amazing and awesome you are. And I'm sorry, but you're neither of those things. You're a terrible writer who doesn't listen to criticism and doesn't try to improve. When was the last time you even opened a textbook or an online grammar/writing tutorial?
I promise you it's not just me, either. Ask any ten people on this site who aren't close personal friends of yours. At least seven of them will tell you the same thing I'm telling you. You need to work to improve your writing if you want anyone to take an interest in your stories. And I'm sorry, but I'm just not seeing that in you, which, combined with your attitude, is why I'm not going to bother with you. If I saw any sign whatsoever of improvement from when you first joined the site, I might consider trying to help you. But you don't seem to want to improve. You just want people to smile and clap and say "Oh, that's good!"
5056570 I think it may be an idea, I got a look at some of the stories you are following? Maybe it could give me a deeper understanding of what you 'try' to tell me?
Maybe it is good you are not my teacher, then? For the both of us. On the other hand, maybe you could have tough me a few things along the way? I think we have a history together, with discussing among other things, this topic.
Do you mean to say, I have just brushed you of, all along, never picking up on anything you said? With the segment you highlighted, I must point out, you misunderstood what I said. I never meant to say that it is your fault, just that I thought you would enjoy reading more, if you did not automatically correct the spelling and grammatical errors, before you read the story.
I know I have problems with my writing, which is why I have to use the spelling and grammar aids to edit them out as best I can, before I openly publish the stories, which I go over, even after publication in order to weed out what I can pick up on, from time to time.
Even if I write my story for my own pleasure, it is pointless to publish on that basis, isn't it? I may enjoy to see others enjoy the stories, which is why I publish. If I was told a story is pointless, and it is the case, I would drop it. I have done it before.
I have been going over the grammar tutorial that came with the site, if that is what you mean? Otherwise, I haven't been studying these much as of late, in part due to the fact I left school a decade or two ago. If you go my my responses, or the older stories, maybe you could at least read a short story from a resent story, just for comparison?
If the votes is anything to go by, I would like to believe I have done at least some improvement, during my time here. Even if it may be more in atuning to the likes of the readers and marketing management?
Hmm, since you are taking the position of the one knowing everything, I find it odd how you start sentences with words like 'And' or 'But', which I was told shouldn't happen.
You know what, every writer would nothing more than to hear these praises. Just that most of us prefer to have substance behind the words. What ever your impression of me is, I am one of them, I don't enjoy to hear empty praises, just for the sake of it.
I don't know if I have any 'Personal Friends' on the site, for all I know, they merely follow me for my oppinions or they like the stories, either despite the errors you point out, or they never noticed them in the first place?