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SanityLost


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Rainbow Dash has just passed away and is survived by her marefriend, Twilight Sparkle. Twilight is broken by the loss of her lover, and believes that she will never smile again. Will one last message from her true love be enough to pull her from her misery?

This story is inspired by the poem "Do not Stand at My Grave and Weep" by Mary Elizabeth Frye. A super big thanks goes out to Tyranasaurus0.0, TheStarsGuide, Magiccolt808, and Word-Sight for pre-reading and editing this!

The cover picture was drawn by hombre0 on deviantart. You can check out his page here http://hombre0.deviantart.com/

He says not to give him credit, well too bad. He's a talented artist and he deserves all the credit he can get.

This story is similar to another story I've written so I expect to get flack for this one.

As always thank you for reading, and I appreciate any criticisms that you give!

EDIT: A member named Dimondium created a piano concerto for this story. You can find the video here http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l4uxdzoF6sA&feature=youtu.be

The song is very beautiful and, in this author's opinion, this story does not even compare to the heart tugging power of that song. Thank you Dimondium, you have no idea how honored I am.

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Comments ( 50 )

Beautiful :fluttercry:

I liked it! I really liked your 'When I'm no longer here" Fic, and I thought this was like a 'sequel' to it, but only roughly based off of it. SO, take mah thumbs up, enjoy! :pinkiehappy:

That was a swell little piece, though it doesn't exactly tug at the heart strings like "Decay" does, it doesn't have to either.

You've made a great little tale of loss. It seems kind of odd for Rainbow to think about planning this kind of stuff ahead of time but I'll take it.

Nice work.

This was great! You're a very talented writer. I'd love to see a prequel of the event leading up to it; seeing Twilight's reaction at the accident.
Anyways, keep up the great work!:twilightsmile:

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Thank you so much Mannuccia and TheTrex, recieving your praise means a lot to me!

Thank you so much pro brony, I am really happy you liked that story and this one. I honestly had no idea how the one you mentioned and this one would do. My only hope is that someone who reads this is able to take something away with them after they read it.

Wow Dimondium, you don't have to go through all of that trouble. A WHOLE piano concerto? Wouldn't that take a long time to craft? I am really honored you would consider doing something like that for me, and I would certainly put it here, and on my blog if you did. Again, I am very happy you liked this fic that much.

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Thank you so much RDash! I would actually consider writing a prequel to this story. As it stands, its only a slice of life that reflects just a snapshot of Twilight's situation. I actually had one of my prereaders, Word-Sigh, say that this seems like a powerful ending to a longer story.

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Holy crap man that is really cool! If you could set it up just write you could create entire albums of music in as little as a day! Even if you just sold a few copies you could become a professional musician if you did that, by selling it online. Though maybe I'm too optimisitic when it comes to things like that.

I can't wait to hear it, please send me the link as soon as it's uploaded!

Very sad, yet beautiful.

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Thank you so much Joey, I appreciate the comment!

d'aww :heart: all my manly tears :heart: :fluttercry::raritycry:

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Thank you derpyhoovesfan, let me get you a manly tissue for those manly tears!

Darn good fic. It felt like it stumbled a bit here and there but overall top notch. Also, song link es busted. NEED NEW ONE!

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Thank you very much Digi! I will get a new song link momentarily.

Oh.
My.
BUCKING.
GOSH.
:fluttercry:
I Cannot Stop Crying. I applaud you, good sir (or miss).
:raritycry:
:heart:

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Thank you so much Rozu, I am really honored you liked this fic. I am indeed a sir!

A wonderful story as ever, Sanity. I do not know what to say that I already haven't, but I applaud your great working mind. I look forward to your future stories and to helping you edit them as is needed. My words cannot truly express how my mind and heart have been when reading your works.

Keep them coming as they will never tire to this reader. :twilightsmile:

It's so sad, i do hope that twilight will never forget rainbow dash.rainbow dash is my 2nd favorite pony!i don't really want the show to end. it's a great show and i love it, i watch it every day. even how bad the episode is i still think it's great! it's a shame that rainbowdash died though, i can't imagan how sad the other ponies might feel, like fluttershy pinkie rarity and applejack. i hope twilights still alright to this day because twilight is a great pony!:fluttercry::rainbowderp::applecry::ajsleepy::raritycry:

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Thank yoiu so much stars, I am really happy you've stuck with me through all of these stories. You've been a great help and a friend!

Thank you for your comment FIMWoo, it is greatly appreciated.

D'aww, why'd I read this on Easter? It's my favorite holiday, because I get candy, but now I'm just sad :( Beautiful as always, my friend.

