Spike has just woken up from his hundred-year sleep and realized that none of his friends are around anymore. He is deeply stricken with grief. Can a letter from his wife Rarity, gifts from his friends, and a poem from Twilight Sparkle help ease the pain of their loss?
The cover picture was drawn by Azzurgil on deviant art (http://azzurgil.deviantart.com/). I really enjoyed her work because she does a lot of dragon art (which I am a huge fan of). This story was preread by Criticul94 and Taranasaurus0.0. Not only are these guysawesome prereaders, but they are great writers. Check their stuff out!
When I was writing this story I didn't mean for it to take the turn that it did, however a personal event that happened in my life made this what it is. I hope those that read it enjoy it.
I know what it's like to be inspired by losing someone. I know this person must be amazing if they inspired you to create this masterpiece. This story was simply astonishing in it's quality, and is easily worth a favorite to me. Even the poem was really good, and I'm not the biggest fan of poetry. You did the letters way better than I did in my story, that's for sure. I can't find anything wrong with this story. :O This story was so... :| sad and touching at the same time.
Wow...just, wow.
Why can't I give you 5 stars!?
I cant get over how similar our stories are but there is no way that I could compare my story to yours. Im currently typing this from my ipod in PE so this will be short. You displayed raw beauty and i am very saddened with your burden. This special person of yours is clearly influential and even though i do not know them personally, i want you to know that i will keep them in my thoughts.
These fan fics involving Spike and Twilight always cuts my heart. I'm not much for poetry either but this one took one a certain meaning for me so I decided to keep it. Hope you don't mind.
If you are still feeling inspired, you could do a CMC story when the Mane 6 pass away. I'm not going to read it because I wouldn't be able to have a functional day but I'm sure it would be good anyway!
My eyes always water when I read about Spike out living all the ponies.
Beautiful. Simply. Beautiful. I'm sorry for your loss...
Spike stories like this are always a minor case of heartburn for me. Why I don't stop reading them I have no idea.
Sanity, I'm sorry for your coming loss. I am fortunate to have not yet experienced what you're going through, so when I eventually do, I hope that I possess the strength and ability to cope that you are showing.
Astonishing. This fanfic will take up a new home in the writing gold section of the group "writing gold" so that all may look upon it's wonder and you may know that even if the world turns against your and the odds are stacked against you you may talk me if you wish and I will listen to your sorrows and try to help you through your dark times. Please, if you feel you need to talk about anything especially in these coming months feel free to drop me a message and we'll et you sorted out, ok?
This was heartbreakingly good. Well-done. Went through something like this myself last year. Hang in there, man. Savour the good memories. They will live with you forever.
I haven't started reading, but from the sound of the description, I think I can safely say that I will love it.
One of the reasons is that spike's long lifespan has always been nagging in the back of my head,
Another being that dragons, for me, regardless of their state, always carry around a sense of, well I'm not quite sure how to describe it, I think a mourning guardian's soul for the most part. But, um, I can't really describe it really.
This was soooo sad yert... I relate. Things get better. They always do. Thanks for opening my eyes. Thumbs up.
I haven't even begun to read the first letter yet and I feel his sorrow.
Well Now I've finished I have something to say;
Well, your beautiful art
Is rare and far between
As it has truly touched my heart
Though it might seem obscene
His sadness I feel
Almost tearful is my state
The thoughts and emotions are real
And unfortunately
So is Spike's Fate
I just thought I'd leave it there, I used to say it's the way I appreciate anything good, leaving a poem, however
this lies in an entirely different league, and I now need to go remove those previous half-assed attempts from the other two stories, as this story alone deserves my gratitude, my feeling and my hunger.
...I'm going to be honest with you.
I hate this story.
I hate it not for the theme, not for the genre, and not for how it was written. I hate this story because it means a brilliant writer is about to lose someone close to him. It was already a sad subject to deal with, but this adds a new layer of depth to it. In two thousand words, good sir... you've written something beautiful.
All I can say is... I sincerely wished the situation never arose that you were inspired to write this story. My prayers, admiration, and respect go out to you.
Terrible poet? Terrible poet nothing. You, Sanity, are wonderful. Just because newer styles of poetry are about does not mean you can't write in aged ways. And, you have single-handedly brought a very, very... I'm not sure how to describe it. Awesome? Magnificent? I cannot express it, but know that it is much like what Rarity said: "The quill is not connected to my heart." Sadly I cannot relate as even though I have lost people (and some good dogs) I don't personally feel or think in this way; I'm just not that type of person. I dread it though.
I know that I may be going on too much - but this truly is, a masterpiece. Honestly it's a little short as I would have liked more of the fond words and care that each friend gave. But do not change it. No matter what people say, do not change it.
The only thing I wish to have happened would have been that you asked me to preread this. I would have jumped on it in a heartbeat.
Wonderful writing Sanity,
StarsGuide
Really really heartbreaking. I could almost not bear to read it, but I knew that if I did, I would be a better person afterward. That's what this story does for people.
Damn this is a great story,
and personally i think modern poetry kinda sucks, yours is much better.
This story is beautiful.
244614 At least he didn't outlive -all- the ponies now.
If he had...
Imagine Spike being the last lifeform on the planet, a dead Equestria all that's left.
Dude ur poetry is unbelievable. This is the first story to literally make me cry. Unbelievably good, most heart-touching fanfic I have ever read. It really is amazing because I could really feel you're passion in writing this, like no other story.
