I'm glad you noticed how strangely kind Fleur was treating Ozzy, and you did manage to turn it into an entertaining, if eye-rollingly cheesy, scene. However, when you find a strange character behavior or plothole in something you write, you have two choices. You either have to really carry it though (Fleur being very generous to anyone she meets in the hopes that they'd be her friend until she realizes that material gain is not a way to earn friends and then there's a big group hug or something) or change it before release. Other than that, not much was worth bringing up in this chapter.

Gotta say, looking forward to seeing how this goes

I think Shinny likes him, he really start with the right foot with her

4760571 Yes, the laws do exist, but how is one supposed to enforce them? It's difficult for the law to say when someone is guilty of discrimination, even when it's obvious just by looking.

If it was me.

*shiny glares*

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That baby looks like Dolan :D

Surely Earth cannot be all terrible.

Indeed, the general state of things isn't exactly idealistic in comparison to Equestria, but there are good things here to be had as well.

Kim Bitchface Kardashian

Would not surprise me in the least if that was her real middle name, what with the way she and her sisters act.

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YEAH!!!

4767740 The kardashians are like turds, they come in different shapes and sizes.

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And smells. Don't forget smells.

I peeked behind the wall to see the two mares, and the first thing that I saw was a deathly glare Fleur’s manager was giving me.

Ah, the beginnings of a beautiful friendship

5132589 I'm sorry but you friendship senses are as bad as spider senses. Also, I don't know sarcasm..... I need to stop reading 60's Spider-Man memes.

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Well actually they start dating and its super awesome

Come to think of it. We never see those maids....are they ninjas?

5132589 more accurate than you think

6700570 I do believe they are, either that or, since they never seem to stay in the house for anything other than sleeping, just go in whenever they are out.

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I preferred to think they were ninjas

5333951 your picture and comment says it all!