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Gleaming
The window through which we perceive life is what defines our experience of it. We are only aware of a small fraction of what our senses pick up. We can all choose how we see the world.
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You and your Clop!
You know what this story needs? A threesome.
Heh. Not so bad, Lightning. Did not expect clop, but am not dissapointed. :D
Niiiiiiice.
4840784 Thanks man, I really appreciate it. Means a lot to me.
Still taking requests?
4841225 At the moment, yes.
4841289 This is more of a Mane 6 spying on Spike and his girlfriend on a romantic date 7-shot.
4841417 Uh, wut?
4841432 The Mane 6 spying on Spike to see who is he dating since moving on from Rarity.
4841456 That's kind of creepy.
4841462 You don't even know who Spike is dating.
4841478 Yeah, but I don't know if I would want to write that. I'm not good at romance.
4841481 It's non-clop and I'll give you a hint on Spike's date: Junior Speedsters Flight Camp.
4841504 Gilda.
4841511 You got it!
4841523 Maybe I'll give it a shot. Leave a comment on my page, make sure to read the request format and I could try to write the story on Thursday.
Well, according to your latest blog post, you're right. It has improved from the last one. But, yeah, I think it's best that you lay off from clop until you have the experience to write it. It wasn't great, but it was a decent one at best. No scene felt unnecessary... Okay, maybe that scene where they were target practicing, it would've been better if you kept that out and started in the scene after it.
The only problems I do have is the pacing and the clop itself. Okay, the pacing is decent until the clop scene. I mean, come on, they're going to get it on... Go wild. Go into detail, don't sum up everything they did, but, to your credit, it was a slight improvement from the other clop you wrote. So, I wouldn't expect something well after that. Especially if there's no love story that can tag along with the clop.
So, this was a slight improvement, but, like I said, stick with what you're used to writing for now; and once you've improved (And if you like), go for it.
4841569 Thanks man!
4841624
You're Welcome, my friend.
Interesting use of the word "clitoris"... You may want to look that word up. XD
4843690 Uh...thanks?
Should be tagged humor. This is either brilliantly satirical or hilariously overconfident.
4874881 I'll add the Comedy tag, what did you think of the story?
4874887 I kept on thinking that Cadence was going to nudge Shining into a threesome or some sort of homosexual experience because of that silly guard and the comment about does he know?. I wasn't disappointed that I was wrong, fortunately. The malapropisms during the clop scene and unlikely finish were just icing on the cake. I still can't tell for certain whether I've been amused on purpose or by accident.
4875154 Maybe it was on purpose.
4875159 mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/rsz/mlfw1162_medium.png
4875172 Exactly.
5585628 Because it is cursed.