GOD DAMNIT, this story is tooo sad, especially while listen to this, if you dont get a feel by this story i would be pretty freaked out
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=epUOoPuiyZM
manly tears were shed
good work, brony.
*brohoof*
This story touched me, I feel for your upcoming loss and will keep you in my prayers. However, you are dead wrong, your poetry is amazing. You are right about today's poetry though, it, along with today's music, sucks.
I'm really not the one to comment on sadder things, but... wow.
That was... well, beautiful. One of the best sad fics I've read. Which isn't much, but still. The poetry was wonderful, as well.
I'm truly sorry for your loss, but it seemed to serve as a great muse... wow, that sounded callous.
Seriously, good work.
Never have I cried when reading a fic, but today....Oh today you have broken me down.
I applaud your fantastic writing skills and I send all that I can in your direction. May the stars watch over you.
No emotions brought forth from this fic. It is well written though, so have a thumbs up.
My dear writer, the only way this could be a poor piece of work is if you put no emotion into it. Even a slapdash story with poor mechanics can be good and worthy, if it only has heart in it. I have read well written 100,000 word epics that lack the depth of a 100 word poem.
And quite frankly, you put a good bit of that spark of life in your tale. This story is filled with depth and the grief is palpable in parts; I commend you for your fine work.
As someone who has lost two people in his life, and one of them should have been me, I can relate. I lay in bed many nights, just wishing things had gone differently. You don't know how hard it is not to pick up a knife or gun or something (I have depression) when you're having fun when all of a sudden you see the name "Seth" or "David" pop up and you're reminded of what happened.
This story was beautiful. I shed no tears, as I have no more to give, but I really wanted to. I thought the poem was great, despite your thoughts on it. Modern poetry has nothing on the classics. Reminds me of a three (technically 4) stanza poem I wrote to lilinuyasha (author of Flutterheart [Diaries]) for stopping me from committing.
All these heartfelt stories... They're popping up on FF.net like wildfires. Not that I'm complaining; it's good to see people writing, but they make my eyes burn (because I can't cry, but my eyes still get hot).
FFFFF-! Now I'm crying like a little girl.
i hate you, i BUCKING HATE YOU, YOU MONSTER!!!! you made me cry!! T.T
i give you 5 stars because i hate you
I'm sorry but i can't do it. MLP:FiM is about happiness not THIS! I'm sorry but I can't continue reading
I HNNG'd so hard, my HNNG, took a HNNG to the HNNG.
:|
Thank you for sharing this with us. Feelings of sadness come with losing such important people, but only because they brought so much joy into our lives to begin with. We should count ourselves lucky for the time, however brief, we have to share with them.
I wish you peace with whatever the future will bring.
Aww Im so sorry about that person you will lose soon. And this was such a sweet story. I wish there would be a sequal about the other letters though too, and I always loved the Spike/Rarity coupling as I think she does have feelings for him, but is afraid to retur them
Just beautiful, totally and utterly beautiful. You are far from being a terrible poet.
I lost it when I began the poem, it being the most moving thing I have read in quite some time. I can tell you that manly tears were shed, and I am not ashamed of it.
If I knew how to favorite this, I would a million times.
Don't worry about the poem. I'm primarily a poet, and I mostly write in free verse. I wish poets vastly more skilled than you would write with the earnest feeling you do. I value and love the honest, earnest heart that will love and lose.
I loved your story, friend, on a variety of levels. At first, Spike and Rarity being married made me say "Meh..." but the way you did it, I think it actually was acceptable and added so much meaning to this story. It was rough, the prose, as you mentioned... but most of what I saw can be forgiven because it's obviously a story written for the personal level. Normally, I divorce the text from the intent when I judge it's worth as art, but this is fanfiction and this is one earnest heart trying to explain itself. You know what?
I think that's alright.
I grieve with you, friend, and pray for you. Godspeed.
A time to be born, a time to die,
A time to mourn and a time to dance,
everything its own season knows.
Oh, God.
You had me bawling with just a few paragraphs.
Beautiful, quality work.
That's how I now feel due to this story.
The manly tears...they're flowing.
Before reading any comments I already know im gonna cry
very very good
the stories where spike grows up and leaves always kill me
my heart goes out to you fellow brony
The whole entire time I was reading this I was fighting off the major waves a sorrow and grief that were hitting me like a meteor, because in May of 2010 I lost my father, who was my best friend in the whole world. Reading this reminded me of him so much because he was the one that first inspired me to start writing poetry. I am have writing poetry since I was about 14 and I am 20 now and with my personal opinion I have to say that, that poem was magnificent, it was a perfect way to end the story. I have read very few poems that have made me cry. Your poem had me so close to tears I could reading multiple times to keep from crying like a new born baby.
I rate this story a perfect 10/10. You did absolutely amazing on this story.
When I read the bio, I thought "Oh no, not one of THOSE stories, there are so many out there." and now all I can say is... Damn. The way that you were able to feed off of your anger, rage and sadness and somehow turn that into a work of art, boggles me. I will admit, I cried un-manly tears, this story hit me deep. When Spike was reading Twi's poem, I couldn't help but hear is as a song, a lullaby... It was beautiful. I need to get a new shirt now, this one is soaked... So until next time, I'll be praying for you, and your friend.
-Derk396
I thought that that was a beautiful poem. Great story by the way. It would suck to live for a long time knowing that your friends would die, but it would be even worse to have to go to sleep, knowing that when you woke up, everypony you knew would be dead. Not-so-manly tears were shed.
It was hard to finish but I did. Bless your soul sir. And know you and your loved one are in my prayers.
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