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It happened all too quickly, one moment we were engaged, the next moment she was sick and then... she was gone; how could anyone ever be expected to deal with that. I just don't know how to cope, especially without my wings. Who is Rainbow Dash if she can't fly?
And who am I without her? I am nothing.
I'm sorry Twi, so so sorry.
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Dat sad
awesome
will there be more?
2053353 Four more chapters, all of which will be posted today.
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sorry im not picking on you and i don't hate the story i like it X3
great story made me cry X3
why is there so meany TiwDash where Twi dies, dieing, gone insane, in a comer or has forgotten everything. why always Twi there are 5 others.
2053489 Twi is easy to pick apart I guess, or rather it often makes for good material.
But if you'd like, I'm in the process of writing a duality in which Rainbow dies and Twilight is left, check it out if you'd like: Letters From the Path of Loss
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i bin meaning to read that
im not complaining, it's just it's always twi and she's the one who goes insain other the littlest things, her going insain over someones death word be very odd.
somehow you made me think of a new story thanks X3
I'm sorry, but I couldn't get even near emotional about the story. In the beginning to end I was so lost at the hell was going on. You didn't really introduce the situation, and your pacing the story way too fast without enough detail to the environment, the ponies, or anything. Your also forgetting Dashie (I call her that) is more strong willed and shouldn't be crying in almost every damn paragraph. I would go back and pace it slower, fill us in on what your not explaining.
2053754 It is written in first person and I attempt to make it as true to Dash as possible. If the most important person in your life died would you really be paying attention to the little details around you? It's feels rushed because the days blur together for Dash, and therefore there are many days that are just unimportant or forgotten. I'm not the one explaining anything, Dash is.
Also, often times the strongest among us are the weakest internally.
Sorry if I came off as rude or standoffish, I'm just trying to explain why it is written the way it is.
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You have a point, but when I read, I kept wondering what's the problem? When I noticed it seemed to be Twilight had died, I was wondering how? Then a couple of times when you mentioned Twilight's name, sorry I can't remember what exact paragraphs it was, I thought, so wait she's alive. I'm just saying that it's a little confusing and I just wish it could of been more informative, cause I did want to feel emotion about it, but I was too distracted with the events taking place.
Also, you didn't come off that way really, anyone would support their story and explain it's purpose as strictly they can.
I just released Echoes, which is probably my personal favorite chapter, hope you all enjoy.
what is this story based on? any specific story?
Hmm, not bad, I'm curious to see where this goes. Nice work.
Just feels
A very nice read, looking forward to more.
Although there is one problem: feels
2054342 It's actually loosely based off of a real life experience of mine.
oh i am so sorry.
2055097 I try not to make a big deal of it, thank for your sympathy though
This was Superbly Written!! I was in tears throughout...
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You're a considerably talented writer. Please continue on with this story-line.
All The Best to You,
Brony and Dashing Proud
Lightning Flash
I read this as soon as I saw it added to Twidash because something about it stood out to me, I was not disappointed. Thanks for letting me reconnect with some of my buried memories, those lost should be left to rest but still be remembered.
Sorry, can't get into it.
Alright, your goal might have been to make it sound like the memories were blurring together, but when it gets to a point of disconnection... that's when you know something's wrong.
I liked the story it was good, I personally think that writing it in first person helped.
However I felt it hard to really get into the story since it was written in present tense, I find that tends to make it harder to read and worse for me. But it was a great story so you get a like from me.
Sorry I forgot to post this chapter last night, I'm quite sick so I guess it'd be easy for this to slip my mind. Also there is a planned epilogue. Thanks to all of you for reading.
2057059 2056554 No big deal, to each his own. We all have our own unique preferences and that makes us human. Thanks for at least giving the story a chance.
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(Pssst, most of the semi-colons were my fault)
2057363 It's all your fault. Dang it bats, this is why we can't have nice things
What a strange, rushed and unsatisfying ending
Really loved your story, but the last chapter is just ... no...
I'd seriously consider rewriting it. The whole 'clipped wings' thing is just thrown out the window?
2059214 Deus ex Machina is probably the term you are looking for, and that's kind of the point. Happy endings happen in Equestria, that's my mantra and that's how I write.
OH CELESTIA THE FEELS!!!!!!
So did dash kill herself or what
OH THE FEELS!!!!!!!!!
I'm Bawling My Eyes Out Here!!!!!
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Such Beautiful Writing!!! Please Continue!! I want to know what happens Next!!!!!
All The Best to You,
Brony and Dashing Proud
Lightning Flash
mind you, but... i'm really curious as to what happens to Dash on the outside world.
does she like, just, falls limb.....and...dead?
'sides, way to NOT have suicidal thoughts eh? :p
Excellent story, tho
That was.... I don't know if I love you for this or not my hart broke 3 times! I love it and I hate that rainbow had 2 go throuh that pain but it made a grate story!
Anyway I ramble on~ I loved the story and reading it in first person like that made me feel the emotion all the more.
...Not bad.
Not good so far, I think, but not bad.
Guess I should keep reading.
Ummm, no...
That final chapter just burned the whole story.
The tears I shed
Love the fanfic
bravo i came
great story
Amazing story, just amazing. Though I've read so many stories like this before, and one thing always bugs me; where are the parents? don't you think they would show up? or be there? and what about shining? surly they would show up eventually. anyway, that's just me. truly amazing story, best of luck with any furture stories you deicde to write.
Man you made me all teary!
You sir or mama are amazing
Beautiful.... is all I can say
And we have closure. Beautiful, satisfying closure. I can only hope the end of the journey is just as beautiful and wondrous.
2114784 I actually planned a scene with Twilight's family, but it was just too difficult to write, so I cut it. I think it's not written much because it's hard to write it correctly.
IM CRYING LIKE A LIL BABY I WANT FUCKING MOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAARRRRRR
The feels!
The story is well written, has a fairly unique (from my point of veiw anyway) perspective on the feelings of dash, and has all the selling points of a good fic, but I can't find myself becoming too attached emotionally because I still don't know how twilight died, after three chapters.
Overall, solid story though
I Only have one major gripe with story in general.
Twilight's death was never explained!
I wanted to hear how it happened the whole time, and was left unsatisfied at the end. it is a well written story, but you really missed an opportunity to connect readers with the plot.
Also, What happened to Rainbow Dash back in Equestria? this left me very unfulfilled and empty, as I never really felt any attachment or real closure was presented.
Sorry if this is insulting, but I am just voicing my opinion
2155205 I completely understand what you are saying, but I felt this information had no place in the story due to it being Rainbow's perspective.
Rainbow never wanted to think about Twi's death, but if you'd like to know it has a brain disease, very quiet until the final stages. Originally there was going to be a medical report, but it felt like it just detracted a bit and I couldn't get it right.
As for her leaving Equestria, one part of me says she ceased to exist, disappeared, and Celestia explained it to the others. However, I am writing a more dark-style alternate ending which I'll put up here once it's finished, it is being very irksome right now though, kinda difficult to write.
I appreciate your thoughts