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Thank you Golden, as always I appreciate your praise.

very touching story :) absolutly loved it

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Thank you Necrite, it warms my heart that you did.

Simply amazing.
I didn't think a short story would make shed as many tears as i did.:fluttercry::applecry::raritycry:
What can I say,I am a sucker for sad stories.:fluttercry::applecry::raritycry::heart:

I thank you for taking time to write this.
I hope to see a prelude to this sometime.
I would read it the moment it gets posted.:heart::heart::heart:

422472 I definitely agree with Word-Sigh. I think that it would be great to see this story expand from different angles, despite pretty much starting at the end. Anyways, watched.:scootangel:

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Thank you so much White Cloud. If I ever do something like that you will be the first to know.

Thank you so much RDash, I really appreciate your support. Are you good friends with Word-Sight?

429009 I've never met him.

Its fics like this that make me wish I remembered how to cry, for I always feel that crying is the only way to complete such a heart touching story.

My personal issues with crying aside, very nicely made fiction and I love your style of writing. Very captivating.

I will follow you and check out your other stuff.

Devilblade out. :coolphoto:

I wish I can click the like button more then once. this was beautiful and I want to thank you for writing this and shearing this poem with all of us,

431282 Thank you so much Devilblade, I really appreciate you leaving such a heartwarming comment. It's wonderful comments like yours that make me want to continue writing.

434440 Thank you Fox-Sama, I am really happy you liked the poem. I always thought I was terrible at poetry. But since I came to the fandom, I learned that I was just a little better than bad at it :pinkiehappy: Hehe but in all seriousness thank you.

No words could describe the look on my face, so here's the next best thing.
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Finally woke up to the fact that the track called "Everywhere you are" thats been sitting on my playlist for weeks is based on *gasp* fanfiction. This was a nice little read. And dat last verse... :rainbowkiss: :twilightsmile: I feel a sketch coming on...

Beautiful! I read this while listening to Dimondium's song. I love how you conveyed the emotions in this vignette.

why rainbow dash?:fluttercry: i cant read this without crying, and yet, it is so beautiful. you should know that you are a terrific writer, although, i must say i didnt enjoy your story as much because my favorite Pegasus died, it was still amazing. the poem was beautiful, and it also makes me very depressed.:fluttercry: just wanted to say nice work, *scrolls back up and reads poem again* (five seconds later) :raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

By the middle of the fanfic tears were heavily streaming down my face:pinkiesad2:
But by Celestia mane you sir have written one of the best fics ive read! It actually made me cry harder than MLD!

MR>>434561 you are my favorite writer on this sit so far(sniffle) and if you could keep (sniff sniffle) write more fanfics about the mane 6 and or backround ponies as fillys that would be fan-(sniffle) fantast(sniffle sniffy)-tic thank you for your works of bronyrific magic if no one else I appreceate them

signed,
easonhooves:fluttercry:

Looks like I'm gonna cry myself to sleep again...

Thank you so much.:fluttercry:

i am still as i was on the last comment. i cried again...

Woah. That was the first time I cried from a story. How can a story be so sad, yet so amazing? :fluttershysad: Very beautiful story, I wish I could write that good!:twilightsmile:

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I really need to stop reading these sad fics. I don't think David Tennant can handle it. This gif has practically become a staple of mine

I came back to read this again after so long. I can't say I cried, but I can still feel the feels as bad as the first time around. I stand by what I said about you being a great writer. This is a classic fimfic. And it is awesome.

If you can convince me to play five nights at Freddy's from sadness, I'll give you a moustache because I'm on Night 4... Not ready to screw with Freddy

I didn't cry-but my eyes watered!

I just realized I'm crying to a cyan colored, prismatic maned and tailed magical pegasus dying.

I can't believe I'm that sensitive.

DARN IT I CANT HOLD IT IN!
:raritycry::fluttercry::applecry:

I cried a lot. I think the song I was listening to was a part of it.

Hi SanityLost. I don't know if or when you'll read this, but thank you for this little story. It may not be perfect, but it still made me feel and have a few streams of tears (but perhaps this is 'cheating' since I've been upset and crying a lot in the last day or two). I like how you portray Twilight's emotions, though some of the description is a little clumsy, I think what the writing guide on here calls "Lavender Unicorn Syndrome":
Aside from that, there are a few missing words or grammatical things, but the poem was lovely :heart: I write poetry myself (not well, mind you) but I read that in Rainbow's voice almost imagining it as a song; it had a lyrical quality to it.

422505 Er...do you still have the song? "This video has been removed for violating YouTube's policy on spam, deceptive practices, and scams." I can't imagine why it would have been removed...

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