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You must be willing to die to protect those you love


After a suprise visit from Sorian leaves Rainbow confused, life seems to go on as normal. But it will soon be learned that it will never be normal again.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 78 )

The title should be:

Rainbow Dash's Pregnancy

Fixed. Capitalization is always important.

That said the story itself isn't that bad.

Comment posted by lunaishot deleted Jul 17th, 2014

Wow. I can't even read the description without cringing. Lack of capitalization, no punctuation, and you misspelled Soarin's name.

Dude really im disabled i cant twrite well

I'm mentally retarded, but that doesn't give me an excuse for any mistakes I made in writing or in anything else. I have to learn how to do better just like everyone else does, even if it means it will be twice as hard for me.

Just because you have a disability, it does not mean you get a pass on mistakes you made!

The story isn't that bad, but it could use an editor's touch.

4710916 Well, we have plenty of editors on the site that can help you.

4710963 You can ask someone to edit the story for you in those group: Editors-R-Us. If you search Editors in Groups, there are plenty of editor groups.

Other than the spelling and grammatical errors it was a pretty good story

...i feel like i read this on FanFiction...

You edited cus it definitly seems like you did

You have a lot of spelling errors. also this chapter moves really fast.

Yeah i have an editor who will be working on that

If by mentally retarded you mean autistic, then yes.

Rainbow Dash looked at rainbow dash.

LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL I am laughing so hard right now!! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

The spelling errors man! i can barely read. But it was still hiliarios about that one mistake. :rainbowlaugh:


LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: These mistakes are hilarios!!!! insta fave!

bechasehe was glad that she was thinking aout it.

DAFUQ? And no offense but did you write this with your face or something?:twilightsheepish:

Fave cuz number one: Hilarios grammer and spelling mistakes:trollestia: (no offense) And also a good story! :pinkiehappy:

Um kinda maby a little bit here and there

Yeah but it will probovly be awile im not as old as you think so i have school coming up so it will be awile:twilightblush:

Jhey evreypony lunaishot is back in action as you know i have promised a sequal so i have created rainbow dashs mothering it will be out sooner than later i promise

"Do you want some wine."

Should have made it hard cider. We all know how much Rainbow loves her cider! :rainbowwild:

he had red lipstick stains all over his face.

Rainbow Dash wears makeup? :rainbowhuh:

Twilight ran downstairs and asked "Spike, whats going on down her?"


"Well let me take a sample of your DNA, do you want a urine or blood sample.

99% of the time it's a urine test. :scootangel:

Soarin blushed and said "yeah, umm.. the thing is, is that i am in a relationship with Spit Fire now,I'm sorry."

Soarin, you man-whore! :flutterrage:

"I'm pregnant and you are the father." Rainbow Dash said,

img4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20140726012540/degrassi/images/1/1b/Maury.gif :trollestia:

I think a lot could come from a beta reader, spell-check, and slowing the pace of the story. I do find it very entertaining, however. :raritywink:


A male widow is called a widower.

but fast enough so that no pony could she her large belly

A lady only looks slightly overweight at 2 months. No one would be able to tell that she was pregnant.:twilightblush:

yeah ill be re-doin the spelling tommorow at 6:00 AM ish

...Why is this in the Spike x Rainbow Dash folder?

Why is this unrelated spikedash story in Spikedash group?

Uh this shouldn't be in SpikeDash group. There isn't even a Spike tag here. Fail.:facehoof:

This is like a classic Rainbow and Soarin ship with a foal

I finnaly fixed the errors in the story so now it is readable :yay:

5414373 its not regestering on my story list

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